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8052265 I'm going to romance Peebee if it's a possibility. Always regretted not romancing Liara in the other Mass Effects. In fact I think I romanced a different person in each one, and the game where I romanced Tali got corrupted or deleted or something, and I couldn't keep my helmeted waifu in ME3.
No idea where you got that reference from at all. I was thinking of something totally original. *shifty eyes*
Yes you'll be seeing some of what's happened to the gang in the sequel, but not all of them will be major characters because of reasons.
NOOOOOOOOOO! *dramatically clutch my heart* Please don't end!
In all seriousness, this story is great. You have managed to create a believable universe, and that is one great achivement.
Frankly, I will wait impatiently for the sequel, so take your time. But not too much!
I wild romp. I will be reading the sequel. However without Starlight, the whole Flurry Heart thing coming up, among other things, will make the future very uncertain.
8052340 They had a spare crystal heart while they fixed the main one. No biggy. A fully intended if very minor part of the story.
They also named her Skyla Mwahahahaha!Well i say this story is a masterpiece from start to finish. It been an amazing journey and for that I thank you authour.
Also a small question will there be a short stories on their recovery now that they have returned? Thanks for your time.
PonyBornHuman
i would like to see in the sequel that either the psychiatrist is either corrupt or a fraud or that the psychiatrist was not treating trixie properly but at the very least trixie gets transfered to a different psychiatrist
8052502 I did consider it, including one where Fleur goes with Twilight to the EQG world and observes the version of herself there, only to be annoyed that she's a total bitch, but truthfully, I have a lot of stuff to cover as yet and would rather just get into it. Worry not, there will be some on the gang and how they're all doing at the start of the sequel.
8052368 I totally will romance Peebee.
Purple waifus are the best!It ends. It's sad to even read this. But it was good, wasn't it? Yes, yes I must say it was. Thank you for a very good story, and I look forward to the future. I can't wait to see what happens next.
And yeah, Faust, poor Faust.
8052643
Thanks for the info. I hope our comments inspire you to work at the sequel.
Work harder comrades the motherland demands so.
Thanks
PonyBornHuman
congrats on finishing your story.
Oh boy, so after being six years late to this story and now leaving what is likely a completely pointless comment because it looks like the author is gone from this sight for good, here I am after breezing through this thing in a few weeks.
In short, this was one of the most engaging stories I've read on here and I was completely enthralled from the first few chapters. I loved the idea, I loved the build-up, I loved the world-building, and I loved the uncommon core cast. It was such a big idea for a fic and I feel the plot was well-executed and so much life was given to the story and the characters in it. I have decided to give this story a Favorite which is something I don't usually do simply because of how immersed I was in it and how excited I was to read it. A whole world really was created here.
That said, the first 20ish chapters were easily my favorite part of the story. I loved the early parts where they were really learning about Mareitania and figuring things out on their own. Before it turned into more of a war fic. Before there were so many more characters to focus on. Halfway through the fic, Fleur, Octavia, Summer, and the Filly really did just start to melt into the background. A lot of minor characters and plot points were just kind of left to fade away. Also while I appreciated the fic not shying away from the harsher and more disgusting side of Mareitania there was a definite case of "The writer's barely disguised fetish" at parts. Also it felt like Mareitainia in general changed to become softer and a lot of the worse aspects of it were kind of forgotten about or ignored later on in the story and the tribalism stopped really being important at all. It didn't really feel like an Earth Pony Supremacist country later on, it felt like a medieval/cruel Equestria. The sex jokes and teasing kind of make this a unique fic compared to a lot of other darker adventures here too. The swearing was a bit out of character at points but I didn't hate it.
I also thought through the first half of the story it kind of felt like it was setting up Twilight and Fleur but then that kind of dissolved later.
Basically the biggest issue with this fic is Twilight and Trixie. Trixie's contract signing is stupid, it just is. It's a plot device, I understand how important it was to the story but it's still a blatant nonsensical plot device that shouldn't have happened. It's absurd for Trixie to do something so stupid and it's even more absurd that Twilight and the others let her do that. For so long in the story I was waiting for Twilight or someone to tell Trixie how selfish she's being, how wrong she's being, but it never happens. The fact is that when Trixie killed Vines that should have been the turning point. That should have been the moment when Twilight really put her hoof down.
Instead Twilight is a Trixie apologist. Despite saying she wasn't she really, really, was. She was way too wish-washy with Trixie and kept folding every single time. It was infuriating. She should've been way more firm with telling Trixie what she had done and what she was doing was wrong. She's far too supportive of Trixie and takes her side when she shouldn't, when Trixie shows no remorse, no regret, no understanding or desire to change, it's utter nonsense. Letting her continue to use dark magic, not standing up for her morals, defending Trixie all the time when Trixie flat out does not deserve it is absurd. Why did Twilight never try to tell her that all Vines was was an ordinary pony angry she had lost her parents just like Trixie? Why was there no introspection there? Why did Trixie just get off scot-free with that?
That's just one problem with Twilight's character. The other is she's far too weak-willed in general. She compromises far too much. Compromise is usually a good thing but the way Twilight does it in this story is horrible. She compromises her morals, she compromises what she knows is right, she never says no when she should because she wants to take the easy way out instead of sticking true to herself or try and fix things in the right way. Yeah it's war and sometimes she does this to keep as many ponies alive as possible, realizing she can't just hope for friendship and smiles to save the day here isn't a bad thing, but then there's stuff like letting Hot Pot be executed and letting Snowbright kick her out of the country. And she never stands up for herself. I thought when she died and saw that vision that it would be a turning point for her character, that she would realize she's been too cruel and done things she shouldn't. that they need to be better, but instead it's completely ignored.
Besides that there were only some minor pet peeves of mine like Faust being named Faust, Swordy and rune magic that can do all that stuff with it, Luna getting that involved, etc.
I did love to read the story, Twilight and Trixie just frustrated me. And this epilogue chapter was needlessly cruel to her friends.