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Hey, just a general tip for writing things like this, try to keep the big exposition down to a minimum. It creates suspense for the reader, as they learning more about how a nation works is interesting for the reader in a similar way to finding out which of the potential side characters a main character will date in a romance, or who will win in an intense fight in an action. But you have to make the reader care first. Why does a reader care if Joe ends up with Sally or Jill if he knows nothing about any of the characters? You should reveal small amounts of information in the beginning, making the reader care about the world you're building, before revealing everything. Because the way you did it, not only was it not something the reader's curious about, it's actually boring. Also, it makes things easier to change if 50 000 words in you decide it'd be useful to actually have the pegasi be military slaves or something which they couldn't be according to what you've already revealed.
You really captured twilight snarkle here
so there basically pony north Korea
so far, so good...
Twilight doing some CIA/KGB covert operation of toppling a regime? Well, I'm interested.