When Twilight decides to study the magic of non-pony races she inspires a Changeling sorceress, named Amber Fire, to break out of a Las Pegasus prison and travel to Ponyville. Meanwhile, Lyra Heartstrings is returning from Las Pegasus distraught over being single for the first time in years. The two wind up sharing a train car to Ponyville, and it becomes clear to Lyra that this "Unicorn" knows something about humans. Determined to learn everything her new friend knows Lyra winds up getting closer and closer until eventually she learns not just one but two deeply hidden secrets.
(There isn't actually a Pony Souls I, the title is just a joke at bad titles and a hint at the cross over elements. Retitled because I thought of a good one at last.)
I like this story, it's well written, some spelling and grammar errors here and there, but nothing that takes away from the story. I look forward to more.
5390554 Luckily for you I also like this story and am writing more :3 As for my spelling... I'm mildly autistic, this as good as I can do. If you know any editors let me know!
I have a question.
WHY CAN'T I CLICK THE LIKE BUTTONBUTTON THOUSANDS OF TIMES, YOU PUNY MORTAL ADMINISTRATORS!?
5403256 Wel you could unlike it to like it again :P Thanks for the comment. May I ask why you like my story so much?
It's good, but you should probably get an editor. So far, all I've seen are common spelling mistakes such as red to read, and dose to does.
You just had to pick Dark Souls 2, didn't you? That's my least favorite one... :(
5403646 Unfortunately, I have not yet played the other two, and I cant exactly write a crossover with something I don't know. Sorry :c
Do you like the story anyways though?
5403569 I'm looking for one :3
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I barely ever see any stories or games or movies or fanfictions where someone bothers to explain the magic system, I love the aspect of the songs and how Amber Fire can drop all these references, and they idea of changelings having their own magic system, however logical, I rarely in any wway other than they have a different power source. So most of this is I rarely ever see these sorts of things in anything, but I love the ways that they can take the story.
5403990 I haven't actually read it. :p
I am fully expecting an awkward confrontation between twilight and Lyra and amber.
5407139 I have writers block, please tell me what you expect, it might give me a direction to go in.
Still waiting for the public reveal by Twilight, with Lyra coming to her defense.
5410916 Stay tuned, 1000 words to go :3
Yessssssss. YESSSSSSS. YESSSSSSSSS! YESSSSSSSSS! YESSSSSSSS! YESSSSSS!
5436040 I take it you like the chapter?
5436223
Yessssssss. YESSSSSSS. YESSSSSSSSS! YESSSSSSSSS! YESSSSSSSS! YESSSSSS!
5436231 What was so good about it :3 ? I love feedback you know
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Forementioned reasons.
5436281 Gotcha. Well you will like the one im working on now then, mabey. Possibly. Kinda.
Well, healers are kind of OP.
So it shouldn't be too bad... all Amber has to do is to jump up, let the enemy soldier run into the wall, go down again just to jump to the left again because she realised the missing magi has thrown a spell at her, then to charge to him with the sword the soldier helpfully left behind, to get stopped by a forcefield that gets destroyed by 1 of Chrysalis stray magic-bolts.
5438679 Someone likes my fight scenes I see! Feel free to PM me more suggestions... I'm in some writers block and looking to finish a chapter today.
5438687 What I just wrote came out of nowhere, and unfortunately I don't know where my suggestions have to begin, so I'll ask:
Is it for a fighting scene?
If yes, then I'll try to give suggestions for a battle between Amber and the Magi or something else, if no...
I never was good at giving more than general suggestions in that area, general suggestions like "How about they go to Sugarcube Corner and eat some cupcakes?" so they probably aren't helpful.
5438715 I plan on this battle lasting for 2 more chapters then have a chapter of epilogue. Suggest anything at all please. My ideas are flowing as quickly as a snail covered in Molasses in the dead of winter.
5438776 I should have send the suggestion now... and if I didn't, then I'll write later another, but for now I am too tired... why am I not sure it wa sent? It didn't show up at my 'Send'-messages. Good night... they should add a yawning smiley
Wow... not sure why this non crossover story has an author's note talking about Dark Souls... *double checks tags* Nope, not a crossover.
5403569 You missed 'to' to 'so' and 'from' to 'form'... God I hate that one so much.
5442096 those two were only as an example.
5442096 Oops. Guess I removed the cross over tag by accident. Thanks dude.
Really? That's why you don't have holes? Just like how you didn't have holes during your interview with Twilight? Before the guard gave you that flask back?
5442610 Amber lies. It's a character thing.
5476435 Oh shit! have I forgot to post chapters? Oops, hold on.
You cannot have multiple monarchs. It is a tetrarchy and they are tetrarchs.
5514066 That's the joke.
That pony is a spy!
