• Published 29th Apr 2012
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Miasma - The Young and Free Dragon

Based on Stephen King's the mist. A strange mist covers Ponyville, full of monsters.

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Damn, this shit's getting freaky!

Well I just lost my bet. I was thinking AJ would be the one to kill Trixie. Damn...
Okay now I'm betting on Twi.

798540 I agree, I would have preferd if Aj live as well, does it make me sick as buck to admit that I honestly like Applejack/Big Mac? I mean I did not have one problem with the clop in it, and I thought it was very well made....of course I'm an only child and I'm twenty years old but ANYWAY.......perfect job, Free, I'm hoping to see more...on a lot of different stories that you have written as well as this story itself....poor Derpy, I still miss her....damn.

NNNNNOOOOOOOOOO DERPY AND APPLEJACK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :raritycry::raritydespair::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage:

So is this story over? Because I'm enjoying the hell out of it.


Ha ha, I really hope not. I've been distracted though, and haven't been able to find my notes for the next chapter. I'd really like to continue it though, it's been a lot of fun to write.

*sees that I'm still the newest comment...*
Anyways, I caught sight of this. "Please leave a comment or send me a message to tell me where you want the story to go. Read the beginning of the story, or my latest blog post to find out the details." So I'll put my two sense in... :derpytongue2:
First of all, you need to find Spike. I think you should have Twilight keep everyone calm and secretly plan with her friends to go find Spike. (Please do kill off as many as you please... But not Twi!) Then they could find him inside of a nearby store, Carousel Boutique perhaps? (Alive and unharmed preferably!) Now, while they're gone Trixie could have time to take over SCC and turn everyone against Twilight, as in the movie. However, I would recommend dragging out the search and rescue for a few chapters. This will not only give Trixie time, but will keep the readers on the edge of their seats as Twilight and her friends face newer, and more evil horrors.
Oh, and don't you dare ship Spike with Rarity!!!... But that's just my personal opinion...
Let me know if you want anymore ideas. :twilightblush:

I'll be disappointed if this story doesn't get continued, I really do enjoy it so far. Just about everything has been tastefully done (except, really, the clop scene. It was well-crafted but just seemed sorta shoved in there for absolutely no reason) and the characters, for the most part seem to accurately reflect the ones in the movie. That said, I don't really get the feeling that they're accurately reflecting the characters from MLP that they're supposed to, with the exception of Twilight and, sadly, Big Macintosh in his stoic silence (also: god damn if that wasn't comical when he did his 'longest nope ever' thing toward the end... I actually laughed at the mental image of that), so this is pretty strictly one of those crossovers that's literally just a reenactment by ponies. Not the best way to do crossovers, but still very entertaining. I say keep at it, really, it's a suspenseful story and, even though I feel like I know how it's going to end (being a fan of the movie and book) I still want to see the way you handle it, so don't let this trail off into nothingness! I know first hand how easy it is to let that happen :raritywink:


What's up with this fic!?
It's so...so...bloody and yet so incredibly good!
I hate trixie! and if the fic is going to end like the movie, then....

Wow......just wow....

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