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Spike's Heartache

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the ninja king

the ninja king #1 · Nov 19th, 2014 · · ·

Spike is nuts!

deadpansnarker

deadpansnarker #2 · Nov 19th, 2014 · 4 · ·

1. How did Rarity managed to walk out of the house without any hooves and 2. Why didn't she try to escape, instead returning to the scene of the crime to be killed?!? Also 3. Considering she has a horn and spike is just a little runt, why didn't she just levitate him out of the way before leaving? AND 4. We're led me believe she was never restrained in any way. So there was NOTHING stopping her from rushing off. Also, this was terribly written, with no sense of plot progression, and even the gore angle seemed rather underplayed. And since when has Spike preferred mare hearts to rubies?! This story is one big FAIL. Do try harder next time...

Blackguard

Blackguard #3 · Nov 19th, 2014 · 1 · ·

A story with a total lack of any real plot, pacing or logic for that matter.

There are plot holes large enough to drive a truck through, scenes that make no sense whatsoever and what appears to be gore for the sake of gore. It's not even like it's well written gore. It's just there for the sake of being there with no rhyme or reason.

You really need to try harder.

Some random Rapidash

Some random Rapidash #4 · Nov 19th, 2014 · · ·

This is horrible.

Rainedash

Rainedash #5 · Nov 21st, 2014 · · ·

There aren't enough details here for this to even be disturbing, or coherent plot for that matter. This is like shock value without any shock and gore porn with very little gore. That makes it... kinda pointless.

TurboTheGameGuy