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Tindalios
Just somebody who likes to make stories about stuff, that's all!
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HOLY SHIT WHAT THE FUCK THIS IS LITERALLY WORSE THAN HITLER
The prose needs work, and the story sounds maybe a little over-ambitious, but I really don't want you to wind up with just the comment below on your first story.
Welcome to Fimfiction, and please try to enjoy yourself here. It takes a lot of practice (some people say 1,000,000 words) to get good at writing, but you're already at least 10,000 in. If you enjoy writing, I just want to say please keep doing it, for its own sake. Eventually, it'll pay off!
Keep trying.
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but hitler did nothing wrong
this shit is worse than obama
5260133 Go back to /pol/
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The summary contains a run-on sentence literally longer than I am tall (about five feet.) Please address this before I delve into the story. Thank you.
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This.
Here, author. Let me edit this for you:
Also, let me point out that Blastmaster Fire-strider is a really corny name.
5266397 Indeed.
5266527 Wow, wow, wow! At last! Some good criticism! And...
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I'm sorry if I killed your eyes or something.
Anyways, about the first part... Yes, I need to use more periods, but I have a little habit of using too many ellipsis, some people I have RP'ed before, have noticed this, and I'm trying to minimize them to the very least.
The second, I have to admit... I was not really creative with the name, and I do know how OC's work in here, no one would call him by his full name, anyways, so he can be called "Blast" or "Strider", and I guess it's pretty bad that this story is getting so much backlash for just that name. He is not that special, and it's the first chapter... It's like everything should've explained in the first chapter. I think I should have done this instead of leaving information until the end. Now THAT'S my fault.
The third one. Another thing I didn't explained... He is a descendant due to (classified), and the War God is (classified), I'd like to explain this further, but this would ruin a bit the story. Maybe I could have revealed everything on the first chapter. 100% my fault.
The fourth one. Well... the character has lived all his life there, filled with violence and everything and he needs his peace, I can't keep him in there at first! And of course, other characters will visit that place, I just need a couple of chapters and we are on it!
The fifth one. I really don't know how I will pull this off, but I might try it... the idea I wanted to do is for Blast to have an (classified). Like I said, I don't know yet...
The sixth one. Hmmm... I really should mention that in the first chapter, but right now... He just wants to be (classified). I need a lot of work on this to work properly.
Now, bear with me, I'm not a perfect writer or anything, even my English is not native (I guess this is no excuse for my mess-ups), but I'll try to work on the first and second chapter, to make it more presentable, I'm not going to erase the story or anything. The dislikes will remain, heh... I was kind of laughing when I found out I got featured in some sort of "so bad it's good" story thing.
Maybe a bit of help from a veteran in this place would greatly help me.
Thank you for taking your time to write this reply! Much appreciated!
EDIT: Oh! And...
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Thank you for the fix! Will do use it when I have time! I can't really edit stuff in here right now, I heard you bump the story when one makes fixes in here, not wanting to turn this too suspicious or anything to not get banned. Anyways, thank you again!
5268700 I was only semi-serious. Don't take it to heart lel
5268700 This story is going on my shitlist.
5268700 I do not know how to respond to that. (Oh, and giving out spoilers for an incompleted story even before it's completed kills that story. I should know.)
5270301 Oh no! I actually laughed at your comment! But good thing I didn't killed your eyes, I don't want to live with dead eyes in my conscience.
5271628 Yay?
5271635 Well... A bit of explanation was required to show you that they are not over-powered characters. When the story advances, you'll know what I'm talking about before judging it already from a single chapter, it's unfinished for a reason, and a very good reason!
Thank you for your comments!
5272005 But still, don't reveal spoilers. It kills an incomplete story. I should know from experience. Besides, we all like surprises.