Faster.
Faster.
Someone banging on the bathroom door wakes me up. Opening my eyes, I squint at the bright lights clouding my already blurry vision and vaguely wonder why my head hurts so much.
Oh yeah, fell down after hearing a pony princess in my head. Right.
I slowly sit up, feeling dizzy, and try to focus on the voice I can hear coming from the other side of the door.
“Is anyone in here? Are you alright? …I swear if it’s a couple of kids in there who snuck in to smoke or fool around, you’re in big trouble!”
Shit. Shitshitshitshitshit. If I get caught in here, I’m never going to hear the end of it. I wince as the pounding against the door continues. It’s Ms. Winters too, the one teacher I actually sort of like and don’t want to piss off.
Somewhere in the back of my mind, I can hear its… Twilight’s voice panicking as well. I do my best to shut her out, that’s hardly going to help now. Probably imagining it anyways… Probably.
I clumsily stumble up off the ground and grab my hat from the sink, yanking it as far down on my head as possible. Looking around, my eyes settle on the mid-sized window that opens up to the woodsy courtyard out back. Better than nothing.
With a nod of confirmation to myself, I unlatch the window and push it open, before hoisting my bag out of it and slipping out behind it. Dropping to the ground, I place my hand against the wall to steady myself for a moment, and then grab my back and double time it away from the school before anyone catches me. It’s a twenty-minute walk back to my apartment, but better that than risk one of the bus drivers ratting me out. In this town, everyone knows each other.
I note with blessed relief that the buzzing noise flitting around my head has stopped. Maybe she’s gone for good… I doubt it though.
Either way, I need an Advil and access to a computer to research signs of Schizophrenia. I already know hearing voices is one, but I somehow doubt most people hear cartoon horses talking to them.
The minute I unlock my front door, I slam it behind me. Screw trying to keep a low profile so that the neighbors don’t see, this headache is starting to kill me. Throwing down my bag onto the table, I yank open the pantry door and rifle through until my search turns up my prize. Taking a pill and swallowing it dry, I close my eyes and vaguely feel myself slump to the ground, back against the kitchen counter. I realize I’m shaking, and do my best to take deep, calming breaths.
In, out.
In, out.
I don’t know how long I sit there, but eventually the worst of the headache starts to recede. Unfortunately, that apparently seems like an invitation to my new resident head-voice.
Are you alright?
I moan and bury my head in my knees, feel myself rocking back and forth slightly. She’s still there, she’s still freaking there. I’m crazy, completely insane. They’ll lock me up in some psychiatric ward and keep me there to the end of my days. I won’t survive in a hospital. Mental patients aren’t allowed tech, are they? I won’t last without my computer. Oh shit, oh shit, oh shit…
Stop it! I can feel you panicking!
A hysterical chuckle escapes me before I can tamp it down. “Sorry princess, but given that I’m talking to a fictional horse inside my own head, I think I deserve to panic a little.”
I can hear her snort.
I am not fictional! Though how you know my name is incredible…
I sigh. “It’s not, it’s really not. Jesus fucking Christ, I’m really talking to a Twilight Sparkle in my head. If Mum finds out just how far round the bend I’ve gone, she’s going to kill me.”
You aren’t crazy. Please, allow me to explain. My name is Twilight Sparkle, and I have come to you from Equestria because-
“I know who you are.” I mutter, cutting her off. “Which doesn’t exactly assure me I’m not losing my mind. It would be like me to dream up a pony that talks to me, though why I would pick the one that would complain about my lack of focus in school I have no idea.”
Well, I’m sorry, but I do think your attitude towards learning is appalling. As much as I believe in everypony to their own ways, you are obviously gifted and just not bothering to try! I could sense that you understood all the answers in class far faster than the rest of your peers. You just don’t care to participate!
I groan and flop properly to the ground so that my head is resting against the pleasantly soft carpet. “Great. Not only am I stuck with a pony princess, I’m stuck with a prissy one at that. Dear God I never really bothered to believe in, please send Fluttershy instead, she’s less annoying.”
Hey! We’re supposedly counterparts, so we’re stuck with each other for now. We might at least make an effort to get along!
“Alight then.” I mumble. “Hullo new figment of my imagination, I’m Andie. Welcome to Earth.”
That’s an unusual name.
I roll my eyes. “That’s what bugs you? Not the fact that you’re on Earth and not Equestria? Andie is short for Anderson. I don’t like Grace much, so I use my last name. Any questions?”
Quite a few, actually, but I imagine you have a few more pressing ones.
“Wow, a Twilight Sparkle that lets someone else ask questions before her. That’s a first. Right, my main question would be: Why are you in my head, and how can I get rid of you? Actually, strike that first part, I don’t think head-voices normally have a reason.”
I’m in your head, because apparently we are counterparts in this world and mine. You can’t get rid of me, I’m stuck here until I find the girls and track down the one we came here after.
“And that would be?”
That’s the thing actually… I don’t really know. Assumedly she’s out here somewhere, but she’s likely managed to retake her original form from this world… and we don’t really know what that is.
I snort. “Sure, ok, fine. Excuse me if I find all of that very hard to believe.”
I hear her sigh.
Why are you so insistent that I am nonexistent?
“Wouldn’t you be if you woke up with a voice in your head?”
…Fair enough. Though, honestly if I’d known I would be only occupying this world as a mental state in my counterpart, I would have prepared some sort of demonstrative proof that I am real.
I slowly pull myself to my feet and begin a slow trudge over to my room. I need a nap. “You keep saying that. What’s a counterpart?”
Equestria and your world occupy different dimensional planes of reality. However, every dimensional plane is more or less made up of the same brands of magic, so each unique essence that matches up between dimensions resides in one’s counterparts. Basically, if you were to define my essence as ‘element of magic’, for example, then your’s would be too. Apparently, jumping the gap the way we did linked us with our counterparts, as outside forces from one dimension cannot normally exist in another. So voila, I’m in your head.
I yawn. “Great story, Twilight, but that doesn’t exactly convince me you’re real. That’s hardly much different from some of the weird theories of existence I’ve thought up when I’m really, really bored. Besides, my world doesn’t have magic.”
How do you explain my natural highlights in your hair then?
I freeze with my hand on my doorknob just as I am about to enter my room. “Trick of my rather messed-up brain?”
It’s a physical marker of my presence in your mind, possibly not even the only one. The longer I’m here, the more aspects of myself will entwine with you.
“So what?” Fuck, am I actually starting to believe this? “Am I going to sprout wings or something?”
She doesn’t answer.
“Twilight?”
I… I don’t know.
I shiver slightly and force my door open, shutting it firmly behind me. “Well that’s bloody helpful.”
All of a sudden, I can feel Twilight’s own fresh panic bouncing around my mind.
Why is there a picture of Rarity on your wall?
I blink. Oh… Right. That. Shit.
Ignoring her, I slide into my bed and wrap my blankets around me. “Give me a few hours, oh prissy pony princess voice in my head, and then I’ll explain to you the reason why I know who you are, and about the wonderful television show you’re a star of.”
I fall asleep with Twilight’s panicky questions ringing in my ears.
This is intriguing. I'll read the new chapters as they're uploaded.
This is a pretty interesting concept.
I have to agree, this is a different take on things, and I am curious where it will go.
THIS-----^ This story here. This has the potential to start an entire universe of stories. So I have but one more thing to say.
Yes.
Whoaaa this has five score potential keep updating his because this seems like it can get big so far I'm REALLY interested
this is a great story i eagerly await your next chapter. i am curiuos though did you get your inspiration fron a really good fanfic called "five score,over four" if so this story is going to be good even if not this story is still going to be awesome
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Nope, while I've heard of that story, I've personally never read it... So, any similarities between the two are really just coincidences.
5257660 ok still this story is going to be awesome i eagerly await your next chapter
UMG IZ ZO GREHT UPDAHT PLOX
Two words for you: fucking. brilliant.
Clever premise. Tracking this now, please do not disappoint.
So, Grace with Twilight Sparkle in her head likely has to go out and find the remainder of the Mane 6 who will be inside the head of someone else who may or may not possess similar personality traits on top of some kind of physical marker indicating which pony is in them. After that, they have to find someone else who base on what I read could be capable of acting independently with full access to whatever power they have, and they may or may not be evil.
If that's the gist of what this chapter has revealed so far, then it should be interesting to see how this all plays out.
Good job so far. I am interested to see where this is going.
I usually tend to stay away from these types of storues, but geez, this is incredible. Please don't keep is waiting for more chapters.
Aw, man! I had an idea like this a long time ago, but never thought it good enough to write. Then I see this...!
Aw, well. If anyone has done it, I may as well read it. Probably better than anything I could write.
EDIT: Oh, wait, my mistake. I thought this human would be in Twilight's head, too.
5257660 This story is almost an exact mirror of Voice in my Head and i love it
OHMIDOG, FUCKING FAVORITE!!!!!!!
5257660 five score is basically a ~300k monster of a tf story that was so good fimfiction had to ban any more side fics because there was too many so i hope this turns out to be a bigger story then your one-shots because i can see great potential in this story c:
The cliffhanger has us heading for one of the scenes that passes for common in the not-so-common field of ponies on earth. Prose is good enough that I'm sticking around to see your take on it - I don't see anything particular in the setup here to hint at anything massively out of the box for this fic's approach to showing the ponies their own TV show, but there's always room for surprises.
I'm having fun so far regardless, so whatever.
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Unfortunately, I doubt I'm about to do anything clever with the scene involving Twilight and her being in a television show, (I don't honestly know what the norm is, I don't read to many ponies on earth fics) It's really just more of a required part in a story like this, and something I need to get out of the way to move forward with the story. Not that I won't try to have some fun with the scene, but I doubt it's going to be spectacularly brilliant.
I want to see more of this awesomness!!!
Well, that was pretty fun to read so far. I will definitely read on! Have a hoof up.
this story is so much fun I've never laughed so much before just because of reading a story. I realy that story. would you be a dear and keep writing that Story.
Interesting. So the rest of the Mane Six are in other girls' heads? I can't wait to see how this turns out.
you hypocrite! before you remove the pony from your brothers eye, first remove the branch from your eye. then you can see clearly to remove the pony from there eye.
Not to be a jerk for only making this comment, but:
Aside from the fact that I talk to myself in my own head way to much.
Should be too*
Well made, well done, and a well explained take on the whole voice in my head thing, good work.
~The D.j.
5262550 People won't pass out if they're hit by a car, they won't pass out if they're in a plane accident. The human skull is really bloody durable.
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Eh, tile floor, plus shock...
It could happen.
I've seen one of my idiot friends give herself a concussion just from running into a metal pole, so anything's possible.
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Ack, thanks. It's always the little things I miss.
Ugh. Please, please get rid of that.
It is completely stupid to have, if I'm honest.
If it was an EqD or Twilight's Library posting, then I could understand. Anyway.
This looks interesting, frankly, and I think I shall take a read.
~Skeeter The Lurker
Fascinating...
You've the makings of a pretty good story here. A bit quick, but otherwise solid.
~Skeeter The Lurker
This is the funniest story i've read so far! I LOVE IT!
High-Octane Nightmare Fuel.
Pretty interesting so far.
That entire fitst paragraph of the description is me in a nutshell. Have you been spying?
Lolz!!
This reminds me a little of Five Score Divided by Four but has an original twist to it. I liked that one and so far I am enjoying this one. Keep it up.
Different, new, interesting....I HATE IT!
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IM KIDDING BLOODY BRILLIANT! HASKILL! FETCH ME MY FINEST CHEESE!
Oh...that hair....I may hafta...cut it off and mount it on my wall! Hoho!
Heh, small world.
I had this literal idea in my head for the past month or so but was busy with other stories.
Well, I'll just toss that into the bin of things I'll never write. Go on and write a masterpiece for us!
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Five score was okay. I felt it hamstrung itself with the authour's choice to have the ponies completely subsume their (admittedly artificial) human counterparts. There was the opportunity to have a very interesting man-versus-self conflict alongside the more mundane man-versus-man conflict, but it was sadly never explored once both parties joined up together.
I hope that in this story, the two remain separate, even as more physical changes occur. Having Twilight teach Grace to be more engaged and friendly (that's an assumption that she's not, as we haven't had any interpersonal examples in the text) is perfectly fine, as would Grace getting Twilight to loosen up a bit, but the two should remain separate.
Hm... it has... potential. Not sure if Andie is too acerbic or not, could go either way at this point. Be careful with Twilight; she tends to be a character of premature exposition what with how she likes to lecture and explain things.
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>> once both parties joined up together
You might be thinking the Ponyearthverse. In 5 Score they didn't have headvoices or merge with anything that I recall. Except Sweetie Belle who managed to wallhack Discord's enchantment. That was a plot point in the end, when they didn't even know if they could fight in Equestria without having known it.
Is it me or she is going to drink alot of alchohol and twilight be all no it is bad for you nuuui : Hahahaha i made myself laugh in the middle of class
This is most definitely a unique concept, lets see if you can spin it well.
This is a great concept, and its already being done well two chapters in. Woah.
Also, I had never thought of how a pony on earth would react to the fact I have quite nice pictures of Celestia and Luna on my walls. I can imagine that would be quite the surprise.
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Surely it was the shock.
Very promising fic!
This s amazing. Don't usually read stories with less than five chapters. But I'm very glad I did with this one. Keep up the good work!
This is a amazing concept! I cant wait for future updates!!!
Definetly one of my new fave stories! Well done! :)