Rainbowdash and Scootaloo lived a peaceful life however, when Scootaloo finds out Fluttershy is her mother she leaves. Rainbow stops at nothing to get Scootaloo back.
Rainbowdash and Scootaloo lived a peaceful life however, when Scootaloo finds out Fluttershy is her mother she leaves. Rainbow stops at nothing to get Scootaloo back.
It's an interesting concept... But dat grammar
Scootaloo is an it?
I'm confuzzled.
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That was what brought me to that story, actually...
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Also, wtf, Fluttershy? Scootaloo is, like, a teenager (judging by her constant use of caps lock), and you already don't remember what happened when she was born?
Well, the good thing is that you're aware that the first chapter is rushed. It's barely over 1k words and it covers quite a lots of events, most of them barely making sense either due to how briefly they were described, or how strange the behaviour of the characters was. The thing is, if you know the chapter is rushed, you shouldn't have posted it; it's better to wait and develop it a bit rather than publish something that is barely a sketch of events, with rather OOC characters (especially Dash) and grammar that definitely needs proofreading.
Don't give up, however. This was your first attempt, and actually, it wasn't the worst story I've ever seen. With some exercise, you may improve greatly.
That pic doe.
Umm...
10/10 best story I've ever read
5139917 when r u going to continue the story?