Blacksheep has move around all his life and has now ended up in ponyville. Come with blacksheep and experience his tales through ponyville.
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I like OC stories so I'll stick around for this.
I just feel like this is a troll fic. The description would barely be considered english and is missing half the words, your first chapter struggled to overcome the 1000 word minimum requirement and your page was litteraly created with the sole purpose of this story (judging by the name).
I will not dislike this fic. I am not an ahole for those things, but please, be sure that you give us something that doesn't have obvious problem that people like me will dig through.
Yeah, no.
There are many errors in this story and to be quite frank, I think I'd rather stub my toe than read anymore of this story.
Review Time!
With the incredible mastery of the English language shown in the Summary ("Blacksheep moves to ponyville and want to make friends") I immediately knew that this would be one of the greatest examples of literature ever created by man. The prose here is so incredibly powerful and profound, and the pure emotional catharsis left me floored in awe. In pure excitement, I immediately felt compelled to click on the first chapter and follow Blacksheep in his intellectually charged adventures.
With only the first paragraph down, I could already feel the pure emotion and philosophical prose oozing from this piece of literature. The first line in particular had me edging on tears with it's sheer beautifulness, deep description and vivid symbolism. I also particularly liked the line where you didn't capitalize our protagonist's name, deftly and subtly showing that he has deeply rooted esteem problems in that he doesn't even consider himself to be a proper noun. We also start to see through his outward appearance and into his dark past, which is something that is completely original and definitely never used on any other OC fics.
Wow. Just wow. Just as I thought this story couldn't get any better, you lay down the most incredible lines of dialogue I have ever seen in a story. The contents of this incredibly intellectual yet completely natural sounding conversation is truly transcendent of anything I've ever seen. I feel like I am truly in Blacksheep's incredibly developed shoes, having a wholesome and moving conversation with Applebloom. This dialogue right here has truly changed my life.
I went through the rest of the story absolutely enthralled by Blacksheep's tale, feeling with him in his ups and downs and everything in between. I feel like this story is one of the greats of literature as it manages to truly pull the true feelings out of the reader as they embark on the endless quest for true happiness with the incredibly 3-dimensional character Blacksheep. After all, he want to make friends. Who can't relate to that?
10/10
5067456 Your profile picture reminds me of my profile picture.
I've seen you before, do you read stories to see if they are bad?
Please, make another chapter, I was enthralled by this story,
8/8 SOOPER gr8 m8!
5067170 If that's just a review, I want to read a story by you, cuz dat sht wuz craycray
I like bad stories so I think I'll stick aro--Oh, wait, no I don't.
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I'm just going by my Oc's name and I will fix all the things i didn't have time for yesterday
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Not sure if you trolling or not but thank you for they review i will do better next chapter
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Sadly enough i have a editor I just didn't bother them for this story because i wanted to put it out there as fast as possible. I will have my editor go over this and fix anythings i might of missed. Then i will repost the story and chapter 2.
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thx
I have one question for your OC: Have You Any Wool?
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I'm sorry, but i just don't like this story.
i liked the storyline itself, but there were so many grammatical errors that most of it made no sense. perhaps if you added commas and periods where they are supposed to be? 
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I will fix all that today
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It was late last night so i think they were sleeping but i will have them go over things today if there not busy
I understand the concept that you wanted it to be done as fast as possible, and even better that you will fix all the problems today.
There was plenty of grammies, yet you said you'd get them fixed today.
:D Well then, if the storyline was decent, yet you just needed to fix stuff(of which you are doing today), I will simply like it, even if the grammar made the story funny as hell, it wont be like this forever.
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Sorry it took longer than i thought but its edited now
5077582 Holy mother of...
What a difference.
Great job, Blacksheep.
5/5
8/8 rly gr8 m8 i congradul8,
By the way, near the end-
“No no it’s alright I just,” she cleared her throat, “Hi! How about we go and meet the crusaders before Luna raises the moon?”
It seems a bit strange. I think you can show pauses in dialogue like so:
"No, no, It's alright... I just.." she cleared her throat, "Hey, how about we go and meet the Crusaders before Luna Raises the moon?"
Not bad, man.
Not bad at all...
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Thanks for they pointer and thanks
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Wow, seems many people don't like your opinion, but I'm not of those people. Here, a like. OC stories bro, OC stories are cool.
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5104322 Hey everyone's got their opinion I'm not looking to make anyone happy they agree with me great, disagree with me fine. Doesn't bother me. But thanks for thanks glad someone thinks OC stories are good.
Ugh. Not another one of these again. The new writer writes about their OC should be a new clichè all in itself. While I myself am guilty of making a self-insert OC, you can not make it a wish fulfillment, or else you risk getting attached to that character and also risk going into Mary/Gary Stu territory. Also, good Lord, the amount of missing commas and periods makes me want to throw up. Not to be mean, but you do really need to clean this up A LOT.
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Really? You can't tell?
Methinks you and I share differing opinions regarding the definition of the word "edited"...