Shine just want to be an ordinary girl where she lives. But until one they she sent to the world of Equestria where she meet new ponies and lives with Twilight Sparkle. /if you want to see the original version of Shine in the world of Equestria I have it on FanFiction.com just look for cartoons then mlp and type in Shine in the world of Equestria/
Page generated in 0.066 seconds
Total duration
680 users online
773,285 hits today, 2,156,967 yesterday
My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic Fanfiction
Designed and coded by knighty & Xaquseg - © 2011-2024
Support us
SubStar
Chat!
Discord
Follow us
Twitter
MLP: Friendship is Magic® - © 2024 Hasbro Inc.®
Fimfiction is in no way affiliated with or endorsed by Hasbro Inc.®
...
The grammar and pacing in this story needs some serious work. I suggest you get an editor.
5034522 I'm trying my best to make this a good story but I guess not happening :-(
So if there's an editor who can edit my story that would be nice.
5035061 you could ask your language arts teacher to read your story and tell you what you need to fix. There's a starting point!
5035120 thanks for the advice
5035402 No problem
5035061
You know I'm feelin generous today, I'll edit any future writings of yours. Sorry, editing things that are done for or are already posted isn't how I work.
5035474 thank you!!
You're very talented. So amazing.
5066504 thank you
Welcome to Fimfic,thanks for the follow, and this is pretty good, I'll keep my eye on it;)
5073011 thank you -happy tears- now there's 2 people that like my story
Great story but I would suggest you get an editor. An editor could help you turn a great story into a masterpiece.
5279477 well I have a editor working on this story
This is tch tch!