Yup, finally updated! And no sex. WTF, right? Well, I kinda realized that this chapter was stretching. It was already 5k words and only halfway through the plot points, so I thought I might as well break it and post as two chapters. If I can keep my momentum up across the long weekend, I'll have the next one out much more quickly.
Oh yess! I love this story. Raritys thougts and doubts make this so strong and interesting. It really works as a sexual epiphany and insecure attempts at love story. I just love it so far.
The picture in my mind of Rarity yelling who's next at a bunch of pigs whilst covered in mud id too funny. I can't stop laughing dude, came for the clop and stayed for the story on this one.
This. Is. Amazing. Truly you have captured what good Rarishy is meant to be written like, also what good mature romance is suppose to be like. I love, love this fic. The sadness of Rarity, the catching on of Fluttershy. The whole romance is amazing. Thank you so much. (Curtseys) You have created a wonderful piece of writing. I cannot wait until the next bit.
647513 Quite frankly while I was reading this chapter I couldn't keep straight what happened here and what happened in the other Flutterity fic that involves Rarity sending letters from a secret admirer. In which Rarity's second letter is completely transparent to Fluttershy.
I would say otherwise, but then I'd start speculating against the author, which is fine on certain aspects. Not so fine when you're gonna argue about why Fluttershy is reacting to this so badly if it really was something Rarity is inclined to do without any reason.
650815 Surely wrestling with a pig counts as something out of the ordinary? Maybe? But anyway, it's your story, I respect your descisions on the direction of said story. I can't complain on something that I have no part in.
650863 I'd like to hear it, actually. If what's in my head isn't coming through in the writing, I'd like to know!
650911 Since when did average episodes contain nothing out of the ordinary? What I meant was, whatever Rarity's apparent motivations, she hasn't really telegraphed anything romantic to Fluttershy.
647315 im a straight man and im happy to say i enjoy this story thoroughly, if you with to argue men, even straight may enjoy reading two ponys in this scenario we can always see how long you last standing against me and my love and tolerance that or i could school you in writing but i have a feeling fluttershy wouldent like that vary much... make a choice my friend
I sense a disturbance in the canon, oh wait, no it isn't. That's just Flutterbitch. In this chapter she has committed, what we call in the internet profession, a "dick move". The Bearer of the Element of Kindness has just forced her friend into a line of situations that she knows her friend will hate in an attempt to get her to leave. Not a bad attempt at underhandedness for someone who is scared of her own shadow and is known for being nice to literally everything. End sarcastic criticism.
Other than that butthurt which is kind of common for me, I always tend to over analyze Fluttershy in these. I like where this is going.
For your advances in the newly accepted field of making candy colored ponies do things that would make a porn star blush, to each other, I grant you two things, One, a mustache, for doing it right and having a great plot to go along with it. and two, fc09.deviantart.net/fs70/f/2012/045/7/0/ticket_to_hell_by_vashthepsicho-d4potlr.jpg
Apologies if any of this came across as overly forward and mean, it was all intended in the spirit of humor.
The characters in MLP are powerful for exactly that reason. Rarity is sometimes selfish, Fluttershy can be mean, Applejack deceives, and Rainbow Dash charges off without the rest of the group. They're characters, not caricatures; when two aspects of their personality conflict, they have to choose one over the other, and their Element isn't always the side that wins.
Applejack flew into action, planting both hooves as she wrapped her arms around the King Pig's neck. He tried to shake her off, but Applejack was ready for it and had braced against the move. Slowly, she leaned farther and farther into the King Pig's shoulder, straightening her legs and levering him up, up, his trotters flailing helplessly in the air. Then, finally, he fell over with a decidedly underwhelming squish of mud.
Jab. Squeal. Slap.
Reading this with Black sabbath - iron man starting SO FUCKING EPIC!
Then, like an avalance started by that single pebble, it went on. And on. And on.
Take it from a Colorado brony, "Avalanche" has an "H" in it :P
Another fantastic chapter, I might add... A little bit more dark when Rarity starts calling herself a liar and selfish. Don't get me wrong, I enjoy the direction you're taking it. Just a bit dark for my personal, frilly, lovey-dovey tastes. Still. I enjoyed the development, and Rarity's personal thoughts about her feelings towards Fluttershy. She's compromising for love, doing something she otherwise wouldn't be caught dead doing. Still, that ending makes me wonder what's in store for me. Onwards!
Why Rarity wasn't wearing a shower cap and waterproof clothes I'll never know. She was probably so busy mooning over Fluttershy that her common sense had been short-circuited.
Applejack was doing her best not to join in the laughter, but her best wasn't very good. "Nice try, 'Twilight'," the blond mare snickered, "but maybe ya oughta start with th' Porka Minors." She gestured toward a few piglets piled up beside their mother.
Highlight of the chapter - made me roll on the desk trying not to wake up the neighbours with laughter.
i always thought if i were to see Rarity mud wrestling, it would be decidedly more erotic than that, but none the less i was thoroughly impressed with her technique
I thought it'd be tough to top the last chapter, but this. By the heavens, this is glorious. Rarity REALLY seems to be in conflict with herself, and it shows handily. I do love seeing a pony come to terms with their own demons, and when Rarity's reconciliation comes, it will be all the greater for her struggles.
Yup, finally updated! And no sex. WTF, right?
Well, I kinda realized that this chapter was stretching. It was already 5k words and only halfway through the plot points, so I thought I might as well break it and post as two chapters. If I can keep my momentum up across the long weekend, I'll have the next one out much more quickly.
I'm criticizing with an opinion, this is too gay for me.
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Thanks for that deep and clearly explained criticism.
Oh yess! I love this story. Raritys thougts and doubts make this so strong and interesting. It really works as a sexual epiphany and insecure attempts at love story. I just love it so far.
This was rather amusing to say the least. Poor Rarity is absolutely giving herself away.
The picture in my mind of Rarity yelling who's next at a bunch of pigs whilst covered in mud id too funny. I can't stop laughing dude, came for the clop and stayed for the story on this one.
647418 i guessed that
I'm getting the sneaking suspicion that Fluttershy is onto something.
647315 it's a romance fic focused on rarity and fluttershy. did you expect a manly read?
dude you better be a fast updater because I am loving this
This. Is. Amazing. Truly you have captured what good Rarishy is meant to be written like, also what good mature romance is suppose to be like. I love, love this fic. The sadness of Rarity, the catching on of Fluttershy. The whole romance is amazing. Thank you so much.
(Curtseys) You have created a wonderful piece of writing. I cannot wait until the next bit.
keep up the good work
also update faster... I command it
so awesome
i hope theres a happy end, sometimes, after more chapters :D
Very good chapter! Lots of character development in this one.
Poor Rarity...she's giving herself away and Fluttershy doesn't look the least bit flattered by all this. It's kinda sad, really.
647513 Quite frankly while I was reading this chapter I couldn't keep straight what happened here and what happened in the other Flutterity fic that involves Rarity sending letters from a secret admirer. In which Rarity's second letter is completely transparent to Fluttershy.
649440 You'd think she would be more appreciative really, she is pretty much throwing herself at her.
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Over-all, I need more.
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Well, Rarity hasn't exactly done anything yet that wouldn't fit in an average episode...
650815
I would say otherwise, but then I'd start speculating against the author, which is fine on certain aspects. Not so fine when you're gonna argue about why Fluttershy is reacting to this so badly if it really was something Rarity is inclined to do without any reason.
650815 Surely wrestling with a pig counts as something out of the ordinary? Maybe?
But anyway, it's your story, I respect your descisions on the direction of said story.
I can't complain on something that I have no part in.
650863
I'd like to hear it, actually. If what's in my head isn't coming through in the writing, I'd like to know!
650911
Since when did average episodes contain nothing out of the ordinary? What I meant was, whatever Rarity's apparent motivations, she hasn't really telegraphed anything romantic to Fluttershy.
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I'm leaving now, but I promise when I get back later tonight I will!
Edit: I wrote something. It's huge and I'm too drunk to be certain that it makes sense. I'll post this in the morning.
650997 True, I suppose out of the ordinary happens, quite alot in the show.
"Allons-y!" she shrieked and hurled herself at the nearest boar.
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I am surprised by the lack of dirty thoughts for Rarity with these situations. Lord knows I may have had some!
I want more! but now I feel Selfish.
This. Just...this. This is why I love the authors in this fandom, a wonderful mix of humor, drama and all the while keeping in character
This could have ended in naked mud wrestling so easily. A missed oppertunity!
But good story!
647315 im a straight man and im happy to say i enjoy this story thoroughly, if you with to argue men, even straight may enjoy reading two ponys in this scenario we can always see how long you last standing against me and my love and tolerance that or i could school you in writing but i have a feeling fluttershy wouldent like that vary much... make a choice my friend
Allons-y? From Rarity?
There was much rejoicing.
I sense a disturbance in the canon, oh wait, no it isn't. That's just Flutterbitch.
In this chapter she has committed, what we call in the internet profession, a "dick move". The Bearer of the Element of Kindness has just forced her friend into a line of situations that she knows her friend will hate in an attempt to get her to leave. Not a bad attempt at underhandedness for someone who is scared of her own shadow and is known for being nice to literally everything.
End sarcastic criticism.
Other than that butthurt which is kind of common for me, I always tend to over analyze Fluttershy in these. I like where this is going.
For your advances in the newly accepted field of making candy colored ponies do things that would make a porn star blush, to each other, I grant you two things,
One, a mustache, for doing it right and having a great plot to go along with it.
and two,
fc09.deviantart.net/fs70/f/2012/045/7/0/ticket_to_hell_by_vashthepsicho-d4potlr.jpg
Apologies if any of this came across as overly forward and mean, it was all intended in the spirit of humor.
Onyxjew944, signing off.
"Allons-y!" she shrieked and hurled herself at the nearest boar.
The doctor would be proud.
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Well she does want it to be an even thing you know not just her getting the hee hee's
[on rarity de duck fsce is coot]
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Yes, you're right of course, Fluttershy has always been kind and loving in every situation.
The characters in MLP are powerful for exactly that reason. Rarity is sometimes selfish, Fluttershy can be mean, Applejack deceives, and Rainbow Dash charges off without the rest of the group. They're characters, not caricatures; when two aspects of their personality conflict, they have to choose one over the other, and their Element isn't always the side that wins.
at that last link. Damn, she became a total bitch!
Good story so far. Me gusta
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What's wrong with "Rarity let her feet steer her..."?
I'd been wavering on this fic, but oh man 'porka minors'
That's oh so very much worth a favourite and thumbs up
Applejack flew into action, planting both hooves as she wrapped her arms around the King Pig's neck. He tried to shake her off, but Applejack was ready for it and had braced against the move. Slowly, she leaned farther and farther into the King Pig's shoulder, straightening her legs and levering him up, up, his trotters flailing helplessly in the air. Then, finally, he fell over with a decidedly underwhelming squish of mud.
Jab. Squeal. Slap.
Reading this with Black sabbath - iron man starting SO FUCKING EPIC!
Didn't make a whole lot of sense to me.
Take it from a Colorado brony, "Avalanche" has an "H" in it :P
Another fantastic chapter, I might add... A little bit more dark when Rarity starts calling herself a liar and selfish. Don't get me wrong, I enjoy the direction you're taking it. Just a bit dark for my personal, frilly, lovey-dovey tastes. Still. I enjoyed the development, and Rarity's personal thoughts about her feelings towards Fluttershy. She's compromising for love, doing something she otherwise wouldn't be caught dead doing. Still, that ending makes me wonder what's in store for me. Onwards!
Damn it! This is too well done and well written. I should be asleep.
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I'm guessing since so many of you were so hell bent on pointing out the allons-y reference that no one notice the courage the cowardly dog refrense "The thing I do for love"
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Srry phone sucks
Why Rarity wasn't wearing a shower cap and waterproof clothes I'll never know. She was probably so busy mooning over Fluttershy that her common sense had been short-circuited.
overcoming the fear of rejection is always the biggest obstacle... i know this because i'm a bigger wuss than rarity when it boils down to it!
1438616 I noticed
Highlight of the chapter - made me roll on the desk trying not to wake up the neighbours with laughter.
i always thought if i were to see Rarity mud wrestling, it would be decidedly more erotic than that, but none the less i was thoroughly impressed with her technique
Hmm... it seems all of your commentators have completely missed the Courage reference.
Rarity is a badass!
Gotta love the interaction between Fluttershy and Applejack.
So next Rarity is gonna go cloud kicking. She just needs her butterfly wings back.
I thought it'd be tough to top the last chapter, but this. By the heavens, this is glorious. Rarity REALLY seems to be in conflict with herself, and it shows handily. I do love seeing a pony come to terms with their own demons, and when Rarity's reconciliation comes, it will be all the greater for her struggles.
Brilliant. Just brilliant.
And Rarity really is outdoing herself with this love business, I really hope it's worth the mud.