Follow a young pegasus as she tells of the events that have perspired to make her the mare she is today, learn about how she met her friends and how she came to be a great leader within the Covenant Empire.
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This is the first story I've ever done so it isn't perfect; though I would like some feedback.
Co-written with joloup987
MLP - Hasbro
Halo - Microsoft & 343 Industries
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Update: This story is being completely rewritten currently and will hopefully be finished eventually.
Chapters (3)
this may be your first but you have no understanding of the covenat
5479648 "Alternate Universe" I am free to make changes how I wish. And I know much about the Covenant, it was intended to be written the way it is.
I wonder. Will you have an Arbiter in this? You should make Trixie an Arbiter! LoL. Or will you stay with Thel Vadam or maybe someone new? I think you know enough personally. can you do one small change? Double space between paragraphs please? Perhaps a little background into your Covenant would be beneficial?
Just a thought. My story Adventures Across Space is a Star Trek Enterprise crossover and I dedicated the first chapter to how it fit into the universe. Check it out maybe it'll make more sense.
its your stoy by all means wright it as you want it my comment was mean i understand so im sorry but alot of halo fans will pass this story becase of the way you made the Covenant out to be and on top of that you story needs to 1000 words a chapter also get a editer and a proof reader it will grately help your story
5482556 I do realize it needs improvement, that was obvious from the start. And the changes of the covenant were done to allow the story to fit together more.
5482250 Those are interesting ideas, and I'll fix the spacing. As for a background of the covenant here, I was planning on adding it in, though I haven't decided when to do that. Also, for the Arbiter I might just stay with Thel Vadam as he fits the position better.
5484175 But anything he can do Trixie can do better!
5484324 That is true
5485060 trixie is best pony!!!
Hmm.... I guess you're doing ok with this crossover story, but I would highly recommend you work on your spacing. the story paragraphs are too close together.
Oh yes, this story exists. I actually had forgotten. Oh well, sadly I may never finish it or release the other chapters. The person I was writing this with has since disappeared and I may end up completely rewriting this if I ever get a chance to.
Yup you killed the covenants purpose