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The Great and Powerful Trixie used to be just a tiny filly, but that doesn't mean her ego was small too. Overly confident in her magical abilities even at young age, Trixie goes to take the entrance exam at Princess Celestia's School for Gifted Unicorns. She should be a shoo-in right?

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Comments ( 21 )

I'm surprised no one else has commented on this yet so let me be able to say this story is terrific


I meant "let me be the first to say" :facehoof:

Thanks! That means a lot! :twilightblush:
I worked pretty hard on this, I'm glad to see someone liked it.

D'awww. : 3

Very nice take on a young Trixie. Too bad she didn't follow Celestia's last bit of advice I suppose... :trixieshiftright:

Thanks! I'm letting the ending bit lead into the sequel I have planned. I thought the story for this was too basic, I have a lot more twists in mind for my next story!

#6 · Oct 30th, 2011 · · ·

The story itself is great and fun, but there are quite a few grammatical and contextual errors.
You refer to Trixie as a mare, one pony as a horse, etc. Could use some editing.

#7 · Oct 30th, 2011 · · ·

Wonderful story! You really did a great job with this. I can't wait for a sequel :twilightsmile:

#8 · Oct 30th, 2011 · · ·

the essence of the story is great... but there is a few individual gramatical errors and cliches (esp the over usage of 'one' in a particular paragraph)
as a whole though, prolly one of my favorite fics, BRAVO!:moustache:

It says incomplete. That means I can expect more of this?! It's great as a standalone but I can has more?!

This was really great! But when Trixie didnt get in I was sad. :fluttercry:
There were a few spelling mistakes and grammical errors that made me stop and think, was that maybe just a typing error? :rainbowhuh:
overall it was great! :pinkiehappy:
and now I know there's gonna be more im really happy. :raritystarry:

Guys don't be afraid to rate, 1400 views and only 11 ratings? It takes only a second, tell me what you think!

Also, I'm seriously debating sending this to a professor. I'm absolutely certain there are grammatical errors in this story but I'm not so sure about them being "numerous". Please point out any errors you find by sending me a private message with the correction. I've proofread it many times, and the reviewers I sent it to have not found anything so I'm getting paranoid by all these grammar comments.

Made the edit, thanks!
Yes you can! :pinkiehappy: I've got it all planned, all I have to do is write it. I'm thinking of starting today.
If found the spelling error, I spelled "scared" wrong right? Yes, that was just a typo. I'm glad to hear you're excited for the next one!

The only way this could of been better is if twilight went in after her.

A very nice story. A bit slow but it's still very well written. I would think later stories would do better with more conflict, right now it's a nice story but there's not much to it. Keep it up though! Make me like The Great and Powerful Trixie too! Good work! :pinkiehappy:

Thank you so much for the critique! I agree completely, for my first fanfic I wanted to try something easy and cute but that definitely keeps it from being great. I have some pretty gruesome stuff in mind for Trixie to deal with in the next chapter. I feel a little sorry for her.... sorta. :pinkiecrazy:


what a nice preluede that could perfectly fit in the canon story X3.

Very nice prequel. I can see why Skyeheart linked to this to help explain Trixie's backstory in the Manehattanverse.

Sweet, if sad. Really establishes her young personality - impressive, but lacking substance. And yet she can make others happy even though she's not actually trying for that. Nice. Guess it takes the wisdom of Celestia to see her potential, hey?

That picture is so adorable :rainbowkiss:

An amazing instance of a pony interpreting her purpose in life in every wrong way she possibly could.

It's been a long time, but now that I've stumbled across this again, I feel that I should mention that this is the kind of story that, years later, I still occasionally remember, and then I'm a little bit happier for the rest of the day. That's a 100% success in my book.

It's ironic since the secondary material has shown that Trixie did make it into Celestia's school. Though the most recent episodes (TEACUP!) suggest that no one BOTHERED teaching Trixie the right way to do magic!

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