The meeting
AN
" means dialogue and j means in my thoughts
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Sigh. How can I even begin to describe this? Maybe as the best thing that happened to me in my life? It has been two or three days since I've been "visiting" Equestria. Twilight, for the time being, has let me stayed in her house... still I am dumbfounded that It's a tree.
Twilight got a response from her letter she wrote to the princess.
"Let me get this straight, princess Celestia, ruler of the sun, wants me and you to go to that fortress on the mountain?!"
"It's not a fortress, it's a castle in which princess Celestia lives in, the problem will be getting you there since you stand out to much." Yea, maybe because being an entirely different species doesn't make me stand out enough, I thought with sarcasm.
"So we just walk there or there will be some kind of transported?" I asked with curiosity, I knew it must be a few kilometers from here to there, but what she said surprised me to no end.
"No, I'll just teleport us there."
My mind froze on those words. So many things that go wrong, yet the excitement about it override my worry.
"How are you gonna do that?" I said doubtfully. Suddently, a flash of light engulfed both of us when twilight's horn glowed a purple. ouch... now I knew what it felt like to be teleported without proper equipment. It burns, but not too badly.
We arrived at a library. My town library must be a quarter of the size of this one!
"Well, we are here. Sorry if you been a litle singed," she said with a sheepish smile. I looked around us and didn't saw anyon- excuse me, anypony in the area.
"Well, at least we are alone. Where did the princess wanted to meet me again?" Sometimes, I hate my bad memory at times like these.
"In the throne room, she said. She gave some guards the day off today so you could meet her with no problems," she said a bit annoyed.
The castle was a maze; if Twilight wasn't there to guide me I would have never been able to find the throne room.
We arrived at the throne room, and I saw probaly the most regal image I seen in the last 2-3 days i've been here.
Infront of me stood an alicorn, as Twilight told me, with a coat pure white like the snow, but the mane... the mane waved like there was a mild wind blowing, strange thing is there's NO WIND. How is it waving with no wind?!
"So, this is the human you spoke in the letter, Twilight?" Said Celestia. The voice strangely sounded motherly.
"Yes he is, he has been.... nervous about this meeting since only me and my friends know about him." Twilight said like she knew her for many years.
I wispered to Twilight, "Shouln't you be addressing her like... I don't know, like royalty should be?!" With a tone that hinted nervousness, I mean we are talking with royalty here. My train of thoughs was interrupted by Celestia.
"You havent told him yet Twilight? or should I tell him?" She said.
"N-no I haven't, I thought if I told him he would not believe me." she said with a downed voice.
"Tell me what it is? Did I missed something on my way here?" I asked quickly. I dont like to be left out of the loop.
"Twilight sparkle is my faithful student." Celestia said proudly. My mind snapped, the princess who is basically a god, just said that Twilight whom I been with one full day with, is her personal student, needless to say I was stunned.
"I never really asked his name, could you tell us now?" Twilight asked me.
"..."
"Hello, Equestria to human? I think he's in shock." Twilight said with worry.
"Huh, what, when?" my attention snapped to me when Twilight waved her hoof infront of me.
"I asked you if you could tell us your name please?"
"Oh, well my name is *BEEP*." HUH?!? why cant I say my name?
"We didn't hear it clearly. Could you say it again?" This time it was celestia who asked.
"It's *BEEP* your majesty." I can hear it in my head but when I try to say it, it doesn't come out.. I wonder why?
"Is something the matter? Is there a reason why you are not telling us your name?"
"..." my mind was going at full force, and then it hitted me, does it have to do with the voice I heard when I first came here? I can't remember for the life of me what it said.
Celestia looked at me with worry in her eyes and said, "I would like to talk with you in private. could you give us some minutes alone Twilight?"
"Right I'll come back when you call for me," she said before she turned and left.
I standed alone with the princess coming closer to me, compared to the other ponies I met, only she could look at me straight in the eyes without rising her head.
"I now know your name, but i cant say it out loud as you thought, and about the voice you heard, I dont know about it." Celestia said, trying to ease me; clearly it failed.
"Huh, but how did you knew? I havent mentioned any of those things here or to Twilight yesterday," I said with fear.
"You thought it clearly as day, and yes I can read minds, although I consider it rude."
"Then, why did you do it?" I asked out of pure curiosity, she just said "I couldn't resist, it was too temping to take a small peek." with cheerful smile on her face.
"I notice something princess," I was cutted off by Celestia, "Please call me Celestia."
"Ok, I noticed that you aren't being formal about this, could you tell me why?" I am actually very intrigued by this.
"Formalities after a thousands of years gets tiresome, at first I liked it, after about two or three hundred years I found it boring." I listened in with much interest.
"It also lets me to be closer to my people this way, but this is not the case I wanted to talk to you."
"And what is the reason?" I asked, as I mentioned before I don't like to be left out of the loop.
"The reason I wanted to meet you is... to integrate you to the pony society," she said with determination.
"Wow I- I'm honored, but when should we start?" I said ecstatically.
"We shall start tomorrow in ponyville, you shall sleep here with me." I must clarify something before accepting sleeping in here.
"And whats that?" she asked out of nowhere.
"Oh yea, forgot you can read minds. where will I be sleeping?"
"With me, in my room, don't be surprised now, every guest room has guards at all hours, mine is different because it requires my magic to open it." why would that be, I thought sharply.
"Because there I have my own personal possessions who are of most importance, and the bed is big enough for both of us"
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AN
so how it was? this is my first thing i write in my entire life, so any critisism or coments about it i will read it. and yes this isnt all what happened that day. Major thanks to Kujo Blaze for editing this
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451326
Sorry dint knew
hmmm... I think I told you to re-do the beginning :P
452746
Meaby, but that's more or less how it happened. So i can't change what happened anyway
might need an editor, spotted a few errors
464767
Thx, every comment is apreciated,
this is interesting. you said it was a oneshot? you should set it to complete then
478607
I made this one a oneshot, to see if people like the idea of me recoding my visits to EQ. At first I though "nah they won't like it, they will think is another wishfullfillment fic or trollfic" but now I'm starting. To think " meaby it's snot a bad idea after all"
Could use some minor editing, but other than that, it's a great read!
553480
You mean it?
I just told what happened 2/3 of that day.
554560 Well the thing is, it's forgivable for the first chapter to be somewhat short. After all, it's more of a 'testing the waters' than 'super serious chapter in the middle of the story' kind of ordeal. Granted that you work in longer chapters (3.5-7k+), then it'll be a very entertaining read for sure.
557451
I made this to see if people like the idea of me writting my goings to EQ ( read my bio)
This will not pass EQ prerequisites. It is riddled with spelling, tense, and punctuation errors. The opening word, "sigh", is not conducive to setting an atmosphere the reader will want to participate in. Most Human's in Equestria's fail to get on EQ because 'Twilight lets me live with her', or any of the other more common characters. You mention (to my complete disbelief) at the beginning of the story, as if most readers will not know this, that "quotations" mean a person is talking, and Italics mean one is thinking. And you didn't even type it out correctly. And then, on top of all of that, the 'chapter' is only 1,256 words long. Which is ridiculously short. Most chapters of stories that get into EQ are a minimum of 7.5k long.
I would recommend scrapping this one, and starting over. Overhauling what you currently have will take more time and effort than beginning anew.
451326
Not anymore. It has been reported that Someone got on Coal Buck's account and deleted everything. Including his userpage, it seems.
622859
Thx for pointing all that out.
Besides that this is my very first thing I write, I myself know I suck at writing.
i hate posting negative comments (i realllllly do) but Twilight sparkle needs to be Twilight Sparkle. sorry, just me being a picky pegasister.
1125096
Don't worry, I don't mind negative comments, as long as there are not insult meant I dont mind.
Also, this 2/3 of the day is if I remember correctly what happened ( read my bio).
my second life is a lot like the stravaganza books. guy falls asleep with certain artifact, wakes up somewhere else.
1125220
You certrnly like to assume things.
I never had a item or artifact with me at the time. All I wrote is what happened that day (more a journal than a story)
1125242 i wasnt saying that you fell asleep with an artifact. in the first stravawhatever book the kid has brain cancer and in the other world hes cured. like a cut in the real world and twilight heals.
Not bad. A few spelling and grammatical errors but we all go through that at one point while writing. I definately like where this is goin and would enjoy te rest of this one and another. This is quite interesting. It's definately worth keeping up. So I leave you with one last thing. Awesomeness approved
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Thanks, I really am conflicted if I should continue this journal. Any thoughs about it?
its really good
buuut... you need to improve grammar and spelling and add more story and detail (don't just tell us that it happened tell us how it happened and don't skip ahead this far for the start of the story) 
but its a really good story and has potential 
(sorry if i was harsh i'm just trying to give constructive criticism)
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Don't worry, if you need to be, please be harsh
Also that's what is going to be explained in part 2 ( when I actually finish it...)
do you really intend to make this a one shot or are you gonna add more cuz if its a one shot then there would only be one chapter and im not seeing anything wrong with it myself