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The foreigner

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Lab

Lab #1 · Jul 3rd, 2014 · 1 · · Welcome ·

Needs quite a bit of editing—there is at least one spelling, grammar, or punctuation error in nearly every sentence.

Alexander sire

Alexander sire #2 · Jul 3rd, 2014 · 1 · · Welcome ·

I'm sorry if this doesn't get your fancy my first fic and it will improve later just checking how also testing the way I'm working into it so I do apologize for the lack of perfection and neat writing. I don't have a whole lot of time for just myself working on this fic it will progress slowly reaching for perfection takes time it won't be right the first time some do because they took their time into it I don't have much so I'm not at my best for neat writing.

Diamond dust

Diamond dust #3 · Jul 3rd, 2014 · · · Welcome ·

4635650 nobody's perfect
so take your time to write it , i'll follow it to see how it's going to progress

Alexander sire

Alexander sire #4 · Jul 3rd, 2014 · · · Welcome ·

Diamond dust think you for your support.

mycarhasaMoustache

mycarhasaMoustache #5 · Jul 3rd, 2014 · 1 · · Welcome ·

When there are multiple errors in the description it doesn't bode well for the rest of the story. Im not really sure how this managed to get approved, The spelling and grammar are atrocious.

Tiaa OwO