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The Food Felon

Applejack only wants to enjoy a slice of pie, but somepony decides to stop her from enjoying one of life's simple pleasures. Now she wants to get to the bottom of this, and she won't stop till she has questioned everypony in the house.

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Music the Looping Traceu

Music the Looping Traceu #1 · Apr 10th, 2014 · · ·

Yay!!! New story!!!

Blaze Spectrum

Blaze Spectrum #2 · Apr 10th, 2014 · · ·

The description implied comedy, but this story wasn't really much like that. Sure, the line about eating oranges being a punishment in the Apple household drew a smirk from me, but the story's tone was different.

The plot isn't too interesting, and the build up was minimal, but it had more entertainment value than Equestria in Human. Which was a random fic which actually slightly bored me, even if the concept was an interesting twist on HiE.

Although really, I think you need an editor. The errors are obvious, but luckily not too numerous.

Overall? I like it!

11111111

11111111 #3 · Apr 10th, 2014 · · ·

deliscious
This time I am sure that 'deliscious' is not a word.

11111111

11111111 #4 · Apr 10th, 2014 · · ·

Ok quick critique
Comical in some ways, but the opposite in others.
It's a story. Not bad, but it's strange in some way. Probably because you is you and 2011 and all, x3 but it's an OK story.

Brony God