Every brony wants to have a real life HIE adventure, and romance their favorite character. It seems to be a common fantasy, but what if it isn't all that it's cracked up to be? In fact, what if the ponies are just like us? Judgemental self serving bastards. What if the magic of friendship is a lie? My name is Gabriel Reidler. I left behind my family for a world not much better than ours. Chasing an impossible dream. Looking for acceptance by the beloved Mane 6. Only to find that it's all a lie fabricated by people who wish for the impossible. If friendship is magic, it is certainly not found in equestria...
(Why dont we have an ironic tag?)
Chapters (2)
Ooh, interesting! I'd say that I'd like some more details, but I bet that you're withholding information on purpose.
4227016 Keyword prologue
It has to have some mystery in it. Im suprised that so many people like it already. lol 
4227080 THE SUSPENSE IS KILLING ME!!! lol
But seriously, I think I like where this story is going. Good luck, and happy writing!
4227091 Thanks
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Next chapter coming soon :)
holy wall of text batman
you really should go through this again and fix that. every time someone talks, you start a new line.
"Well Gabriel, guess what. It is your lucky day! The very thing you have been wishing for will be granted to you. If you so desire that is. I have been watching you, and now I think that you need to have your dreams realized. However, it may not be as you imagine it to be. Think carefully." Dang I should have listened to him. "Who are you?" I asked incredulously. "Ryan, are you pranking me?"
should be
"Well Gabriel, guess what. It is your lucky day! The very thing you have been wishing for will be granted to you. If you so desire that is. I have been watching you, and now I think that you need to have your dreams realized. However, it may not be as you imagine it to be. Think carefully."
Dang I should have listened to him.
"Who are you?" I asked incredulously. "Ryan, are you pranking me?"
this story seems interesting, so I'll be keeping an eye on it. i just don't want to have to always figure out when people start and stop talking
lol. Like I said. I write blogs, not stories
Thanks for pointing that out man. I came here to sharpen my skills. Looks like it's working!
I fixed the Great Wall of Text. It should be easier to read now
more pleas
when's the next chapter coming?
Hello. I recently changed jobs, so my schedule has been out of whack with no time to write. I will try to devote some time this week to writing. I didn't think that anyone really cared about this. But I guess I was wrong
Rushed
awesome chapters you are doing a amazing job
you are a huge cook tease....there will be more soon right?
Yes. I will have plenty of time to write these next few weeks. I also have a new story in the works. I apologize for the short chapter. The next one will be da bomb though. Stay tuned
4614431 please let me know where I can improve!
Okay, so you asked for help with the story. Here are some errors that I noticed.
1. Consistent paragraph formatting. Remember to make all of your paragraphs look the same. If you indent some paragraphs, indent them all. If you put spaces in between some paragraphs, put spaces between them all.
2. Telling rather than showing. Why not *show* us what your character is going through in his family life, depression, etc. rather than just telling it all? Like, you could write a scene of him crying or getting upset, or something.
3. Grammar errors, including
Comma splice. That should be a semicolon ( ; ) not a comma ( , )
Put a comma after dang and before I.
Put a comma after not, and don't capitalize the.
I am certainly not," the voice spoke would be correct.
I hope that helps. Don't give up, and keep writing
4624053 Thank you.
This is the exact kind of criticism I was looking for. Come on guys. I'm here to learn. Release you inner grammar nazi 
Thanks for reading!
When s the next chapter coming out?
This is dark really dark!
Something tells me discord did something bad.
Is this story dead?