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Welp, could've been a lot worse! At least she didn't have to perform with any four-legged pets. Given the nature of Equestria under Dainn, that's always a possibility.
... Anybody else wondering if Dainn ships GunneTosh?
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You're in luck. A new chapter has been posted just moments ago. I hope you enjoy it.
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That made me laugh! Considering the fact that he
probablyalmost certcertainly doesn't think highly of Ginna, that's definitely a possibility.Personally, I ship Gunne x Ginna.
Also, I'm wondering why Big Mac got two tickets. The second one can't possibly be for Applejack - I doubt that Big Mac will need an extra ticket to bring along a piece of property. (At the very least females should get different tickets than males.) Is Big Mac supposed to bring another friend? Gunne probably already has a ticket, so it can't be for him.
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That's part of why I'm wondering what I noted above. It was first prize for winning the competition. And Dainn hinted that Gunne and he had talked about MacIntosh before.
"Here are two tickets to the Gala. You can take with any male friend you wish. If you have anyone in your home town you want to invite, you can do it. You did win them fair and square. You can use them for anyone. Anyone at all. Even the stag who helped you win them in the first place.
Just a suggestion, though. No pressure." *Scrunchy face*
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Aaah... interesting theory. So Dainn didn't give Gunne a personal invite. His entire council was probably opposed to the idea - particularly Vestri and Ivangir - and he didn't want to antagonize them, so he gives two tickets to Big Mac instead. Quite clever.
- Also, something about Dainn gives me the feeling that he might have spent some nights with Gunne in the past. It's not exactly a "gay vibe" and I don't exactly go for my old 'Dainn is homosexual' interpretation any more, but bisexuality is accepted in caribou society, so it's definitely possible. It might even be the reason or one of the reasons why Dainn seems to be the only one who actually backs Gunne.
I finally get! I now know how the FoE stories will end, it will end when all of the Main Six are Red Colored.
One of the best FOE erotica pieces I have ever read. Two thumbs up..
Hopefully there would be some scenes of mares being bred and impregnated especially the red collared...
Another awesome Applejack filled chapter, I love it, great work Schorl. It's great to see all of AJ and Mac's hard work finally paying off for them. I do so hope things get easier for the two now but knowing the setting there are undoubtly more challenges coming their way.
It feels like you could have ended the story here, but I'm glad you didn't. I think this was the darkest chapter, but I'm not totally sure of that. I love that you were able to make this victory into a defeat, which I guess would have been easier than I may be thinking, but it was still impressive to see. I wish the ending had gone on a little longer, maybe really rub AJ's face into what was happening, but either way, still a really awesome chapter. I can't imagine how much worse things will be now lol.
I'm not sure where this can go now, because it feels like we hit the climax of this story, but I'll admit I could easily read another hundred thousand words of this!
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I probably would have done that, but the chapter was already going a bit long. 20K words is a lot of work, and I didn't want to trouble my editors or bore the readers.
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That's true. Still a shame though because this was a special moment, and there's no telling when we'll see Dash again. I think if anything you've motivated me to think of how I can include Dash when I start my canon story.
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Well I'm glad I could give you some inspiration. I also think it wouldn't really be a spoiler to say that this isn't the last time we see Dash in Bruised Apples. After all, the Gala is sure to have plenty of important people there.
Long chapter is loonnngggg.....
Still, most assuredly a good read and full of pretty much everything I've come to expect from this story and more. I hadn't really given much thought to the kind of obstacle course AJ would be running, but was impressed with the way it managed to ramp up from the mundane to the increasingly degrading. It's also interesting to see AJ more or less turning her own stubbornness to her advantage, as she's never really been one to back down from a challenge. I must wonder to what extent this has perhaps been the focus of Gunne real plan all along, rather than trying "break" her outright, to instead "bend" her into compliance.
Of course to top things of we have of all ponies that could be present Rainbow Dash. The convenience of that corresponding to AJ earning her read collar, and from King Dainn no less just leaves me further wondering how much pull Gunne actually has. It just all seems far to much to be mere coincidence, but only time and future chapters will show for certain. Poor Rainbow though, I can only imagine what kind of words she might have for AJ should they get a chance to talk at the Gala... or worse still if ALL the mane-six are reunited there.
On a more minor, I got something of a special kick out of Toffee's inclusion, or at least I did after I looked her up on Derpibooru (found some nice saucy pics to set the mood too) and found out she basically a distaff Caramel. Even if she's technically an entirely separate character, it helped tickle my personal fancy for TG fetish.
And on something more of a side note...
It's rather equally delightful and disturbing to see AJ taking example from Roseluck to model her faux red-collar persona after. Which is fitting as it's a mix of those two emotions that pretty much characterize my entire opinion on Roseluck. I've recently been rereading bits and pieces of the earlier chapters, and she's been one of the characters I've been finding myself paying far more attention to the second time around. At first blush she's just overly eager slut, exactly the kind of thing that normally bores me about red-collars. At the same time however, it easy to feel oddly sympathetic toward her in how Mac's attempts to safeguard the mares under his care is almost like a "cruelty" for denying her lustful desires.
Of course then any real pity I might have for her get almost immediately "ruined" when she starts talking about how not only how much she yearn for a good fucking, but that all the other mares on the farm could use one too. Or how in comparing Rose to Pinkie, AJ asserts that the former would gladly help rape another mare to earn her own chance at sexual gratification. Seriously, I just love how Rose blends such an awkward dynamic in a way that arguably makes her more interesting than any of the other farm slaves -- so kudos on pulling that kind of tricky balance off.
Here to hoping for a bit of appledash
Dainn perhaps?
You may wish to address this little issue
Rainbow Dash....
Nice way of tieing in Princess Twilight Sparkle.
Well I so sure hope somebody picks up that phone. Because I f*cking called it!
Of course.
Well then.
While I was reading the obstical course scene, this came up.
Thought it fit the mood, so here's showing it to you.
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I read this and an idea popped into my head. There is tons of propaganda potential in a notorious black collar like Applejack going red.
The caribou, in general, likely could care less if she did or not on a personal level, but like I said, the propaganda value is great.
This would leave only Rainbow Dash as the very last of the Mane Six who has not been conquered, or assumed her proper place and attitude.
Seeing as how Big Mac did such a good job on his sister, who he can't train directly due to the incest thing, how much better a job would he do with Rainbow Dash when he's able to go fully hands-on in her training.
So they turn Rainbow Dash over to him to be trained into a Red Collar.
I was going to suggest they threaten something, like Blanking her if he can't pull it off, but I don't really think that's necessary, or something they would do. She becomes a martyr to the underground if that happens. Far more effective if she just remains a black collar if she can't be broken to red status.
If Fall was a universe where it was possible for there to be a successful revolution, I would suggest that this action would be the start of such a thing, bringing together two of the elements in close proximity to the rest. Presuming Rarity is still in the area.
Rarity might actually be a pony Big Mac could pick up for Chump change, and a bit of threatening toward the Flim Flam brothers.
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Rarity isn't with the Flim Flams any more. She's with Shining Armor now.
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Which story or section shows that event? Just out of curiosity. And does not eliminate the possibility that Shining would hand her over to Mac if he asked.
Applejack might have more sympathy for Rarity now than she did at the start of B.A.
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Fall of Equestria: Hearts & Hooves.
I made an account to comment on this story. Nice going there....
Anyways, let me say that I have no idea why I read these kinds of stories. I don't really like gore, bondage, or rape/noncon, and the misogyny is a little too much for me (I knew that going in; I've seen the pictures the stories are based on). That said, maybe I read them to remind myself how horrible these things are IRL, but for the most part that would be dishonest.
Nevertheless, you have succeeded in making me feel dirty in the best of ways, and I mean that seriously, not in a wink wink, nudge nudge kind of way. Having two younger sisters (of age gap roughly equal to Big Mac's) makes this story hit closer to home than I thought it would, especially with the good writing and character development. I know why Apple Bloom isn't in this story, what with it being anthro and all, but even so my stomach churns thinking about the possibilities, which is funny considering I didn't feel like this at all looking at the pictures poprocks and smudge_proof had drawn.
So consider this a plus. You got me to actually make an account just to tell you how much I appreciated the, err, human approach to all of the indecency in FoE, as well as make it very personal. I've wanted to do this for other writers on the site but haven't felt the urge quite so strongly. Maybe you just got me thinking too much about what I would do if it was my sister instead, I don't know. At any rate, take an upvote. I think you earned it.
I am hoping for a chapter with Dainn breaking Celestia and Luna
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When I last checked, Luna was still unbroken. But yeah, I also want to know how they broke Celestia.
6104051 Ah right xD I worded myself poorly. Breaking Celestia I mean. And I bet he'd have a little fun with unbroken Luna. I imagine he'd use Luna to toy with Celestia's emotions and get her to submit in order to protect her little sis. Because I don't think Celestia or Twilight would willingly hand over Equestria just like that.
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Thank you, I have made the appropriate edits to make it right. Your help is much appreciated.
6212775 I've got a couple more fore you.
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Great chapter once again. Can't wait for the rest.
6014448 mee too I was wondering how the heck did he break them both