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Shimmer & Co

After many failed attempts to become rich and famous Icy and Shimmer are strapped for cash and homeless, they find themselves having to share a home with their anti-social landlord, Angel. Will friendship bloom or will the house become a war-zone in 10 seconds flat.

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Spiffers

Spiffers #1 · Mar 26th, 2012 · · · Moving in ·

You really need to proof read this, unfortunately. There's some of it that is grammar, but there are a lot of times where I'm trying to figure out exactly what you were trying to say.

Spiffers

Spiffers #2 · Mar 26th, 2012 · · · Moving in ·

Also, you sort of jumped right into the start. We have little to no idea who these ponies are, and you don't spend enough time developing them before you just get started into causing mischief. This whole thing seems like you just... pumped it out for some reason.
I am sorry if this is all coming off a touch abrasive.

Anyways, if you want any help editing of someone to bounce ideas off of, send me a pm