Luna was the first born and ruled over her kingdom of Bat Ponies, Unibats, and Groundbats. The moon shone light over all of the land, the sun blazed heat during the day.
But when you're younger you want all the attention.
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- Member Since 9th Feb, 2014
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TayLu
Hi! This is a multi-writer account so there might be some inconsistencies in our writing! Well anyway I'm Luna- the more active user and this is Tay! We hope you enjoy our stories!
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It's an interesting concept with the whole role reversal. However the story seems to be a tad bit rushed and the scene shifts are jarring. I recomend slowing down a bit and working on the pacing. Other than that good work. Have a like and a mustache
4760743 Thank you for the input! I will try to work on that :)
Yeah so uhm, read this back to yourself. It has at least 1 error.
4768398 Thank you so much for catching that! I have fixed it