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The mane 6 find a female changeling who is pregnant and injured. They decide to help the poor creature and her unborn child. How will this turn out? Nopony knows. So read to find out how the mane 6 stumble upon the changeling and how this will end.
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I'm glad you liked it! I'll be adding more soon! 
Good story but it feels a bit rushed and OOC. I don't think the Mane Six would help without even hesitating. I mean, Rainbow Dash was suspicious of Twilight because Twilight knew about Nightmare Moon. I think she would protest against a changeling.
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! She was the one who said they should.
*Sigh* They did hesitate a bit. Also
4083744 I meant more than a few sentences. And wouldn't Flutters be too scared too speak? Rainbow Dash would protest a little more. Rarity would be disgusted. Applejack would be angry. Pinkie would be Pinkie Pie. And Twilight would be alarmed. They were not suspicious enough. They didn't debate about it enough. They were too quick to help a changeling. It has promise. But is rushed and the characters are OOC. Sorry if I'm too harsh.
Well, I'm not going to say it's bad, but it does feel rushed and i think it would benefit a lot of you watched a few episodes to get the character's voice in mind, then rewrite it to fit them. And I think the changeling herself could stand for a bit more wariness. I mean, she's surrounded by creatures her fellow changelings and her would consider their "enemies", she seems a bit too trusting. Or maybe if her trusting nature could be fleshed out through backstory. If you do that later, then well done. If not, then I would suggest that, or rewrite the changeling's personality. Hope I've helped, and it's an otherwise good story!
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Umm... one Amethyst does have a back story. (See chapter 5) And two I've seen all the episodes -Somepony to watch over Me. Also this is just a little bit after the wedding.
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What these two said. After the wedding Changelings and Ponies would have strained relations at best, and be actively hostile at worst. I doubt a Changeling would be that forthcoming with requests for help; granted, for their offspring they may allow their perceived enemies to help them, but only because they'd (hopefully) get proper medical and maternal care.
It would almost seem to me that being named for a changeling is like a cutiecenara for a pony: It's a major, celebratory change in their life and status. I would have expected resistance for her perceived enemies slighting her culture like that, however unintentionally.
These chapters seem drastically short to me. Adding more detail, moving among multiple events in a single chapter, or merging some of the chapters that already exist would extend word counts.
With that said, this is a promising premise, and I am interested in where you're going with this.
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Huh, interesting. I struggle with rampant paranoia when it comes to the motivations and actions of others. I express it by casual hypervigilance. I know it sounds like an oxymoron, but what I mean by that is I act like I'm aloof, but I'm really watching my peripheral vision, my ears are always straining for any indication that someone is coming up behind me or from the sides, and I plot evasive actions (and occasionally aggressive ones) for threats that could, but don't, exist.
I think it stems from my... unique moral framework, and the understanding I have attained that everything is a weapon. No exceptions. E.G. On a regular day, I'd estimate at least 80% of the world's population handles a standard fountain pen; easily utilized as a makeshift shiv.
Can you update please? These chapters are short and I want to see what happens.