Doctor Whooves: A New Companion

The Doctor is once again left alone in his T.A.R.D.I.S. He finds a note from Clara. Now it's time for the T.A.R.D.I.S. to send him on an unintentional adventure.

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Inthretis

Inthretis #1 · Apr 8th, 2014 · · · Hello ·

Tardis is not spelled with periods like that (~~T.A.R.D.I.S.~~) It is spelled TARDIS or Tardis.

So, a self insert that doesn't really do anything, is unobtrusive, and is just there. He's not bad at all, but I recommend you remove that from your author's note so people don't downvote you because of it. People don't like self inserts.

"Mommy will you tell me a story?" Ditzy said. (Oh! Just so you know we are in flashback mode.)

Just get rid of the parentheses and the text inside, it sort of ruins the flow of the story. Maybe italicize the flashback or separate it using line breaks.

Ditzy woke up the next morning her tummy growling.

Improper sentence, maybe add "with" between "morning" and "her".

Meh, it's okay, but this type of story has been done at least a hundred times before on this site alone.

Tessa

Tessa #2 · Apr 8th, 2014 · · · Hello ·

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Well I've always thought that it was done that way since it stands for Time and relative dimension in space. So yeah. As for the flashback thing. I've tried Googleing how to do flashbacks but I haven't had much success. So I'm not the best with flashbacks.

Tessa

Tessa #3 · Jul 25th, 2014 · · · Hello ·

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I forgot to say this the first time so I'm gonna say it now. T_T Seriously? I am not amused. If you truly read these stories you would find that, although they are about The Doctor & his pony(fied) companion, each and everyone is special and unique. They are NOT identical copies or even close to having a plot line quite similar to another. I just - Gah! I need to finish watching Pokemon. Have a good day, night, or whatever.