This story takes place about 300 years before the return of NightMare Moon. It is a time when the Celestial army is trying to control the sea. And when groups of rogues do as they wish.
Captain is a very ambitious pirate. His goal is to be the greatest pirate to ever sail the seas. Though it doesn't help that no one thinks he can do anything. He even starts doubting that he can achieve his dream. However that all changes on one fateful day in Hayvana. Join him and his crew as they face challenges on the high seas.
[sex] tag added due to a character's sense of humor.
Chapters (37)
Starts fast and keeps going. I had a bit of trouble tracking the characters in all the pronouns, but it wasn't bad. Overall: Good first two chapters. Let's see where this goes.
3924370 I kinda figured it would be a little hard to follow, (It is my first two chapters after all). Thanks for the feedback anyways, by the way thanks for the support, and getting me back into writing (It feels so~~~o great to write again).
No offense to Captain, but Ebony and Rose are my favorite characters so far.
Side note: Do you have references for any of your characters in case one might be in a sketching mood?
4032904 Captain is too busy with his rum to care at the moment. (Don`t worry Rose is my favorite as well.)
References?
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Like art references. What they look like, what their cutie marks are like, what colors to use. Sorta like these that I did for a few of my characters. I don't want to assume what they look like and get everything all wrong :(
There were a few errors, but I ain't nitpicky like that.
I liked the action in this. It felt styled from a movie. Those are always a good source to draw from. I look forward to seeing the crew develop further.
I am really enjoying this so far. I'll be sure to keep reading.
I have a pirate story of my own so feel free to check it out here.
Money says the story ends with a very cloppy chapter when Ebony finally bangs Captain.
PS: You've been over 50 views for a long time. That just shows the number of views of your most viewed chapter. Mouseover the stat to see your TRUE total views. FiM Fic is funny that way...
4437850 That depends how much money?
Really? Huh, you're right... I was close though, I'm only off by several hunderd.
Sorry for the late reply, had a friend over for the weekend.
Captain needs a lesson from Razzly about solving mazes :P
Also, are the other characters going to get story arcs like this? Just wondering since you have a fascinating cast.
4733768 I highly doubt he would take any of it to heart. I think he's just gonna stick to his guns/ swords/ musles/ cannons/ ect...
Yes and no. I have a couple planned out, but I can't think of one for Smokey and Twigs. I've already planned out some for the others (and already written up Starry's).
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4736443 I'm pretty sure you'll like Howler's. Let's just say it's about him going home.
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If he has to save Dimondia from a blue unicorn, then I am excited for that!
(Reference to the MLP comics)
4737785 You had me confused for a second there. I don't get the comics. Thanks for explaining ahead of time.
Oh, deer...
4801182 At first I was going have a deer named John. Then I decided that was basis for getting myself shot for using a horrible pun.
Anyways, glad you enjoyed the chapter (Or at least seems that way). Until next time,
-Sphinx
I am liking the combat. It really feels like you map out the ships' or characters' movements. How much research goes into the getting the terminology correct? (I have no nautical knowledge, so it is all interesting to me.)
4929478 None, no research whatsoever. Actually a minimal amount of research, I only research things that I think are wrong or can be written better if I actually find a nautical term for it. Asides from that I'm winging it.
Thanks for the compliments, I try my best to make the combat as smooth as possible. Until next time,
-Sphinx
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Coulda fooled me. Well, you did since I don't know this stuff. Outside of what I've seen on TV (Mythbusters' pirate specials, for instance), I don't know the terms. And hell, as long as some period historian doesn't magically appear and complain, it is all good.
I've come to realize that if I think of this story as set during the heyday of the British Empire, it makes a lot more sense from a historical allegory perspective.
I got an answer for Starry's ending question: she is tailless! Unless, of course, her tail hairs are too tangled and made of steel to lock her in place. Otherwise, pinning somepony ‘through the tail' would involve cutting through the narrow tail or even her dock! Poor best character
5521680 Right, sorry if I didn't bother doing too much research into the tails of ponies. Just ignore it. Of course I could simply stab it through her foreleg.
5521755 Sorry about that. It was just something that stood out to me. As someone with long hair, getting it caught or pinned via a piercing attack didn't really make sense at the time unless Ebony's mane/tail was tangled to a literal nest (which has happened to me...)
5561284 Yeah, I understand. But it was the only way to make her stay long enough for Starry to confront her.
I liked Diamond's reaction better, but there is massive bias as to why
5707453 I can suspect why.
I'll say to you what was said to me:
U cant halve youre man characterz saye who theye fel b4 the finla chaptr! Taht runs th3 roomants!
5771786 Perhaps you should lay of the beer for a while... I may very well have ruined the romance, but I can say that Ebony is happy at the moment and thus your argument is invalid. Anyways, I doubt putting it at the end would have made it any better. Until next time,
-Sphinx
P.s. did someone really write that?
5773966 Not that exactly, but there were a few complaints that Twilight and TWP being happily in love removed the conflict from their relationship... Ignoring everything AJ was doing (or would that be one...) It falls into the 'reality is unrealistic' category that they could be in love, have no UST, get engaged and only have minor spats instead of something relationship destroying. If you look at the giant review the one person wrote, it said that there was an expectation of some conflict at the end as if a happy wedding wasn't enough of an ending. Tropes are tools and not bad, but it is also not bad to subvert them and expectations once and a while.
5774118 Ah... I see. Yeah, problems can still happen in the relationship. Any VinylxOcty fic shows that really.
*Resists making a self-insert joke knowing that it will bit him in the ass*
5864118 Someone makes a story of a wandering physicist who loves geeky things and nobody bats an eye. But, I add a character of the same race as me and everybody loses their mind!
Kidding, honestly I had vaguely the same though as I was writing the author's notes. "Wait, I just added sphinxes to my story, and I sign my name as Sphinx... I feel so arrogant now..." Pretty well my train of though. But, no it's not a self-insert, just a character of a race that's rarely used. Until next time,
-Sphinx
There's that feeling again...
5866242 It is surprising how few people said I was self-inserting. Then again, I put a bit of myself into all of the characters I write, so it is a whole (growing) family of inserts. Where's your God now?
Everyone has their own thing and if they have an OC of similar description to one appearing in their works, then accusations fly. If the readers are smart, they look beyond that. If not... Well screw them for not being that good of a reader in the first place.
5866290 Fair enough. I remember you saying that you put a bit of yourself into each of your characters. Also, I really can't argue with your story, I liked it too much. Also, my god is Khonus, true goddess of the moon.
And thank you for being a good reader.
-Sphinx
Sphinx encounter op. Nerf patch nau plzkthx.
5881083 It might not be OP. It could be something as simple as Captain and company not being a high enough level. Maybe if Captain didn't jump straight into things. Until next time,
-Sphinx
All I can say is...
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5986448 F*ck Yeah! Well actually, my favorite pokemon is Gardevoir.
Also,
Who the heck is 'J'!? Are you cheating on me!
-Sphinx
5987127 Don't make fun of someone who does 90% of their typing on a tablet these days. It is not ducking fair.
PS: Metagross can handle your puny Psychic/Fairy. Even if it Mega Evolves.
PPS: Starlight would have saved her, nuked the island with the bad guy still on it, then returned to AB to brag about how awesome he is.
5988747 I'm not making fun of your writing, I'm laughing along with you. It's a minor difference.
I only consider Gardevoir a psychic type. Never got any of the games past Diamond due to the fact I can't get a better handheld, so I never got fairy pokemon. Or Mega Evolves for that matter. But, yeah, Metagross is a great pokemon. I still prefer Gardevoir just cause.
Are you really trying to spoil the next chapter already? Until next time,
-Sphinx
5988799 I was just pointing out that if Starlight really wanted to help a friend in danger, he would do something as minor as cast PK Starstorm on a horde of evil changelings to as major as rewrite the map to save the day.
*cut to happy credits music* <\running gag on TV Tropes>
Not going to tease about the tyop in the last sentence of the notes since someone makes up the majority of the comments.
Good ending. Good sequel hook. This is definitely a cast that was enjoyable to follow and learn more about. Overall, I didn't care for the more violent moments, but it came with the territory, so pointless complaint is pointless. Again, I really enjoyed the characters. They made the series come to life and could handle one-shots of their own if need be. Can't wait to see what comes next.
6154000 Thank you very much, for the comments and not teasing me about the typo. Funny how one letter can change a good deal...
Anyways, glad to hear you liked it. The next one should hopefully have a better story to it, mind you I did say hopefully. I don't mind if the action-y parts weren't your favorite, I'm used to the whole 'not my cup of tea' thing. Honestly, I prefer if someone likes the characters, after all, what is a story with no characters. Until next time,
-Sphinx
I have to say, rereading this now, this story is still one of my favorites on this site. I think you did a great job writing this, and I love reading this story every time I come back to it.