In Equestria lies a secret society of super elite who find sport in kidnapping, imprisoning and taming unsuspecting ponies into submissive sex slaves.
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Is it bad that whenever I put up a new chapter I end up refreshing my story page over and over to see if anyone commented?
oh well
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As always, a great addition to the story. My only thoughts are, you already have her submitting...but how far can you take this..*grin intensifies* and maybe you should make one chapter just explaining how some ponies got there and how people are reacting to their disappearance. I mean, if she is a wonderbolt, kinda hard to disappear without turning some heads. But keep up the good work!
I don't know about anyone else, but watching the victim realise how they're being altered against their will but helpless to stop it is incredibly sexy!
Your characterisation of Lightning Dust is also very interesting. Sore spot from her academy days, eh?^^ Poor Fleetfoot.
Lastly, that you take the time to put in background ponies and provide their pictures in the author notes is very much appreciated!
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Thank you for the compliment. As for how Fleetfoot got captured we will touch on that a bit in the next chapter. For now I just hope you enjoy how cute a slave/owner couple she and Lightning Dust are.
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I am glad you like the chapter. Lightning Dust just seems like the kind of pony who would be vindictive over the fact that she was kicked out of the academy. She was the the one who pushed herself harder than anyone else and SHE gets kicked out just because of a little mishap? It's not like Fleetfoot, Spitfire or Soaron have a perfect record and she could fly circles around them if she had to. At least that is her mindset I believe. She certainly would not take it lying down.
I want to make sure that if I use a Background pony that everyone knows who it is to properly visualize it. After all there are so many out there.
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umm... I thank you for your comment, I think. I just would like to point out real quick that you are not the first to come to me saying that Celestia, Luna, Discord, Cadence, Shining Armor, Doctor Whooves, Commander Hurricane and Super Saiyan 4 Gogeta would come down from the heavens to smash the society if they even touched any of the main 6. As such I have already given my arguments to that topic and if you want to see them just put the comments to oldest first.
That aside it seems you only dislike the part where Suri pierced the helpless mare. Well I am sorry that is not to your taste, but I thought it was fine (obviously since I wrote it), I understand that it might be in poor taste, but the intent seems to of hit home even with you. The act was suppose to hurt, a lot, and emphasize Suri's acceptance of her own sadistic side.
Thank you for reading and leaving your opinion. Perhaps if you choose to continue reading you will find something you can enjoy.
I enjoyed this story even though some parts of this had me cringe a bit
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Oh? was there any parts specifically you would like to mention that made you cringe? I am just curious.
3947340 I guess the use of needle with Prim then later with Coco. Another is reading what happened with Octavia when she tried to escape and had to watch Coco please her owner and guests by pleasing herself after the ritual, that actually had me sad a bit. The rape scenes did it too kinda. They weren't like something that would make go "OMG WTF!!" more like got me to stop reading a bit and go "oh my..poor dear..." But like I said I enjoyed reading it either way I would love to see how everything turns out.
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Well I am glad you enjoyed it. I am trying to update it every saturday at the latest so be on the look out for new chapters.
3947566 I will ^^
This story is amazing. Like this is my terrible fantasies written down and I love it
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Glad you enjoy it. I hope that the rest of the chapters can be just as enjoyable.
So it's the, Hellfire Club, for ponies.
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yeah, I remember that weird part of the Xmen too. While this isn't really based on that I guess it is very similar.
3972790 Not that Hellfire Club, there was a British Secret Society, who conducted these types of sexual tortures on unsuspecting women that they'd kidnap. Though, I do know why some ponies would be confused by Xmen.
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Ah I see, but there was a REALLY weird part of the Xmen where everything was super sexualize. I mean Mystique had some arena where she had mutants fight each other and had captured Storm, trying to turn her into a sex slave so she could sell her to some blob.
Then there was a section where they fought against the hellfire club and it had a really heavy bondage theme to it, though it might of been trying to reference the hellfire club that you are talking about. Glad you like the story though. Thank you for the comment.
3972912 You're welcome for the comment, and I think the Xmen creators must've really been fans if the real Hellfire Club, because not only did they base a group of villains off of hem, but there's a villain from the new comics who has a weird obsession with Bondage and torture. Just, a fun little fact.
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Yes, I am quite aware of those who would take pleasure in this story coming to an abrupt end. I am happy that you at least read everything that has been posted so far. I should have another chapter up tomorrow. Thank you for the comment and I hope you continue to read the story, that is if you want to.
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well I hope you enjoy. I am trying my best to update it once a week and I will be putting a new chapter up today.
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well I am not the greatest, but I try my best and that is what counts.
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I am accepting OCs for all positions. Some are just for cameo while others are for more in depth use in the chapters. However, the discretion on how they are used is up to me in the end so if you submit an OC don't expect them to be used a lot or even in the near future. If you want I can send you a form to fill out to submit an OC or two.
a good start to another Arc ^_^
3942517 Oh how I feel the same way
How does nopony notice anypony missing? Fleetfoot is a Wonderbolt for Cekestia's sake! A high ranking member of the military!
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I would have enjoyed it better if not for the pathetic and sorrowful cried of Berry but well done
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In the words of Firebrand, The Equestrian military sucks. Also is Skrol or whatever related to Sombra? Crystal hearts, Crystal unicorn, Fleetfoot's dream.