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This is a story where Rainbowdash get Twilight Sparkle in trouble.  Will they ever find Twilight?!

First Published
19th Nov 2013
Last Modified
19th Nov 2013
Comment posted by dukesofhazzardftw deleted at 7:55am on the 19th of November, 2013
Comment posted by dukesofhazzardftw deleted at 8:08pm on the 19th of November, 2013
Comment posted by KHORNE FLAKES deleted at 7:26pm on the 20th of November, 2013

I really only look at these for the comments.

Comment posted by Silver Starlight deleted at 7:26pm on the 20th of November, 2013

Not sure if trollfic or serious...

Comment posted by moviemaster8510 deleted at 4:05am on the 26th of November, 2013
Comment posted by Fox McCloud deleted at 7:27pm on the 20th of November, 2013
Comment posted by Mayhem Darkshadow deleted at 7:45pm on the 22nd of November, 2013
Comment posted by Thaums deleted at 10:45pm on the 23rd of November, 2013
Comment posted by dukesofhazzardftw deleted at 6:56am on the 24th of November, 2013

Interesting. o.o I actually like it. You did a fantastic job keeping Twilight and Rainbowdash in character, and I like Princess Lilly. She isn't majorly mary-sure, and seems just like an alicorn should. o.o I also like the idea that she is from an "old mares tale."

I think your grammar could use a little work. ^^ Make sure too end your sentences in periods, and keep indenting every time someone new talks. Check your spelling too. Other then that, it's pretty good. o.o I'm actually really looking forward too what's going to happen next. ^^ Well done.

Oh my. This is just fantastic. It's like I'm seeing a Google Transliteration into English. Was this made using uncalibrated Dragon Speech software, or something? I can sincerely say I have no idea what direction this story will take.

Comment posted by Starlight Shadow deleted at 12:00am on the 24th of January, 2014

Spelling. You need to work on your spelling and grammar. Try hiring an editor, it'll do you loads of good.

Comment posted by Merchent343 deleted at 1:37am on the 2nd of March, 2014
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