a colt named Apple Jack, named for his great granny Apple Jack, visits Twilight Sparkle, following family tradition. March 8th- Spell checked version, no major changes.
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You don't think the same-names thing is going to be a consistently confusing problem in this fic?
This story really need to be run through a spellcheck. Seriously.
300812
i second this
i am confused just from the description,
I had the same problem with one of my descriptions, descriptions need to grasp the readers interest and this does not.
You have an interesting premise, and a fairly good grasp of story progression. The main weakness, so far, is the lack of proofreading - there are multiple spelling and grammar mistakes littered throughout.
I recommend giving this a good editing run. It would dramatically improve the quality.
You shouldve named him jackleapp
but seriously the description its self is confusing
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It may have. The problem is that spellcheck wouldn't catch things like 'craved' instead of 'carved', for one example.
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Depending on context, the grammar checker in Word can occasionally pick up that kind of error. It's not a bad tool.
Anyway, there are plenty of typos that any spellcheck will pick up. "libary" and "thier" abound...
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It may have. The problem is that spellcheck wouldn't catch things like 'craved' instead of 'carved', for one example.
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Good premise, quite well told, please take the comments about spell check seriously.
Good story, interesting idea. Nice work.
That's it.... what a tease
8003837 sorry I ought a revisit this story and make a version including cannon events.
8004503 you can keep the seeting, just don't build to the meeting and not provide it