So Fluttershy is an undercover hentai? Is Scootaloo going to be fawning over Rainbow like Barb is fawning over Twilight? So Twilight can hire four more ponies...Is Fluttershy going to be one of them? It looks like she needs to get laid. I think Barb was a shmuck for using the key the same night she got it. Is Barb ever going to meet someone else or is Twilight going to have to go on that date?
Let's see the current and possible future employee rooster. Current Rarity: butler Rainbow dash: chauffeur Future employees Fluttershy: gardener or babysitter Pinkie pie: cook Applejack: possibly secretary or accountant (has to be good at math to run a farm)
The Colgate chapter will be interesting but with Colgate having a dick or using a strapon you may wish to exercise caution, it would not fit in with being an alpha to submit to another, so you may want to make twilight on top or some how show that twilight is the dominant one. But it is your story and you have given no reason to not believe that this will not be good so do what you feel works.
Also this story is great as well, it is always good to see an author take on multiple stories and do all to the same degree of excellence
3756902 Oh boy an Otaku Virgin to Educate! The exact definition is someone who obsesses over something, like someone who likes football would be a football otaku What is commonly used for now is to describe people who read allot of Japaneses manga anime and doujinshi.
Great chapter man, loved it and fluttershy being a closet perv... well things got more interesting. I can't wait for the alpha chapter to come out, though i am sorry to say i don't think i am going to read the colgate chapter.
Yes, more mares for Twilight. I am very much looking forward to seeing how this develops as time goes on. Poor Rarity, finding out your boss is screwing someone just so you can get trained for your job can't be good for the ego. Fluttershy being an otaku? Good, you just made her marginally likable which is more than the show has managed until they gave her bat wings and fangs.
3756902 Gotcha, dood. Thanks for the help. And someone answered your question before I did rather well, dood.
3757613 I think it's funny to have Fluttershy as a closet pervert tbh, dood. No, Scootaloo won't reach Barb levels of adoration for Rainbow Dash. More of a fan like she is on the show. Unfortunately, Fluttershy is a slippery slope for me, she'll either be a friend of Twilight's or she'll lose her noble status and have to find work, dood. As for Barb, I'm actually leaning towards finding a character for Barb to be smitten over, but I also like how possessive she is, like how dragons should be, dood.
3757728 I've stated the employee roster at some point but I think it's out dated. Fluttershy is a unknown, Pinkie is correct, and Applejack was already set to be Twilight's bodyguard.
3757784 I thought I'd try a new take on Rainbow Dash and make her act more like Gilda, just to shake things up. I'll try and make Rainbow more likeable in the next chapter, dood.
3757851 All I can do right now is apologize on Barb's behalf and hope I write her better in the next chapter, dood... but then remember that Barb isn't appearing in that chapter SO I'm going to hope that Barb is better in your eyes on Chapter 9, dood.
3758410 I'm going on the hook that Colgate doesn't like using her dick and Twilight doesn't like using her pussy and Gilda and Berry Punch try to make them more comfortable with them. This will also show that Gilda... still isn't a fan of the term 'herd', dood. And thanks for that last bit of your comment, dood. Shame I can't TRULY work on everything at once but... what can you do, dood?
3758801 The only thing I did in the Colgate chapter so far was have Twilight face fuck Chrysalis and some talking about Minuette rather be sucking dick and eating pussy then pounding ass, dood. But sorry to hear that, dood. The Alpha chapter is going well, 2k words and Twilight already fucks Pinkie and Chrysalis, dood!
3758933 I think I could have made Rarity a bit more pissed off when she found out Vinyl is only training her because Twilight is fucking the DJ, dood. but the words to make it happen didn't come to me, dood.
I see Fluttershy being an Otaku was a roaring success, dood! Shame I can't seem to say the same about Barb being a possessive incestual little sister, or Rainbow Dash being an jerk, dood.
3759595 Nah, I have no problems with either of those myself. Personally I think you pretty much captured Rainbow Dash perfectly since she is only a step away from being a punk/jerk in canon as far as I can tell. Especially a RD that didn't grow up with Fluttershy around.
3759595 I like how you have Barb also. However, I still felt I had to point out that Twilight did make that bet with her. If Barb doesn't find anyone by the end of the month, Twilight will be having sex with her. That's all.
3759889 I think at least 5 people like otakushy, the thing is that like 3 people dislike Barb and Rainbow each, dood... or at least based on the comments, dood.
3760042 Thanks, dood. But I guess I gotta make an effort to make her less of a jerk and show growth while working in Twilight's mansion.
3760127 Thanks, dood. I still dunno how I'm going to end that deal though, dood.
3760204 Rainbow being tricked into sex wasn't planned at all, hell she wasn't planned to be in the chapter. It just happened while I was writing, dood. Like Rarity in Fleur's chapter of Misadventures.
3760962 I got your post and added what wasn't already there, dood. I also removed Clay Body because that's the reason why the Spell blog post was less fun for me, dood.
3761130 Even Fluttershy needs to have plans for when she's having the vapors, dood.
Nice. Vinyl shut Barb down pretty good. Honestly, once Barb learns not to be such a controlling prick regarding her sister (did I really just type that? ) I may start to like her.
That two dick bit looked freaking painful. Otakushy. Hell yes. That can only end well.
3761395 The Double-dicking was written for Wrabbit cause evidently he likes that, dood. Shame he didn't like how the person getting double-dicked acted throughout the story so far, dood.
And Barb is SLOWLY learning... emphasis on slowly, dood. And everyone loves Otakushy, dood.
I have to say that I like how this is progressing. A few things to note: Otakushy is a big hit. I don't know why you were so worried about her. Fluttershy's status I would keep the same. Let Twilight have a contemporary to compare and contrast with her herd. Heck, Give Shy her own herd (I'm sure she'd love to explore some of the things she's read about in her Neighponese manga).
Re: Dash. Once she comes down from her Bitch Throne, she should become more tolerable (that's about as far as I can honestly say I like her). The double-dick scene was very HAWT, and I can't wait to see what you do with tentacles/magic pseudopods.
Re: Barb. I really like what you've done with her so far. The whole MINE! thing she has going on with her sister is simultaneously adorable, funny, and hot. Also, it's not too late to re-up her punishment, you know. The next chappie isn't out yet, and you can just make a mention of the punishment being reinstated next update.
Re: Rarity. I like that you didn't put Rarispike into the story, because it really opens up whole new angles. Rarity continues to be the toughest for you to write for, huh? To be honest, you've put her into a precarious position due to her personality and ambitions. I say roll with it, and don't be afraid to have her mess up (within reason, of course); it'll make for some good comedy bits.
3763002 I'm super surprised that Otakushy was a hit, dood. And I love how everyone likes it. neobrony7 recently hit me up in the google.docs chat room talking about how I should make Pinkie celibate instead of innocent because I might have made her too innocent. (Reaosn behind this is because I wanted to make a lame joke about how Pinkie firmly believes that a One-eyed trouser snake is actually a Pirate Snake wearing pants, dood)
And so far... Dash still has her bitchy moments in the next chapter but it isn't that bad and I haven't used Barb a lot in the chapter. I'm glad people like Bonez because he's coming back for a chapter before getting benched for awhile, dood.
3764550 Yeah, I checked, I was wrong. I must have this confused with another futa story, or the fact that hemaphrodites are usually infertile (I think)
3764561 Hermaphrodites are technically infertile and Twilight (Misadventures) was always planned to be that way.... but EVERYONE wanted Twilight to knock ponies up, dood. And I'm a sucker for trying to please everyone, dood.
I loved it all it just keeps getting better and better.It's so awesome that Shys into manga and anime .I cant wait to see whats next. Andim happy Dash get domanated .
“That’s… a strange bird, but she’s right. Stallions are so… full of themselves and are basically assholes. Mares are better, softer, kinder, and hotter,” Rainbow replied, she turned to the yellow pegasus with a seductive grin on her face. “Happy?”
Does she realize she's basically describing herself
poor Barb, she is SO getting short changed
3756782 Just like her male self in the show, dood.
No prob. Also, Tomas Burns is me, I don't usually use aliases for Email/facebook stuff.
That was pretty interesting, dood. I gotta go do dishes now.
EDIT: I thought the clop scene was good. And what the fuck is an Otaku, dood? Because I have no idea.
So Fluttershy is an undercover hentai?
Is Scootaloo going to be fawning over Rainbow like Barb is fawning over Twilight?
So Twilight can hire four more ponies...Is Fluttershy going to be one of them? It looks like she needs to get laid.
I think Barb was a shmuck for using the key the same night she got it.
Is Barb ever going to meet someone else or is Twilight going to have to go on that date?
Yay!
Let's see the current and possible future employee rooster.
Current
Rarity: butler
Rainbow dash: chauffeur
Future employees
Fluttershy: gardener or babysitter
Pinkie pie: cook
Applejack: possibly secretary or accountant (has to be good at math to run a farm)
This take on Rainbow Dash is still confusing me. She just doesn't feel like Rainbow Dash at all.
For be honest Barb annoys me the rest is good
if this is getting where i think is getting at, fluttershy would have an heart attack when she discovers that twilight is a futanari... keep it up
wow, Barb is super possessive. can't wait to see how that eventually turns out.
The Colgate chapter will be interesting but with Colgate having a dick or using a strapon you may wish to exercise caution, it would not fit in with being an alpha to submit to another, so you may want to make twilight on top or some how show that twilight is the dominant one. But it is your story and you have given no reason to not believe that this will not be good so do what you feel works.
Also this story is great as well, it is always good to see an author take on multiple stories and do all to the same degree of excellence
3756902 Oh boy an Otaku Virgin to Educate!
The exact definition is someone who obsesses over something, like someone who likes football would be a football otaku
What is commonly used for now is to describe people who read allot of Japaneses manga anime and doujinshi.
The sex scene was amazing.
Great chapter man, loved it and fluttershy being a closet perv... well things got more interesting. I can't wait for the alpha chapter to come out, though i am sorry to say i don't think i am going to read the colgate chapter.
Yes, more mares for Twilight. I am very much looking forward to seeing how this develops as time goes on. Poor Rarity, finding out your boss is screwing someone just so you can get trained for your job can't be good for the ego. Fluttershy being an otaku? Good, you just made her marginally likable which is more than the show has managed until they gave her bat wings and fangs.
3756902 Gotcha, dood. Thanks for the help. And someone answered your question before I did rather well, dood.
3757613 I think it's funny to have Fluttershy as a closet pervert tbh, dood. No, Scootaloo won't reach Barb levels of adoration for Rainbow Dash. More of a fan like she is on the show. Unfortunately, Fluttershy is a slippery slope for me, she'll either be a friend of Twilight's or she'll lose her noble status and have to find work, dood. As for Barb, I'm actually leaning towards finding a character for Barb to be smitten over, but I also like how possessive she is, like how dragons should be, dood.
3757663 , dood.
3757728 I've stated the employee roster at some point but I think it's out dated. Fluttershy is a unknown, Pinkie is correct, and Applejack was already set to be Twilight's bodyguard.
3757784 I thought I'd try a new take on Rainbow Dash and make her act more like Gilda, just to shake things up. I'll try and make Rainbow more likeable in the next chapter, dood.
3757851 All I can do right now is apologize on Barb's behalf and hope I write her better in the next chapter, dood... but then remember that Barb isn't appearing in that chapter SO I'm going to hope that Barb is better in your eyes on Chapter 9, dood.
3757863 It will be a treat, dood.
3758436 Thank you for answering a question, dood
3758410 I'm going on the hook that Colgate doesn't like using her dick and Twilight doesn't like using her pussy and Gilda and Berry Punch try to make them more comfortable with them. This will also show that Gilda... still isn't a fan of the term 'herd', dood. And thanks for that last bit of your comment, dood. Shame I can't TRULY work on everything at once but... what can you do, dood?
3758510 Thanks, dood
3758801 The only thing I did in the Colgate chapter so far was have Twilight face fuck Chrysalis and some talking about Minuette rather be sucking dick and eating pussy then pounding ass, dood. But sorry to hear that, dood. The Alpha chapter is going well, 2k words and Twilight already fucks Pinkie and Chrysalis, dood!
3758933 I think I could have made Rarity a bit more pissed off when she found out Vinyl is only training her because Twilight is fucking the DJ, dood. but the words to make it happen didn't come to me, dood.
I see Fluttershy being an Otaku was a roaring success, dood! Shame I can't seem to say the same about Barb being a possessive incestual little sister, or Rainbow Dash being an jerk, dood.
FlutterOtaku...I accept this head canon proudly.
Also, i'd just like to say that my only good clopfic wouldn't exist without your stories, keep doin what you do best.
3759768 Wow really? Thanks, dood. Glad you enjoy my stupidity.
3757728
You do remember that AJ is known for her dislikes of "fancy mathematics" It's implied in the show that Big Macintosh is the one who keeps the books.
Also, like I said, otaku Fluttershy is an interesting concept. So you can say that at least one person likes it.
3759595
Nah, I have no problems with either of those myself. Personally I think you pretty much captured Rainbow Dash perfectly since she is only a step away from being a punk/jerk in canon as far as I can tell. Especially a RD that didn't grow up with Fluttershy around.
3759595 I like how you have Barb also. However, I still felt I had to point out that Twilight did make that bet with her. If Barb doesn't find anyone by the end of the month, Twilight will be having sex with her. That's all.
I actually like how much of a jerk Rainbow is (was) which led to her getting dominated by Twilight while they basically tricked her into the sex
Otakushy was goddamn hilarious
3758436
Ah, okay, thanks ^_^. Cuz I had no idea.
3759595
Okay, and no problem. Helping is fun!
I just think Twilight should have said the following at the end before Barb closes the door, "Also, four weeks."
Just saying. XD
3759889 I think at least 5 people like otakushy, the thing is that like 3 people dislike Barb and Rainbow each, dood... or at least based on the comments, dood.
3760042 Thanks, dood. But I guess I gotta make an effort to make her less of a jerk and show growth while working in Twilight's mansion.
3760127 Thanks, dood. I still dunno how I'm going to end that deal though, dood.
3760204 Rainbow being tricked into sex wasn't planned at all, hell she wasn't planned to be in the chapter. It just happened while I was writing, dood. Like Rarity in Fleur's chapter of Misadventures.
3760312 Thanks, dood. Glad you enjoyed it
3760815 GOD DAMMIT, I totally should have, dood.
3760881
You might wanna have a look at your spelld blog post, I made some suggestions
i loved this chapter, especially fluttershy
HA!
3760962 I got your post and added what wasn't already there, dood. I also removed Clay Body because that's the reason why the Spell blog post was less fun for me, dood.
3761130 Even Fluttershy needs to have plans for when she's having the vapors, dood.
Nice. Vinyl shut Barb down pretty good. Honestly, once Barb learns not to be such a controlling prick regarding her sister (did I really just type that? ) I may start to like her.
That two dick bit looked freaking painful.
Otakushy. Hell yes. That can only end well.
3761395 The Double-dicking was written for Wrabbit cause evidently he likes that, dood. Shame he didn't like how the person getting double-dicked acted throughout the story so far, dood.
And Barb is SLOWLY learning... emphasis on slowly, dood. And everyone loves Otakushy, dood.
3761425
Character development FTW!
3759595
i still might read the chapter for the sake of the plot.
I have to say that I like how this is progressing. A few things to note: Otakushy is a big hit. I don't know why you were so worried about her. Fluttershy's status I would keep the same. Let Twilight have a contemporary to compare and contrast with her herd. Heck, Give Shy her own herd (I'm sure she'd love to explore some of the things she's read about in her Neighponese manga).
Re: Dash. Once she comes down from her Bitch Throne, she should become more tolerable (that's about as far as I can honestly say I like her). The double-dick scene was very HAWT, and I can't wait to see what you do with tentacles/magic pseudopods.
Re: Barb. I really like what you've done with her so far. The whole MINE! thing she has going on with her sister is simultaneously adorable, funny, and hot. Also, it's not too late to re-up her punishment, you know. The next chappie isn't out yet, and you can just make a mention of the punishment being reinstated next update.
Re: Rarity. I like that you didn't put Rarispike into the story, because it really opens up whole new angles. Rarity continues to be the toughest for you to write for, huh? To be honest, you've put her into a precarious position due to her personality and ambitions. I say roll with it, and don't be afraid to have her mess up (within reason, of course); it'll make for some good comedy bits.
3763002 I'm super surprised that Otakushy was a hit, dood. And I love how everyone likes it. neobrony7 recently hit me up in the google.docs chat room talking about how I should make Pinkie celibate instead of innocent because I might have made her too innocent. (Reaosn behind this is because I wanted to make a lame joke about how Pinkie firmly believes that a One-eyed trouser snake is actually a Pirate Snake wearing pants, dood)
And so far... Dash still has her bitchy moments in the next chapter but it isn't that bad and I haven't used Barb a lot in the chapter. I'm glad people like Bonez because he's coming back for a chapter before getting benched for awhile, dood.
You know, after reading this chapter... I drew lines between Rainbow Dash and Launchpad. And the CMC and Huey, Dewey, and Louie. My brain is random.
But now I totally need a pony filk of the Ducktales theme.
Randomness aside, it was a great chapter. Love the mental image of Twilight slowfucking Dash's ass to multiple orgasms while Dash cusses at her.
I could be wrong but didn't Twilight state that her cum is sterile?
3764531 I don't think Twilight ever stated her cum was sterile in this story, dood.
3764550
Yeah, I checked, I was wrong. I must have this confused with another futa story, or the fact that hemaphrodites are usually infertile (I think)
3764561 Hermaphrodites are technically infertile and Twilight (Misadventures) was always planned to be that way.... but EVERYONE wanted Twilight to knock ponies up, dood. And I'm a sucker for trying to please everyone, dood.
3764291
Wait, you're already working on the next chappie? And I didn't get an invite?
Doesn't really make sense, should probably be "Checking out if the place has changed".
3784789 Brute Force, dood. Rainbow Dash has it, and I'm pretty sure Barb would fight tooth and nail to save Twilight.
Barb got cock-blocked again
I loved it all it just keeps getting better and better.It's so awesome that Shys into manga and anime .I cant wait to see whats next. Andim happy Dash get domanated .
I just found this story and I'm quite surprised that you nailed it
With Fluttershy being an OTAKU, excellent chapter and sex scenes.
Flutters as a Anime nerd is great.
It's not far off of canon.
And Twi knew about Vinyl giving Barb the key! Beautiful!
Barb seems disturbingly rape-y......
Does she realize she's basically describing herself