Here's a suggestion: stop the Prinny speak, "dood". It makes your summary hard to read and extremely annoying. You just lost any interest I had in actually reading the story.
4272884 It's kind of my thing, dood. While I'm sorry something like that has turned you off my story, I'm still not going to stop adding 'dood' to all my comments and Author's notes... as well as the small things in the descriptions, dood. I could probably decrease the amount but I'm not going to remove all of them.
Oh wow, you actually did it. I'm incredibly honored that you took advice from me.
Anyways, so yeah, the chapter was good. Really, all I had to say about the chapter was said in the PM.
4272884 Never really bothered me. The story is fun enough to read that Prinny speak in authors notes is ignorable. Heck, it’s not even annoying. The summary didn’t have any sort of speak in it except for the trigger warnings.
Not sure why you’d not read the entire story because of a speech gimmick.
4272917 Because that "speech gimmick" is the reason I take a sledgehammer to any of the games I make an attempt to play. It gives me homicidal tendencies. Don't know why. Just does.
4273283 Then why are you here? If it wasn't obvious this story is about a mare with a dick, and it'll involve that mare screwing other mares with said dick (plus one dragoness and any other race that isn't pony). So if you don't like it, there are hundreds of other options for you to choose from.
4273477 I said it wasn't my thing. I never said I never read futa, it's just rare. To answer the question I came from the front page where the summary is shorter. I didn't KNOW it was futa. I didn't learn until I read the summary.
actually, i like reading it twice. the first time satisfies my need to point out and fix any issues i manage to spot, and the next is when we get to see it all put together! i see i more as a builder or something along those lines.
Y'know, Twilight was weird in that restaurant scene. The first half, she was flailing about like a goldfish out of water, with no idea of how to handle such a ridiculous situation. And then, POOMPH, she remembers important things like connections and money and how Diamond's stupid little story was about as capable of hurting her as a spring breeze.
4275188 I didn't see it that way, dood. Twilight was just taking in all the information, the only time It may have appeared as such was when Pinkie popped up as her waitress, other than that.... she's seemed pretty okay to me, dood.
Another great man, loved every second as twilight tore it into Diamond T. Sliver spoon i considered to be the most redeemable of the two and am glad you notice that too. Anyway, can't wait for the next chapter, hopefully a sex scene... with Applejack. Also what exactly is the plot, i think there is one but i can't tell where exactly it is leading too, unless this story is a PWP as well.
“In the span of two days, a tree was thrown into my office at Spark’s Designs, Applejack knocked me unconscious when she accused me of seducing his brother into modelling for my company, and Barb nearly raped me, I say nearly because I did give my consent to do so… at first,” Twilight explained.
I loved this edition! I really hope Diamond gets destroyed by this. Are you planning on doing something with Silver Spoon? Like making her a friend of Bard's later (or more)? Your stuff is looking amazing! Keep this up! You are amazing! *gives you the prinny hero sword*
I actually wonder how is it that a lot of customers within the restaurant were actually not caring about the fact that Twilight is a futa. Not against but shouldn't there be more of a reaction or something?
4278089 That was a futile attempt to of me to prove that... there are ALOT more futas in this world then previously thought, and kids are always those kind of shmucks that look for 'differences' before making fun of them, dood.
Wow. I don't know where my mind is lately. I even read that and commented on it in the draft phase. Don't mind me. Just trying to get my act together over here.
Still loveing the story so far ^.^ surprised with the whole ss and dt thing, honestly was expecting it to have been AJ to have thrown the tree XD laughed so hard at the restaurant scene , " she has a dick!! " LOL can't wait for more ^_^
Diamond Tiara (and Silver Spoon) tried to blackmail Twilight Sparkle? Really? Those two are going to be in so much trouble that it isn't going to be funny. However, I think Sweet Breeze and Diamond Tiara would get along nicely. And Scootaloo has just proven herself to be a security risk. Twilight is going to need to have a long talk with her. I look forward to seeing which Trixie shows up (nice or bitchy or nice that puts up a bitch front or bitch that puts up a nice front.) BTW, is AJ living in the Sparkle household? Would make sense since she's Twilight's bodyguard.
4301526 Well then, I hope the next chapter does a good job, dood. Sunset and Trixie gets more screen time, as well as me fully shutting down ANY chance of FlashLight happening in the event someone might be hoping for it after his mention in the first chapter, dood.
I still haven't decided if I wanna do a sex scene in this chapter, dood.
Here's a suggestion: stop the Prinny speak, "dood". It makes your summary hard to read and extremely annoying. You just lost any interest I had in actually reading the story.
Dodged two bullets by the skin of her teeth. Now get back to work you damned Prinny.
4272884 It's kind of my thing, dood. While I'm sorry something like that has turned you off my story, I'm still not going to stop adding 'dood' to all my comments and Author's notes... as well as the small things in the descriptions, dood. I could probably decrease the amount but I'm not going to remove all of them.
Oh wow, you actually did it.
I'm incredibly honored that you took advice from me.
Anyways, so yeah, the chapter was good. Really, all I had to say about the chapter was said in the PM.
4272884
Never really bothered me. The story is fun enough to read that Prinny speak in authors notes is ignorable. Heck, it’s not even annoying. The summary didn’t have any sort of speak in it except for the trigger warnings.
Not sure why you’d not read the entire story because of a speech gimmick.
4272910
Toning down is good.
4272917
Because that "speech gimmick" is the reason I take a sledgehammer to any of the games I make an attempt to play. It gives me homicidal tendencies. Don't know why. Just does.
4272884 If you're the only view the author is missing, then you're the one losing out on this amazing story, not the author.
4272910
Yup, and you even have me doing it, dood. Granted, I haven't even heard of prinnies until you told me, but you know, Disgaea is fun!
..Save the Silver One!
4272932
Thou hast a serious problem
4273253
Aye. That I do, mien freund.
4272936
Meh. Futa isn't my thing anyway.
This story continues to be great! Keep up the good work!
This chapter man, I loved it!!
Suck it Diamond Tiara, you don't mess with Twilight
Looking forward to more.
Keep up the good work.
4273283 Then why are you here? If it wasn't obvious this story is about a mare with a dick, and it'll involve that mare screwing other mares with said dick (plus one dragoness and any other race that isn't pony). So if you don't like it, there are hundreds of other options for you to choose from.
4273477
I said it wasn't my thing. I never said I never read futa, it's just rare.
To answer the question I came from the front page where the summary is shorter. I didn't KNOW it was futa. I didn't learn until I read the summary.
actually, i like reading it twice. the first time satisfies my need to point out and fix any issues i manage to spot, and the next is when we get to see it all put together! i see i more as a builder or something along those lines.
when this all pans out, daimond is about to find out the meaning of 'fraud' which isn't going to end well for her.
Best chapter.
Y'know, Twilight was weird in that restaurant scene. The first half, she was flailing about like a goldfish out of water, with no idea of how to handle such a ridiculous situation. And then, POOMPH, she remembers important things like connections and money and how Diamond's stupid little story was about as capable of hurting her as a spring breeze.
A very odd transformation.
4272899 I'm trying, dood!
4272917 If I see a good idea that can work, I like to use it... GOSH DARN IT, I forgot to credit you for it, dood.
4273218 The plan is coming together, dood.
4273224 She'll be back, dood. They ALWAYS come back.
4273307 Yay, dood!
4273336 Diamond Tiara is the Blueblood of the filly world
4273715 That's neat, dood. I have problems reading things twice, dood.
4273919 Kids just can't do their fraud right, dood.
4274779 Achievement get, dood!
4275188 I didn't see it that way, dood. Twilight was just taking in all the information, the only time It may have appeared as such was when Pinkie popped up as her waitress, other than that.... she's seemed pretty okay to me, dood.
4275466 ..I really, REALLY hope the Gembitch doesn't return. The Silver One deserves better.
Another great man, loved every second as twilight tore it into Diamond T. Sliver spoon i considered to be the most redeemable of the two and am glad you notice that too. Anyway, can't wait for the next chapter, hopefully a sex scene... with Applejack. Also what exactly is the plot, i think there is one but i can't tell where exactly it is leading too, unless this story is a PWP as well.
4276169 Thanks, dood. Glad you liked it. I dunno who is getting poked next. Also, what is PwP, dood?
4275466
Nah it's alright. I'm just surprised that happened. :P
4276181
It means a plot without a plot.
Fun chapter, as usual. In fact, I have a reward for you. *makes two treasure chests appear, one large and one small*
One of these holds some hl and mana, and the other holds an explosion with enough force to equal a small tantrum from Etna.
Choose wisely.
Should be her rather than his.
4272884 There's hardly any "dood" in the summary whatsoever, and if that little is enough to turn you off from a story... Well, your loss.
Heck, as long as it isn't in the story itself, Prinny speak is funny.
I loved this edition! I really hope Diamond gets destroyed by this. Are you planning on doing something with Silver Spoon? Like making her a friend of Bard's later (or more)? Your stuff is looking amazing! Keep this up! You are amazing! *gives you the prinny hero sword*
4277216 I choose the small one, dood. the big one could be a trap.
4277263 Oh, that's lame of me, dood.
4277426 I actually changed it, it use to be like seven 'doods' but not any more, dood.
4277443 Silver Spoon has something planned for her, I won't say what, dood. And thanks!
I actually wonder how is it that a lot of customers within the restaurant were actually not caring about the fact that Twilight is a futa. Not against but shouldn't there be more of a reaction or something?
4278089 That was a futile attempt to of me to prove that... there are ALOT more futas in this world then previously thought, and kids are always those kind of shmucks that look for 'differences' before making fun of them, dood.
4278046 I was referring to the original summary, though. I didn't find those doods offputting at all.
4278170 Oh okay, dood.
4278046 Wise move. You gained 2000hl and 100 mana.
Interesting. I was wrong.
I was expecting the tree to have been thrown by
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Was not expecting the tools.
Well played mate.
4281220 See? I can be deceptive and clever sometimes, dood.
4281367
Now you just have to tell us how they found out about Twi's wedding tackle.
4283784 I already did, dood. Scootaloo and Sweetie Belle mentioned it by accident while talkign about Rainbow Dash being cool, dood.
Wow. I don't know where my mind is lately. I even read that and commented on it in the draft phase. Don't mind me. Just trying to get my act together over here.
I really like how you write, this fic always makes me laugh, a lot!
Please update soon!
Still loveing the story so far ^.^ surprised with the whole ss and dt thing, honestly was expecting it to have been AJ to have thrown the tree XD laughed so hard at the restaurant scene , " she has a dick!! " LOL can't wait for more ^_^
Diamond Tiara (and Silver Spoon) tried to blackmail Twilight Sparkle? Really? Those two are going to be in so much trouble that it isn't going to be funny. However, I think Sweet Breeze and Diamond Tiara would get along nicely. And Scootaloo has just proven herself to be a security risk. Twilight is going to need to have a long talk with her.
I look forward to seeing which Trixie shows up (nice or bitchy or nice that puts up a bitch front or bitch that puts up a nice front.) BTW, is AJ living in the Sparkle household? Would make sense since she's Twilight's bodyguard.
4301526 Well then, I hope the next chapter does a good job, dood. Sunset and Trixie gets more screen time, as well as me fully shutting down ANY chance of FlashLight happening in the event someone might be hoping for it after his mention in the first chapter, dood.
I still haven't decided if I wanna do a sex scene in this chapter, dood.
4334192 I only know of a few for male masturbating but not female, dood.
DT: "TWILIGHT HAS A PENIS!"
I was half expecting someone to yell "who gives a sh*t!"
4958568 I was expecting for someone to shout "Who Cares!" Or "We Don't Give A Fuck"
That chapter had me LOTF.