Twilights wings

by Lemoncupquakes

Cloudsdale

After she was sure everything was fine with Sweet Apple Achers, she went to check to see if the tornado had bothered Cloudsdale at all. She was pretty sure that most of the pegesus there where fine, due to the fact that since pegesi deal with all of the weather, the have better protection against storms.

When she got there she was oh so wrong. Everything there was just as bad as it was in Ponyville. She went to see Rainbow Dash to see if she knew what happened.

"Rainbow?"

"Yeah?"

"What in Equestria happened here?"

"Umm...... Yeah, about that...... It wasn't just a tornado that passed through Ponyville, it was actually an extremely rare storm caused by magic releases from the Everfree Forest called a Super Magical Quantoniam Release Storm. S.M.Q.R.S. For short"

A weird silence took place.

"How do you know?"

"Yeah, um...... You see when you decide to take a weather job, you need to go through training, and you have to learn that before you start"

"Ok, but um, how did the mayor of Ponyville not know that?"

"Oh well, um, you see most Pegasus where injured and the ones who weren't where taking care of the injured so we haven't been able to get a message down"

"Oh, ok, well, will Cloudsdale be alright?"

"Yeah, we should be better before long"

"Ok, bye"

"Bye"

Author's Note:

Not very detailed, I know, but it explains some of what happened

Comments

[Pyro The Reader]

Eugh, chapter way too short, weaboo Twilight, tons of punctuation and spelling errors... I dunno man, maybe you should;

A. Set at least a 500 word goal per chapter and maybe try to do 50 more every week, till you get to a good number, but don't try to force the words, then it seems the story itself is forced.
B. Get a spellchecker program or an editor.
C. Or if you just get a spellchecker maybe read it over again, took me a minute to read all eleven chapters, shouldn't take too long to check it over for spelling or punctuation errors.

Got a nice concept dude, just the story itself needs some love and polishing. I should add, I ain't a writer, just my personal opinion, sorry if I offended.

[Lemoncupquakes]

It's okay, I was wondering when someone was going to point that out, and YES! I do have an editor