Oh gawd that was bad

Dude, no. Just... just no.

Holy mother of dislikes xD I need to read this soon lol.

All your stories seem to have alot of dislikes actually..

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The only thing I enjoyed about this story, is that apparently ponies can weld.

Pinkie and Applebloom left for 45 movements,
wat
This story is already full of mistakes but this... just fucked with my eyes for some reason.

mot the worst story i ever heard... but not the best
5\10 for this

There's still a ton of mistakes, like switching hands and hoofs and typos.

But... God help me, I-I want more of this.

Besides the needleplay I liked the idea behind the story. But I have to agree with most of the other guys that your writing still needs improvement. Especially the length is bothering me. The scenes are to short to let me get into the story, you could be a bit more descriptive about the happenings. So neither thump down nor thump up from me.
Also I would have liked a brothel chapter or something like that.

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Essentially this, up to and including liking to see a brothel chapter.