Chapter 6: Visiting The Ville
Sombra stood in the middle of the street, slumped down and unmoving. His face was in the dirt, his cape covering much of his back while he breathed in the scent of the Ponyville road. A sad fate for the ex-tyrant, that was for sure.
Of course, Pinkie Pie was oblivious to his miserable predicament.
“Come on, Sombra! You just can’t laze around in the middle of the road like that!” Pinkie said, bouncing around Sombra with that detested unlimited energy she seemed to radiate.
Sombra covered his glowing eyes with both hooves. “I was hoping that a cart would arrive and run me over. Extra points if it runs you over as well.”
“Hey, no need to be a grumpy stump down in a slump.” Stopping her monotonous bouncing, she leaned closer to Sombra’s covered face. Lifting a hoof from his eye, she asked, “Since this is your first time touring Ponyville, where do you wanna go? I know every place and everypony here, so I can introduce you to all my friends.”
“I don’t want to see your friends, and I don’t want a tour of your town!” Sombra replied, slapping Pinkie’s hoof out of his face. “What I want is to burn this wretched village to the ground!”
“Isn’t that what we have a fire station for?”
Sombra groaned and gritted his sharp fangs so hard he was sure they’d crack. There was only so much torture he could handle, and the pink menace known as Pinkie Pie had cut his endurance into itsy-bitsy pieces and then trampled upon them under her hoof. How so much annoyingness coupled with jubilant energy managed to be contained in one pony, he’d never know. What Sombra did know, however, was that he couldn’t take it much more.
“Listen,” he said, practically hissing the words to her. “I’ll go wherever you want if you’d just shut up!”
Sombra instantly regretted those words when he felt himself be picked up by the mare and enwrapped in her hooves. Strong hooves, he noticed when they cut off air to the rest of his body.
“Yaaaaaaay!” Pinkie shouted, shaking Sombra in her powerful grip to and fro. “We can go to Sugarcube Corner, then to the park, then to the ice cream stand, and then to the fountain! And say hello to all the ponies along the way. I just know you’ll become good once you see how nice everypony else is!”
“R-remember what we—hack—agreed to!” Sombra coughed out, feeling his windpipe collapsing in on itself. The armor he always wore offered little protection to Pinkie’s backbreaking hugs. “No talking!”
Pinkie looked at Sombra with a quivering lip and dejected look. “Awww, but how else will I introduce you to everypony?”
Sombra pushed Pinkie off himself and brushed off his velvet cape. “Just try to manage to keep your insufferable trap shut, got it?” He really wanted to say more of how much he despised her very presence, but then he’d be repeating himself.
“Okie dokie, Sombrokie!” Pinkie giggled, throwing up a salute.
“And stop with the nicknames!” Sombra demanded. Though his words fell on deaf ears. Or ears just out of earshot, since Pinkie was already bounding ahead, unhinged. Grumbling, Sombra slowly trotted behind her, each hoofstep truding through the earth. He detested that pink mare to no end, but he really had no choice to follow her to wherever she wanted to take him. Not like staying in that library with that nuisance Twilight was any better. “Though right now, it seems like a better idea,” Sombra said aloud.
Pinkie bounced on ahead, stopping every now and then for Sombra’s intentionally slow pace to catch up with her. More buildings sprung up around the pair as they entered deeper into the town. Sombra noted that they had the same consistent variety of hay thatched roofs and simplistic architecture that resulted in nothing more than third story country homes. The entire area had a warm and fuzzy air to it that left Sombra with a sickening feeling in his stomach. Didn’t help that Pinkie had to smile and wave to every pony they passed by.
After the seventh or so greeting, Sombra asked, “Will you cut that out already?”
Stopping in her tracks and twirling around to face him, Pinkie asked, “Why?”
Sombra accidentally bumped into her nose with his own, and immediately sidetracked back from her incredible closeness. “Will you… ugh!” Sombra groaned under his breath and ran a hoof down the center of his face. “Stop intruding on my personal space!”
“Well, what is your personal space?” Pinkie asked, staring at him curiously.
Sombra ran a hoof across the earth, creating a straight line on the ground at least two feet in front of himself. “This is my personal space,” Sombra said, pointing to the line. “It is a space that only myself can be in and myself alone. Do not cross it. Got it?”
Pinkie saluted, but before she could say her usual bit Sombra interrupted her and said, “And no, you can never say okie dokie lokie in my presence ever again.”
“Aww, why not?”
Sombra gave her a deadpan look, then walked past her, taking care to keep that two foot metaphorical separation barrier between them. “Just get on with showing me your pathetic shamble of a town.”
“Well, we have town square right here!” Pinkie said, pointing this way and that at the large plaza they just entered from the road. Ponies hustled and bustled this way and that, with a much more lively attitude than the rest of the town. Market stalls sold every variety of food a pony’s stomach can take and their mouth can chew. A couple of shops were also open, with a large selection of goods and trinkets for sale in their windows. Overall, it was a pristine view of a small town life.
And Sombra hated every single second of it.
The commerce, the business of the market, the happy smiling faces of each and every Ponyville citizen. It annoyed him to no end how bright and sunny everyone was.
“Sombra, are you okay?” Pinkie asked, noticing Sombra having stopped in his tracks and glaring darkly at the ensemble of passing ponies.
In his empire it would be much different. Crystal ponies shackled together, forced to march down the streets in single file for their duty in the mines. How dejected their souls were each and every day. Total hopelessness coupled with a permanent air of sadness he was sure to create for every waking second in his empire. Just utter darkness and misery for all those under his rule.
Pinkie titled her head in curiosity. Now Sombra was smiling. Though it wasn’t exactly a happy or joyous smile. More like a ‘I’m a heartless maniac’ type of smile.
“Sooooombry!” Pinkie called out, waving her hoof in front of his muzzle.
“Cryyyyyystal slaaaaaaaaves,” Sombra hissed, fangs parted almost like he was going to pounce at something. Blinking and shaking his head, Sombra glared at Pinkie and said, “Didn’t I already tell you to not call me by any nicknames, cretin?”
“But you were acting all weirdo-mojo!” Pinkie exclaimed while throwing her hooves up in the air in exasperation. “What with the staring at everypony and then the crystals and slaves thing you just said. Are you acting okay?”
“Never better,” Sombra snapped back. “I’m feeling fine about being held against my will in a backcountry hick of a town where I hate every single citizen. Yeah, I’m just great!”
“Oh, okay, just wanted to make sure.” Pinkie smiled kindly to Sombra, who in turn contrasted her cheery grin with a deep and troubling frown.
“Apparently sarcasm is lost on your tiny excuse for a brain,” Sombra muttered under his breath.
Pinkie tapped her temple. “But my brain isn’t tiny.” Pinkie gave her head a good rattle, with what sounded like cogs of a machine clicking and clanking inside.
Sombra grimaced and stuck out his tongue in disgust.
“Can you not act weird for five minutes?” he asked, holding back a begging tone. “Just… just actually try, got it?”
“But there’s nothing wrong about being weird, Sombry,” Pinkie said.
“No nicknames!”
“You see, Sombry, everypony is a bit weird,” Pinkie explained while Sombra facehoofed. “It’s what makes us unique and special.”
“You mean weak and stupid?” Sombra asked.
Pinkie giggled. “No, sillyhorn, weird is what makes you you.”
“You just used ‘you’ twice there,” Sombra pointed out, still not getting the point.
Now Pinkie was the one to frown, but she quickly covered it up with an impossibly wide grin that sent shivers down Sombra’s spine at the sheer length of it. “I did, but that isn’t the point! I’m weird, you’re weird, everypony is weird! All of Equestria is weird! That’s why every single pony is special, because of their weirdness! Without weird, we’d all be boring, bland, and normal. Better to be a bit—or a lot—on the strange side than just a boring two-hooves that is all grumpy and mean.”
Sombra stared at her flatly, releasing a long held back sigh. “Pinkie, you’re an imbecile.”
He brushed past her, while Pinkie stared at his coattails as he walked on ahead. Pouting her lip, Pinkie followed him trotted faster to keep up. “Says the guy with sideburns,” she said to herself, giggling.
“What was that?” Sombra called over his shoulder.
“Nothing, Sombry!” she replied, barely able to hold back a laugh as she caught sight of his noticeably bad facial hair. She’d really have to take him for a trim at the barber sometime.
Sombra opened his mouth, but thought better of it and closed it. “Those damn nicknames,” he sighed, “are going to drive me insane sooner than even her.”
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Yay! Update!
Now that you mention it, a pony with sideburns DOES seem really weird.
Pinkie is to Sombra is like Deadpool is to Sinister, as seen in this chapter
Give him hell, Pinkie!
I bet with proper grooming sideburns would look great on a pony, let alone a king. Probably hasn't had much of that recently though.
Wow. I was just thinking of this story... C'mon, Sombry, stop bein' such a sourpuss!
He's an evil overlord dictator, right? (Well, former, anyway.) So all evil overlord dictators have kitty cats! It's mandatory! They have to look cute or impartial while they lay on the evil overlord dictator's lap to be stroked slowly and menacingly.
Maybe he's missing his kitty cats!
SO!
That must mean that ol' Sombry is being such a Rudy McGrumpy Pants because he misses his kitties!
I'm so good at these psychological guessing game things!
This sentence feels wonky to me.
Sombra… you need to do something… USE A BLEEDING WEAPON! CHOKE HER IN HER SLEEP! SOMETHING!
I love this story! It's so funny. Heehee. "Says the guy with the sideburns." LOLZ
However, it doesn't seem Pinkie Pie is making any progress with Sombra.... :/
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Evil tyrants usually are. Hopefully a manecut can fix that. Everyone changes when they get a new look!
Why doesn't he just *yay* kill her already, nothing stopping him. Why not just punch her in the *yay* face or something, because she's so *yay* annoying that I want to *yay* kill her. Don't make the villain sympathetic and the hero unlikeable! We're supposed to want Pinkie to reform Sombra, but we can't do that if Pinkie is completely intolerable.
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I dunno. Maybe because he has no magic. Or they're out in public, where everyone can see. Or maybe it's that darn everyone rated tag on the story. Choose your pick.
Aww, that'd just be doing the overdone and usual thing. So boring.
But Sombra doesn't want to be reformed, so he's going to find her and anyone else who tries to reform him intolerable anyways.
You'd think Pinkie would be the last pony to have an issue with sideburns, all things considered,
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EDIT: WTF image link?!
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But she's intolerable to us! She's not acting like the Pinkie Pie in the show, she's acting like a flanderized ditz. It's like if in Keep Calm and Flutter On, Fluttershy was a crying little whimp and constantly hugging her animals and shrinking back whenever Discord looked at her, while speaking in her annoying whisper voice squeak. Either that or she kept floating around in an almost medicated state talking about bunnies and butterflies or something syrupy sweet like that.
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Alright...
So how would you have played this whole story?
~Skeeter The Lurker
Hah... Try as you might, you'll never get her to stop the nicknames.
~Skeeter The Lurker
Glad to see that this didn't take a permanent hiatus like I thought.
Also Pinkie, probably not a great idea taking him for a mane cut, that's probably going to peeve him off even more.
The day she stops using nicknames is the day hell freezes over.
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...I think that's the idea.
Pinkie's smarter than she acts. Maybe she's acting like a total loon to try and get Sombra to loosen up a little. Up to now, it was kinda like trying to knock down a tower using only your forehead, but it seems like she may be making a little progress.
EDIT: Also, speak for yourself. I personally love any style of shenanigans.
I think perhaps getting to the bottom of what exactly made Sombra the way he is would be my priority in this situation. But...doing the logical thing doesn't exactly work for Pinkie Pie and in general when you apply logic to a story the conclusion often is resolved too quickly, and not always in a creative fashion.
Meh...I'm tired 
but I can't sleep. 
Was just a new chapter of something I favorited to read.
I'm still a bit confused by the whole "Romance" Title up at top. Is that Bobby Boy just (messing) with us?
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KH!Xaldin weird or Avatar!Zhao weird?
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I either wouldn't have attempted to write this, or I would've had Pinkie's attempt to reform him fail HARD and end it with the Elements of Harmony either turning Sombra to stone or killing him off for real like Megan McCarthy intended.
3500377
Wow… that's really depressing. Glad I didn't go that route!
So...is "Sombry" gonna go Good or is Pinkie gonna go Evil?
Cause with Discord, he was just a guy lookin' for a lot of power but in all in the prospect of fun. Sombra just a full-on tyrant of a villain, no way can this all be as easy.
Hey! I am offended!
Sideburns are cool!
In real life, I have sideburns like Wolverine.
I'm thinking of shaving them though.
So it wouldn't make me look weird with the moustache.
3500377
That's terrible!
It's dark and cruel! Nothing like the show!
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Geez man. Such a downer....
So that fact that this is simply fan fiction and that this is totally possible has no bearing on how you would do it?
~Skeeter The Lurker
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Actually, I think Pinkie will go Pinkamena at one point, scare the shit out of Sombra, and then the story will continue.
3500383 Actually, I agree with him about Pinkie being annoying, here, I don't want Sombra to be reformed, I actually want him to gain his magic back and become an evil tyrant again. Except that this time he won't make his slave dig for Crystals, but make a lot of chocolate!
UPDATE!!!!!!!!!!YAY!!!!!!!!!!!I LOVE THIS STORY!!!!!!!
3500851 IF he's lucky
only if he's lucky
You better have a deep back story for Sombra planned. Though otherwise I will still love it. it feels very episode like
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You better believe it! And thanks! That's what I usually try to do for the story, since it is everyone rated.
Poor Sombra! He must have had absolutely appalling personal issues that his only route to happiness was to make everypony else's life a living hell!
"My... my mother never hugged me as a foal...! Never!" (( Breaks down into sobs ))
I think Sombra needs to be in a town wide song. I'm sure he would just love that.
Made my day to see this story got updated, Cant wait for me
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If the characters aren't kept in character, then it keeps you from getting into the story. The only way Sombra could be reformed if his origin were based on something like
"A tale of one shadow" by NastasiaSolitude. Then Pinkie might be able to slowly strip away the dark magic corrupting him and return him to the stallion he once was. However, in that case, Pinkie would be the worst pony for the job because she knows nothing about dark magic, tragedy, love, or any complex emotions due to her own primitive child-like mind and selfishness. Meaning that only a Crystal Pony he was once friends with could help him, leading to and ending not unlike "A Friend in Deed" in which Pinkie brings Sombra to an old friend from a thousand years ago who is able to free Sombra from his own darkness.
So unless the author does that, or has Pinkie attempts fail, this whole story will end up being contrived and shallow.
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What do you mean "Nothing like the show"? King Sombra is killed by the Crystal Heart in the show. Meghan McCarthy confirmed him dead! Check your facts before you jump to conclusions!
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I wrote an alternate to that up in the comments after this. I think its a little better.
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Well then, go ahead and write that into your own story then. Also, as for not doing what the writer of the episode intended by not having Sombra die permanently, isn't that what fan fiction is all about? Doing stuff beyond what the show tells us and exploring new aspects of the show?
Also, I can understand me not keeping Pinkie completely in character (it's tough sometimes, I admit
), but how am I not keeping Sombra is character? Does he even have a character? We've seen less than three lines from the actual show about him. All we know is that he's an evil tyrant. There's still a lot to go with.
Also, in regards to this.
Pinkie is not this. At least the Pinkie I write. She's a caring pony that's willing to help out whoever she can, because she's that's the type of pony who she is. Even if the pony's she's trying to help is a jerkwad like Sombra, she'll still keep on trying. Because she's awesome like that.
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Um, no.
Pinkie is clearly smarter than she looks, and goes out of her way to make everybody around her happy. How is that selfish?
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I know that Sombra is dead.
But from the way you're writing, you want Sombra to be dead.
That's just terrible and wrong! What kind of person does that?!
You can't just kill a character without feeling remorse about it! That's heartless! It shows that you don't appreciate the character made.
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Oh my gosh, you're right! I can't believe I didn't see it! How dare I be happy when Scar gets eaten after killing Simba's father and ruining the Pride Lands, or when Darth Vader throws Emepror Palpatine in the reactor after he tires to kill his son, or when Haman is hung after trying to exterminate the Israelites, or when Hitler killed himself after killing millions of Jews!
(Portal 2 Announcer: Sarcasm Sphere Self Test Complete)
Alright, you can reply to me again if you want, but if you do, please remember to THINK!
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Did you even watch "Luna Eclipsed"?
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Wanting someone dead, no matter how evil or dark or twisted he may be, is wrong in every aspect.
It doesn't matter if that person is sick or insane, you can't just take his life like that.
That's one of the usefulness of law. If that doesn't exist, we might as well walk around the cities and kill people because we hate them and there's nobody there to stop us.
It's not about logic. It's about what's right and what's wrong.
We have no right to take a person's life, no matter who it is.
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Did you know this story takes place directly after season 3 and she's grown up a bit? Also, throwing all those parties she throws for her friends sure is selfish. So is remembering everyone's name and birthday in town. Only someone who only cares about themselves would do that.
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Dude, do you not see the everyone rated category, along with the romance and comedy tags? No one is going to die in this story, okay.
Matthias, it's a fun story and he's doing a good job telling it, quit whining...
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What part of Everyone Rated Romantic Comedy is not understood here exactly? If'n you disagree, you can do one of two things: Either complain like you're doing now, or go write something yourself.
It's silly complaining about the route a writer is taking their story, it makes you look kinda funny.
Sides, the only thing people really know about him is that he's evil and has an obsession with crystals and stairs.
Now, go sit in the corner quietly, or go write your own sad, sick version. Quick mucking up this story though, please.
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I'm sorry, but the point I'm trying to make here is that King Sombra has no redeeming qualities here. He likes to enslave. He likes to kill. He hates all living things. The end. Discord was a fun loving buffoon that likes craziness and would never physically hurt anyone, and he'll only corrupt others if they try to turn him to stone. He saw that friendship could be nice, so the reformation works. Sombra is a smoke monster/Lord Sauron clone/The Smooze expy. There's nothing there to reform!
The author has to give Sombra some sort of backstory or reasons for the way he is before the story can get anywhere. When that happens, then I'll support this story.