Author: YourBronyGod
Prompt: Stallions
My parents always thought I would end up with some strong stallion. A stallion that could match my intellect and keep me steadily on the ground.
They thought I would find a stallion that would make me feel safe and secure. As though they were my own one pony army, solely and strongly loyal to my safety and happiness.
Some of my family even though that, with my connections to the princess, that stallion would be prince Blueblood. I was happy to tell them how horrid he acted. Their thoughts soon simply changed to other prodigious and wealthy stallions. Fancy Pants was the name thrown around the most. If only they had known at the time that the only romantic intentions I could ever approach him with would be for Fleur De Leis. Not that I hold feelings for her or anything. Not that she’s not a beautiful mare but… I’m getting off track.
My family thought I would find a stallion to make my husband. That I would bare his foal and the family would grow. Almost everything they hope actually came true. Except…she’s not a stallion. I can tell you that with utmost certainty.
She is the most amazing pony I have ever met. They always said I should find somepony wonderful. She is that and more.
She may not be as strong as Big McIntosh but her strength is in her ability to go on. To laugh when it seems impossible. To make ponies smile when they want nothing more than to make you hurt inside.
She may not have my knowledge of books, histories and spells but her knowledge when it comes to ponies is immeasurable, and worlds more applicable to life.
She keeps me on the ground, not through logic and reasoning but, by simply being there. She’s like a rock, ironically enough. She’s always there, almost always smiling. When she’s not, then it’s my turn. My turn to make my love shine through and make her smile.
She makes me feel as though I can do anything but she’s not my protector. No, she’s my partner. We’re in this together, equally.
She makes me happy by simply being. She could be miles away and just knowing that we will reunite makes me the happiest mare in the world. In my personal opinion of course, without correlating evidence and records…I did it again. Running off on tangents seems to be a habit of ours.
My family wanted me to find a stallion and have a family. A mare found me, I have love, I have friends and yes, I do have a family. Giving smile to ponies who need it is her thing after all, that’s why when we found those two little fillies at the orphanage the first thing she did was make them smile. By telling them, “How would you two like a loving home, two moms and some ice cream?” Their faces shone brighter than Celestia’s sun.
She may not be rich, she may not be a stallion but, she’s the pony I love. She is Pinkie Pie, my wife.
I see this as a letter to the princess.
This is very well written, I'd say. Perhaps not as a narrative, but for what it is it really gets across and understands the feelings homosexuals can have towards the opposite sex (mostly gay man, so I'd know ). I also like how it goes into why Twilight likes Pinkie so much, lays out what she finds so amazing and also admirable about the pink pony. Lastly, a sugary sweet ending that made me grin like a doofus; loved it.
This is a nice change of pace to the other entries, and I love Twilight's voice throughout. To be honest, I went into this entry expecting a stallion to show up and threaten Twilight and Pinkie's relationship, but I'm pleasantly surprised. (Though, I'm not a big fan of thinking Twilight's parents as antagonists, but you did well with the plot you chose.)
However, my criticism is how you started the majority of the paragraphs. I'm not sure if you did this on purpose or not, but once I noticed it, they seemed to pop out at me. Let me show you:
Try to be a little more conscious about using words too often, and if you find yourself getting caught up in it, find a way to mix things up. This was a wonderful insight into Twilight's POV, and I'm glad I read it. Thanks for writing!
I love this chapter so much. Well done, and I just love the part with the foal adoption. Absolutely adorable.