Vinyl is an alcoholic and needs help from her closest friend. When Octavia signs Vinyl up for an AA meeting she quickly finds out that they are stranger than she thought.
This is my first fic so it is probably terrible and should be avoided. However, if you are one of the brave ones then please leave me some much needed hate comments (criticism). Also thanks to Doc Crowl for the title.
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Well if your using the present tense, its not really telling a story. You should only use it to discribe a scene, not tell a whole story.
I'd sugggest editing it to be in the past tense.
2980108 not sure what you mean. Can you be more specific please.
2980715 He's saying it should be described like a story being retold years later. It makes the fic seem sloppy if everything is in present tense.
Also, you put "Vinyle" in the description.
2980715
Your telling the story as if you are watching it take place and announcing it. ie Octavia walks over to vinyl and says hi.
When telling a story it works better to use the past tense ie Octavia walked over to vinyl and said hi.
It flows better and is more common usage.
2980816 I see now thanks.
2980816 I changed it to past tense as much as I could. If you want maybe take another look and give me feed back. But i understand if you don't want to throw up any more today.
2980803 fixed that too you Nazi
2981143
Your to hard on yourself, lol. Good job fixing it from what I've seen.
2981219 thank you and I know I'm hard on my self, but that is the only way I feel like I get better. Constant demoralization is something I can climb over, no biggy.
Oh vinyl
DAMN Mr. Rogers isnt about friendly nieghborhood after all
2986619 glad you like my rendition of Mr. rogers.
2987113 Its as funny as your profile pic
2987122 I did it Mom! Some one thinks I'm funny.
thanks that means a lot.
2987123
your welcome
CONTINUE IT!!!!!
My gosh dude..... Hardcore!
= mr rogers and 
= Vinyl
Not bad for your first story I like drunk vinyl.
2987113 He is as funny as fuck and is awesome plus you make me look bad I don't drink.
3066858> I will write more stories if i have time but i am going into college so don't expect anything too soon.
That ending was beyond fucking brilliant.
I love this so much.
When Mr. Rodgers talks, you listen. Don't matter the universe.