If you like any of my stories feel free to take the idea and make it your own. All I ask is that you link me to your finished story. Cheers. XP
Four mares, one Xbox, this wont end well.
( Couldn't find owner of picture message me if its yours :P ) This is my first story on FIMFiction try not to judge too much.
EDIT: HUGE thanks to Benny Brohoof for going through and finding the grammatical mistakes I'd made. (There were a lot. )
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2872889 <<I agree with this guy.
A technical definition of what's wrong: It's all dialogue. And things just seem out of place and jarring.
2872923
Wow. Somepony disliked my comment.
UMACHAN!
TheaterCritic vs. Umachan!
2872932 I gave your comment a like to balance it out.
2872889 Well again as I said in the description it's my first story and there'll be more ( hopefully better
) to come thanks for the feedback 
2872932
No, it was me.
2872952
If I might make a suggestion for your next story. Perhaps add some description as well as find yourself an editor to take up your stories. This actually could have been a good one were it not for the fact that there was literally nothing but speaking.
2872941
Either it's UMACHAN! Or the author.
Thank Celestia he isn't a comment deleter.
2872961
Please don't be biased. Just because it was me who wrote the comment, doesn't mean you have to thumbs it down.
I don't write much but i just want to say this.in your next story you might want to describe stuff more. It was a good idea but the story is horrible written. I love your profile picture tho and i liked the story.sorry if i sound like a dick
2872988
Yes I do, because I don't like your face.
But seriously, you need to stop with this type of comment. If you don't want to give serious feedback to the author at least be funny about it.
2873006
Wut?
2872972 I'll definitely try. Thanks
2873017
Read the sentence again. I said that if you don't want to give the author serious feedback then you need be funny about it. Posting 'no' and an emoticon is neither helpful or funny
I don't understand why people are thumbing this down, I'd admit it does need a spit shine;But come on, We all started out abit rough.
2873040
So, I have to to a moviemaster review, or an actual Fiscus Cat review?
Video gamez and the background ponez?
Into the read later pile you go!
Edit: So much good that idea, just finished it. Was pretty good, but like some others said, suffered from a lack of destruction and glaring grammatical errors. I would've liked to see what was happening in-game alongside IRL. The negative was outshine by gloriously cheesy puns and a well written Vinyl, though.
2873047
A full review is not necessary, just pointing out some things he did wrong is fine. But if you do want to do a full review then yeah.
Or you could be like La Barata and just post a funny image.
2873069
Thank you, Lokiemen.
2873080
Your welcome. Is good to see that you're trying to improve. But you better take what I said to heart, because I will be watching.
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2873090
WEEGEE!