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So, Rainbow was tied up when AJ assaulted her with the drum stick and then suddenly she wasn't?
Also, you use the word 'plot hole' a lot. There are other words for that, you know :)
Despite my criticism, I still very much enjoyed this chapter
2995724 I know. I just like to use it because reasons. And I never said it was a strong knot.
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I'm sure you have your reasons but reading the same word over and over again can make your fic look bland. Wabbajack has a blog post where he compiled loads of synonims for naughty stuff. It could be useful if you want it.
And it being a loose knot is plausible but the audience doesn't know that. Adressing it in something like 'Dash's hooves wriggled free from the lasso' could help
2996983 Hm, fair enough, I suppose. I tend to gloss over quite a lot of small movements and stuff, though. Perhaps I should work that in a bit more. Also the usage of the term over and over might be due to the fact that I think I wrote the scene in multiple sittings.
You know, I didn't even notice it was that pronounced . Far fewer plot holes now.
Y'know... water is a really bad lubricant if you're not a tectonic plate... I think what you wrote here would actually have been super, super painful.
best chapter ever!!!
RariMac? Haven't heard of that one before.