A changeling nymph is accepted to go into deep cover in the town of Ponyville. However, what exactly are her motivations for requesting this assignment? Is it for the hive? Or is it for herself?
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Wow they seem frustrated about her memory loss :| honestly I would too.
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Lucky for you there's another chapter out huh?
Damn, I realized that anything with involving memories would mean I think of them as this:
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And I really liked the disintegrating world descriptions, very great
Still trying to figure out the memory issue, please Rhy, give me a clue of what it is! PM me, the suspense of it is killing me! You don't want a fellow fan die because of it, would you?
I would ask more questions myself tho but I guess that will come later?
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Yep.
Ha! I so called it! She got revealed before getting laid!
so, according to the journal at some point, chrysalis had something to do with the erasure. i sense a big plot twist coming on
If its magic, please be more in debth.
And that problem was solved surprisingly quickly.
note to self dont piss off Rhino because all hell is gonna break loose eh eh
3397358 Oh shit. I should reconsider jokingly pushing him into a ravine in my story.... well, all's well that ends well! Maybe....
~Justice
So, Gel was trying to get laid in her dreams? Hell yes.
I was honestly expecting a little bit more of a reaction out of Rhino. I mean, he didn't deviate from his character but I feel that he accepted it with only a few test questions a bit too quickly. I mean, can't the changeling (accused) assume the form and copy their memories? Or maybe that spell hasn't been made in your universe? I don't know... it seemed a bit short of a reveal for me though.
Other than that, we're starting to get to Gel's issue here. I had a suspicion a few chapters back when she was out and about and got memory wiped on the street. Very interested to see what comes of that.
And yes... I do realize I'm commenting on these after the story is complete and your already well into the sequel.
I loved so it all so much I'm so happy he expects her for who she truly is.That is 100% true love.And the pets to.it was so sweet and cute how they developed a physical link.It just keeps getting better and better.I can't wait to see what happens next between them and what happens to them next...I'm so happy.I just can't stop reading it
I am reading this just now (kind of late to the party here) but something in this chapter bother me.
What's the point of asking questions to check her identity when the mare being "impersonated" write everything in her notebook to begin with ?.
Moreover , her notebook always being with her means that when the swich occured the fake would have had ample opportunity to read it and prepare herself.
And with her condition he can't even ask about things not written in the journal because she would have logically forgotten them.
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Of course, there are things written in her journal that, in the beginning, would have revealed her as a changeling. So she could tell him to read the first few entries in her journal to prove who she is.
Ha! I was right. I didn't want to say anything in one of the past chapters cause I thought I could be wrong. But now I know this isn't just regular lose of memory.
5181131 that's true but a better way would have been the pets coming to her rescue.
Good that she managed to convince him before he hurt her.
Hmm, maybe she has an electromagnet stuck in her head?
Cya
Raziel-chan
I loved this chapter
Whoa whoa whoa! What about your Oath to never harm living thing! Doctor?
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And so our hero falls deep inside the changeling spy's grasp. Dooming him to forever protect her, til the pale pony comes for him.
I had hoped that the pacing would slow down after a while, but nope, you have maintained this breakneck pace. I feel this hurts your story since the characters are having no time to grow, and we the audience are not having enough time to connect to them. Remember the journey is more important than the destination.
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I'm aware of this, I believe my writing has improved since way back when this was done.
*hooves shoot up in the air*
GOOOOOOOOOL
...sorry that was an overreaction.
Hm, I figured there might be multiple reveals. I imagine the next reveal is in Chapter 43? Or 52, either one, but 52 is probably the big one.
Also, everyone seems to keep saying the fic goes at a breakneck pace, but honestly it's going at a pretty average pace? Normally by this point, an average pony story would have revealed the protagonist as a changeling to the entire town and the world would be ending.
I feel like he is way too accepting of her here. I would've expected at least a few chapters of him being upset. Immediately kissing her like nothing at all happened is just weird.
Oof... I have to say that the reveal was incredibly unsatisfying for me. We, as the audience, know that Angel was a changeling since day one, but for all Rhino knows, this unfamiliar creature could be lying out her ass. He accepted her way too quickly, especially since Angel keeps her journal with her at all times, and she’d previously told Rhino that she likes to be as detailed as possible, so if a changeling had kidnapped her, wouldn’t they know pretty much everything about her? A few test questions that could easily have been answered from simply reading her journal is a poor test.
Having Rhino realize all this, but still not being completely sure one way or the other, would’ve made it more believable, in my opinion. I think having their relationship be heavily strained for a little while while Gel figures out a way to convince him would’ve been interesting. As it is, there are pretty much no problems, tribulations, or conflict in this story for either of the protagonists, and when there is, they’re solved almost immediately, or they’re a non-issue to begin with.
Oh well, I realize I’m writing this comment about a story that’s been published for almost an entire decade now, but I felt like sharing my feelings anyway.