A changeling nymph is accepted to go into deep cover in the town of Ponyville. However, what exactly are her motivations for requesting this assignment? Is it for the hive? Or is it for herself?
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well written nice
Awesome chapter, you 're pretty good at writing, keep up the good work!
You get ready. I'll try my hoof at cooking...anything you'd like to request?
He looks at her with a smile as he rolls off the bed. A sexy changeling cook with a side of a kiss.
that was...
Kissing me? I've got no complaints."
corny
I just need to learn how to keep my head in it, so to speak
thats a pun. nice
Lust addict? What's the headcanon explanation behind that? Is lust like a drug?
Still can't believe that Rhino just accepts she's a changeling right off. It was kind of " BOOM changeling". But that's just me. Good job all the way. -Love
Okay, I am now one third into the story and here is a couple of thoughts so far.
The pets are super cute, gives me diabetes every time. Altough, Selena was a "Russian" blue cat, one small oversight with that statement. There is no Russia on Equis. Altough most authors skip around the subject by having "Stalliongrad"(word pun on Stalingrad) as a sort of Equestrian semi Russia. Just thought I'd point that out.
There is a slight bit of inconsistencies with the beginning of the story and it's current. An example from a very early chapter, (first day on the job) Gel thought something akin to "Their affection would be nice, if it wasn't tainted by lust." As of now she actually seems drawn towards lust. Although the thought could have been her simply trying to stay clean.
And last but not least; his acceptance of her being a changeling seems a tad bit to sudden. I think the poor guy at least deserves a day to his own thoughts before coming to the conclusion that nothing have really changed.
The story is great, and most certainly good enough to captivate the reader, but it feels as though with a little extra push it could reach new hights. I know a few better changeling redemption stories, but this certainly gives them a run for their money.
Have a good Morning/day/evening/night.
DarkPinkie
PS: This is not an actual review, even it kay sound as one.
PPS: now off to read chapter 25!
Seems kinda odd... Why a pony princess?
I loved it all so much it was a sweet and funny chapter and a close call for Gel I can't wait to see what happens next to them all.it just keeps getting better and better.
virginmobilefeed.com/wp-content/uploads/2012/10/Slow-Clap.gif Well done! Twas Brilliant!
I can just picture his brain fizzling out during the blow job.
Another nice chapter, I can see why she'd avoid lust. And an addiction lime that makes sense for a changeling.
Cya
Raziel-chan
You asked for it! Never trust a changeling spy!
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Oooohhhh~!
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Awwww...
Oh no, rookie mistake
Nooooooo, honey don't relapse you big dumb
Rawr~ <3
Maybe be less of a prude -.- .
Reminds me of Helluva Boss when Blitz and Stolas get seated at Ozzie's nightclub and the waitress walks up.
"Can I get you two off? I-I mean start you off with some drinks?"
The show takes places Hell which takes some inspiration from Divine Comedy. Ozzie's is in a section of Hell devoted to lust.