When a man named Jack ends up in Ponyville through a time travel mishap, he must get help from our favorite six ponies if he hopes to ever make it back home. And things get a bit interesting when the changelings try to thwart his plans.
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Mmm you missed a "T" in the word "but" I assume.
2809500 Shit >.> I can't believe I missed that XD aaaannnnd fixed :P
2809550 hahah no problem, it's a normal error, nothing special, btw good work
2809573 Thanks i'm glad you like it
The idea is good but it seems rushed. Were you in a hurry or something?
Also, how DID Jack get out of the cave? I was sure until the end of the chapter 3, that he was Chrysalis.
2826513 For the last chapter I kind of was rushing a bit >_> And with how Jack got out of the cave, Chrysalis shot the wall and it fell, and Jack ran towards it, and Chrysalis grabbed Jack and flew out with him. Oh and no I wasn't rushing the whole story, it was just a short story, anything else? It does help
2828565 It's just that troughout the story I was either getting the references, facepalming, laughing or being confused of the speed of events. It was happening so fast, I thought it was rushed. I think I'm just spoiled with very long stories.
2828707 The thing I find about long stories is they feel stretched out, and have lots of filler parts, I know my story seemed a bit short, but I tried to stretch it out a bit, I just didn't want to bore everybody to death with filler stuff, and this is one of my first stories, so I know it's not all that great >_>