AWKWARD: Being a normal guy and having Cadance switch bodies with you. BAD: Being sent to Equestria in her body. REALLY BAD: Shining thinks you're actually his wife. REALLY, REALLY BAD: He tells you he wants kids!
2795603 Doubt it. It appears to be that the story isn't going to be a short one. My intuition tells me that this author plans to make it just as fine as his other story as the moment. The potential drama and conflict here is somewhat large to say the least. Identity crisis, something which drives my curiosity to no end.
Is she still even her human self? Or has she truly adopted the fandom perceived "Cadence" as we have come to depict her? What of the internal trauma that is to be suffered when all is revealed? Not just on "Cadence", but for Shining Armor and everyone else.
Will Cadance actually get away with her crimes or do something worse and switch back with him just when he's finally got used to being her because she missed the princess life? I hope the final Choices chapter will clear all this up.
I look up to see Blueblood move back to where sitting where Shining was been sitting before.
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I lean against him and can feel how cold he his.
"is"
as long as he came with me and kept my company.
"me"
I have no man cards to speak of, I am a full blooded mare.
That is a bit of a sexual deviant and likes being the meat of a sandwich. She now needs to become more aggressive and be top. ... Wow, that pic made me feel bad for Cadance, it is such a degrading position.
I started... and then I... and I was feeling... then I voluntarily started to... and I was craving more... oh god.
At this moment, I would probably either run or kill myself. Or third possibility, go completely insane and do my best to visit horrors on others. There would be a lot of knife play that no one wanted or asked for.
I sigh, and scoot over a little bit. “Shining, you’re cold, come under the water.”
NO, let him freeze, let him suffer! Let your misery and confusion spread to others!
Cadance, the last couple of days reminded me why I love you!
He only loves her for the sex? That's kinda shallow. That is all that has really happened.
Wait, thinking back, was Cadance immortal like Luna and Celestia? Cause that could be an issue much later. Is Confused Cadance immortal or still have the same human life span, does Bitchy Cadance retain her immortality or did she lose it to become human?
"I’ve never had someone willingly smell my underwear before, I have no words. " god fucking danmit does this fic have a comedy tag on it?....WHAT THE FUCK IT DOESN'T? ARE YOU FUCKING MAD GOOD SIR?......
the final? just like that? that's reaaaaaaally disappointing , was hopping for at least 3 more next chapter length installments taking care of everything i've been talking about so far......
good to see you using that image though , that's the first thing that pooped into my head when i first saw mention of blueblood i think it was in a comment saying not to let him have sex with human no name cadence......
what's more , it's really great about this story's origin story , if this was just a plain shiningxcadencexblueblood clop fic like there already is on this site that uses this picture i probably wouldn't care about it so much , but that shift in perspective really changes everything.......
I understand this guy has female hormones and a f'd up situation... but still the guy was bi to begin with, no straight man would do this. Even a male Fluttershy would say no before things got out of hand or is it hoof? Can't wait to see his conversation with the evil bat-shit crazy bitch Cadence.
Nice scene between the two, and I can't wait to see how this ends. I can just picture Cadance the Human on Earth, homeless, jobless, thrown out by the hot girlfriend, begging to come back to Equestria... and Cadance formerly a human, says no.
“Nonsense, this will be great fun for you, there will be more cocks than you know what to do with.”
Lines like this is what make me really doubt Shining is a nice husband.
She didn’t have any magic, but damn, her pussy could sing.
Queef in #G.
“The appetizer is delicious, let me try the main course.”
I would be incredibly pissed about being treated as a piece of meat and a conquest. Shining and Blueblood would both drown in their own blood sleep outside in the cold.
I open my mouth and take him as he thrust forward slightly.
"thrusts"
Once he finishes I look up to see two sets of glistening hosecocks in front of me
What the fuck is a "hosecock"?
I look up to see Blueblood move back to where sitting where Shining was been sitting before.
Make up your damn mind! Looks like someone was experiencing some blood loss.
I sigh, and scoot over a little bit. “Shining, you’re cold, come under the water.”
I would watch him die from the cold; and enjoy it. ... Aaaaaand I commented on that sentence before as well...
Shining leans back and smiles “Did you want to do anything in particular today?”
Your blood on my hooves and your heart in my mouth.
You should make a sequel starting with this ending I want to see how this human is enjoying being the kind princess Cadence as well how he/she goes through her/his first pregnancy and birth and raising a foal
Shining starts to walk back to the room we came from, “Nonsense, this will be great fun for you, there will be more cocks than you know what to do with.” I slowly walk after him, shaking my head as I quietly mutter to myself, “Fuck me."
I open my mouth to say something, but instead of words, warm horse cum pours out of my mouth and pools on the ground around my muzzle.
This is so degrading and disgusting, how can you write this TS? It is just, ARGH! I am so... soooo... ENVIOUS! Damn this story and the weird thoughts it brings!
Okay, that's it! This chapter ruined everything for me. I liked this story so far but this chapter, three ways! Ugh! I wanted to finish this story but after this chapter I'll stop reading. Please don't think I'm insulting or offending you. It's just, before this chapter the story seemed to have a point or a moral or some romance but this chapter just ruined everything. You had a very good story at first and I put it in my favorites but with this chapter it turned to pointless clop and sorry, but I'll remove it from my favorites. I hope you consider this as constructive criticism.
Shining trots over and looks at me, “Are you okay Cadance? You look a little pink.”
Cadence, I see you've met one of Shining Armor's alter egos, Captain Obvious of the Royal Guard.
At least I’m pretty that’s what you said Cadance.
GrammarError: missing word "sure"
I slowly walk after him, shaking my head as I quietly mutter to myself, “Fuck me.”
Shining’s ears perk up as he catches my whisper, ”That’s the spirit of things honey!”
I love that joke. It's one of the things I always look forward to when reading a story involving genderswapping.
As Shining starts to fuck me in earnest I look up to see Blueblood move back to where Shining was been sitting before.
GrammarError: invalid verb. Which is it? Was or has been? I don't like three-ways, or any sex involving *shivers* Blueblood* because the guy's an ass, but if I ever let that stop me from liking this story, well, something must be wrong with me. 6102559 having already read the finale a couple of times (at the very least once shortly before this readthrough, and once at the end of my first readthrough) and the epilogue at least once, I have to say, you really don't know what you're missing. I didn't like the three-way much either, but after that ending, I'll be damned if I didn't at least try to convince you to give it a chance. If you really don't want to, I could just give you a summary in private? But I really think you should give it a chance. *Rarity said it best. The only thing royal about him is that he is a royal pain
“Don’t mind if I do.” Blueblood exclaims as his horn lights up and my panties float over to him. They land on his muzzle and he inhales the smell. Shining laughs but I just stare at him, I’ve never had someone willingly smell my underwear before, I have no words.
Okay, okay, this is really hot. And you softened Blueblood up previously so I was more receptive to him here. This is definitely an Alternate Universe where Cadance is a bitch, Blueblood is charming, Celestia is a terrifying dictator and somehow Shining is still a sweet, adorable horseband. That sex scene was fantastic. The passion felt feverish.
My stomach starts to dry heave so I get up and run to the bathroom, but when I get to the sink all I can do is lean against it and cry.
This really hit me. Damn. That next day regret. Just... damn. Poor 'Cadance'.
And then Shining starts being so adorable! Gawd. He's such a lovable dork. This chapter made the fic for me. What you're doing to Shining Armor here is what you did with Big Mac in Five Score, you know that? You're making me like them.
I know this is an old story, but you should know I probably reread this chapter at least once a week. This fic isn’t written fantastically- especially not compared to the back half of Five Score- but wow is it still hot.
I used to talk like this with my guy friends back on Earth all the time,(—— but it seems profoundly strange to hear about it now.
How long is this orgy going to last? In any case, I soon feel Blueblood give my cunt a few more licks and then he rears up on his hind legs. “So, Shining, mind if I fuck your wife?”
Sure everybody else has!
After a few pulses I fall behind in my swallowing and I had to pull back to let him finish on my face.
I’m supposed to be a human male, and I’m supposed to just be trying to get back home.
Should be: giving me pleasure.
And now, onto the finale.
"See the link" well, what is the worse that could happend "see the pic"
Hmmm... this chapter was a little too much. Hopefully the finale will be more tame.
*cough* didn't see that
cumingi mean coming2795603 Doubt it. It appears to be that the story isn't going to be a short one.
My intuition tells me that this author plans to make it just as fine as his other story as the moment.
The potential drama and conflict here is somewhat large to say the least.
Identity crisis, something which drives my curiosity to no end.
Is she still even her human self?
Or has she truly adopted the fandom perceived "Cadence" as we have come to depict her?
What of the internal trauma that is to be suffered when all is revealed? Not just on "Cadence", but for Shining Armor and everyone else.
Will Cadance actually get away with her crimes or do something worse and switch back with him just when he's finally got used to being her because she missed the princess life? I hope the final Choices chapter will clear all this up.
I read the first part and burst out laughing now I can't continue
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Or did you mean "comfortable"?
Underlined words should be removed.
"is"
"me"
That is a bit of a sexual deviant and likes being the meat of a sandwich. She now needs to become more aggressive and be top.
... Wow, that pic made me feel bad for Cadance, it is such a degrading position.
At this moment, I would probably either run or kill myself. Or third possibility, go completely insane and do my best to visit horrors on others. There would be a lot of knife play that no one wanted or asked for.
NO, let him freeze, let him suffer! Let your misery and confusion spread to others!
He only loves her for the sex? That's kinda shallow. That is all that has really happened.
Wait, thinking back, was Cadance immortal like Luna and Celestia? Cause that could be an issue much later. Is Confused Cadance immortal or still have the same human life span, does Bitchy Cadance retain her immortality or did she lose it to become human?
Insert coin to continue?
Fuck. Here I am in the house of God reading fucking CLOP.
I'm going to hell.
But, again, love your writing.
Blueblood pauses his thrusts again, “Wow, nice. Keep your mouth dear Cadance, let us all hear your sounds of lust.”
Yes Keep your mouth Cadance. It'd be a shame if you lost it. XD
Misplaced period after the word “time”
Used the word “of” instead of “off”
"back to where sitting where"
He his?
This chapter was hot, hot, hot!! I would just love to be princess Cadence...in this part of the story. Two colts are waaay better than one Awesome job
2796175 The old Cadence is outta luck. No pony magic in our world
"I’ve never had someone willingly smell my underwear before, I have no words. "
god fucking danmit does this fic have a comedy tag on it?....WHAT THE FUCK IT DOESN'T? ARE YOU FUCKING MAD GOOD SIR?......
the final? just like that? that's reaaaaaaally disappointing , was hopping for at least 3 more next chapter length installments taking care of everything i've been talking about so far......
good to see you using that image though , that's the first thing that pooped into my head when i first saw mention of blueblood i think it was in a comment saying not to let him have sex with human no name cadence......
what's more , it's really great about this story's origin story , if this was just a plain shiningxcadencexblueblood clop fic like there already is on this site that uses this picture i probably wouldn't care about it so much , but that shift in perspective really changes everything.......
I understand this guy has female hormones and a f'd up situation... but still the guy was bi to begin with, no straight man would do this. Even a male Fluttershy would say no before things got out of hand or is it hoof?
Can't wait to see his conversation with the evil bat-shit crazy bitch Cadence.
Nice scene between the two, and I can't wait to see how this ends. I can just picture Cadance the Human on Earth, homeless, jobless, thrown out by the hot girlfriend, begging to come back to Equestria... and Cadance formerly a human, says no.
That was awesome I loved all of it so much I can't wait to see what happensa. and Shinning is so sweet
Dave: "Wait, wait, oh god, poor choice of words!"
Lines like this is what make me really doubt Shining is a nice husband.
Queef in #G.
I would be incredibly pissed about being treated as a piece of meat and a conquest. Shining and Blueblood would both
drown in their own bloodsleep outside in the cold."thrusts"
What the fuck is a "hosecock"?
Make up your damn mind! Looks like someone was experiencing some blood loss.
I would watch him die from the cold; and enjoy it.
...
Aaaaaand I commented on that sentence before as well...
Your blood on my hooves and your heart in my mouth.
I would murder them both.
princess curious
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Getting advise from Blueblood?! You poor bastard!
I reach back and pull of the last article of clothing, my panties
Should be off
You should make a sequel starting with this ending I want to see how this human is enjoying being the kind princess Cadence as well how he/she goes through her/his first pregnancy and birth and raising a foal
Shining starts to walk back to the room we came from, “Nonsense, this will be great fun for you, there will be more cocks than you know what to do with.”
I slowly walk after him, shaking my head as I quietly mutter to myself, “Fuck me."
U did not just say dat
This is so degrading and disgusting, how can you write this TS? It is just, ARGH! I am so... soooo... ENVIOUS! Damn this story and the weird thoughts it brings!
“Are you okay Cadance? You look a little pink.”
A little pink? My fur is fucking pink!
Fucking lost it here.
i would LOVE to be in candace body right now!
Okay, that's it! This chapter ruined everything for me. I liked this story so far but this chapter, three ways! Ugh! I wanted to finish this story but after this chapter I'll stop reading. Please don't think I'm insulting or offending you. It's just, before this chapter the story seemed to have a point or a moral or some romance but this chapter just ruined everything. You had a very good story at first and I put it in my favorites but with this chapter it turned to pointless clop and sorry, but I'll remove it from my favorites. I hope you consider this as constructive criticism.
Cadence, I see you've met one of Shining Armor's alter egos, Captain Obvious of the Royal Guard.
GrammarError: missing word "sure"
I love that joke. It's one of the things I always look forward to when reading a story involving genderswapping.
GrammarError: invalid verb.
Which is it? Was or has been?
I don't like three-ways, or any sex involving *shivers* Blueblood* because the guy's an ass, but if I ever let that stop me from liking this story, well, something must be wrong with me.
6102559 having already read the finale a couple of times (at the very least once shortly before this readthrough, and once at the end of my first readthrough) and the epilogue at least once, I have to say, you really don't know what you're missing. I didn't like the three-way much either, but after that ending, I'll be damned if I didn't at least try to convince you to give it a chance. If you really don't want to, I could just give you a summary in private? But I really think you should give it a chance.
*Rarity said it best. The only thing royal about him is that he is a royal pain
“Don’t mind if I do.” Blueblood exclaims as his horn lights up and my panties float over to him. They land on his muzzle and he inhales the smell. Shining laughs but I just stare at him, I’ve never had someone willingly smell my underwear before, I have no words.
OMG LOL
Back home in a few months? HA! You just dry heaved, so you know what that means!
Dayum this was hot as hell espicially cuz Blueblood is her cuz, cuz.
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well neitehr is actually related to each other.
Okay, okay, this is really hot. And you softened Blueblood up previously so I was more receptive to him here. This is definitely an Alternate Universe where Cadance is a bitch, Blueblood is charming, Celestia is a terrifying dictator and somehow Shining is still a sweet, adorable horseband. That sex scene was fantastic. The passion felt feverish.
This really hit me. Damn. That next day regret. Just... damn. Poor 'Cadance'.
And then Shining starts being so adorable! Gawd. He's such a lovable dork. This chapter made the fic for me. What you're doing to Shining Armor here is what you did with Big Mac in Five Score, you know that? You're making me like them.
I know this is an old story, but you should know I probably reread this chapter at least once a week. This fic isn’t written fantastically- especially not compared to the back half of Five Score- but wow is it still hot.
Sure everybody else has!