That wasn't to bad. I actually found this story very interesting

2631167 Thanks I was actually expecting people to hate this and tear it to shreds..

It's a nice story, but the vampony is necriphiliac?

2632191 No vampires in this, just primal lust for somepony that happens to be dead. Love can take many forms

This really reminded me of the poem "the river god" woah , great story! Xxx

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We-yeah, but this is... this is...

2633310 Unpleasant? Creepy, disgusting and immoral? Sure it is, but I wanted to write something bizzare and macabre.

But I don't support the contents of this at all. Frankly, I find necrophilia to be one of the greatest sins someone can commit.

Sorry if it made you feel uneasy, but I guess that's kind of the point of it..

2636024 When I wrote it, I didn't mean litteral fangs. Again, it was to emphasise the lust, in which biting someone and in that way "become one" with said person on a very basic, primal level.

Well, that sounds like a fun ride!

This story is twisted and the protagonist insane...Brilliant work.

2637966 Well, love has a way of twisting us beyond sanity

2639439 evidently!

Wow. Never read anything like this before. Very heart-wrenching. Insane, but beautiful.

Found one mistake:

With my main I would spin a net of worlds for you to explore together with me

*Mane

Other than that, beautiful, nice job.

2647791 Thanks! I don't think anyone has called anything I've written beautiful before

and here is my comment... guess what I am dating a Hungarian girl ^^, that is nice and all I wander if I could ever find such an intense feeling like the one described in this piece... don't know if to hope for it or dread it... love, lust and dead things, would be cool to feel (too much of a cynic to actually care) not that I can't feel anything but I haven't feel anything so strong ever in my life, being that the case I can say that I like the story because is it so bizarre... but I like more the mysterious horrible things that am used to read from you... having said that I loved "The Edge" perhaps the whole thing would have had a stronger reaction if it wasn't that I live in a place were dead bodies are kind of common... and they aren't pretty... well all in all I like it... I am finally feeling something for some one here... and this kind of reminded me of here when I was reading knowing that she will be gone back to Hungary next month I am ready to say that I shan't allow my self to fall in love... thanks again for your stories dude

Amazing story and the interpretation of love was flawless. Plus the images you had set is still coursing through my head, It's kinda chilling actually, lol

This story was definitely written amazing. The mare loving a dead stallion is weird. I see in the comments where you say you don't support that, and that's cool you don't have to support what you write after all. The message in the story is what you really wrote the story for, and that counts the most no matter what form it takes.

However, love was described beautifully throughout this piece. If I ever were to have a woman special in my life, I would like her to carry this much love for me. Don't mind that little babble I brought up there though.

What I really want to know is did she actually fall in love with this stallion? Cuz I read it over again, and now I feel as though the stallion she loved was never alive to begin with. And well the ending reading through the story twice still had me feeling really sorry for her. I mean, it's really messed up what love can do to people sometimes.

I also noticed that for the time that this mare was with this stallion was for quite a long time seeing that the flowers and vines were growing on and around his body.

The story in general had me at the start expecting genuine love only to end feeling a little more confused than ever, until I read it the second time. I like how this story twisted my mind there a little.

And in fact, this would be the first story I had do that to me. Again, really love how this was written. An average reader like me would have to reread this story to get everything it is saying. And what the crazy part about this story is that neither the mare or the stallions name was ever mentioned, and you never really fully describe what both characters look like, you describe indirectly which I find really amazing.

Am I really gonna say it again? I thinking I am. Greatly written story, greatly written.

4324951 I knew you'd like it

I left out everything like names, appearance and genders on purpose, so that anyone who reads it can still relate the same way by painting their own image of the couple. Could be a stallion and a mare, in any aspect, or it could be two mares or two stallions. It all depends on what way the readers sees them

4326775 Really love how you did and the purpose is really great. You setup the story really well. :)

This is quite possibly the most fucked up but yet most beautiful story I have ever read. Thank you for writing this.

5597743 I'm glad you enjoyed it

M8.... this was fucken' genius. I recommend reading this while stoned....

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Well this was an... interesting read to say the least... You asked for a review and I did my best

EDIT: This story may have pushed the boundaries of our submission rules.

Important: Stories with the sole purpose of gore and other morally questionable content such as acts against consent and vore are barred from entry.

Just a heads up

8076752 Huh, I must've missed that rule Anyway, let me explain a little here; first off necrophilia as not a fetish of mine. I find it completely revolting and probably the biggest sin a person can commit. But I'm a writer of horror and macabre stories, that's why I did this. I wanted to write a sort of disturbing love story, to see if I could pull it off.

But still, thank you for the review and taking the time to read this, I'm always happy to hear people's opinions about my work. And don't worry, I wont' write something like this again

8076611 Good question

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Not even you know, nu da?

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first off necrophilia as not a fetish of mine. I find it completely revolting and probably the biggest sin a person can commit.

You and I both, if I wasn't clear enough in the review, heh And I understand wanting to experiment with your stories. About a week ago, I was asked by request to write an incest clop between Rarity, Sweetie, and their Father. I don't fuck incest at all, but I thought "Why the hell not?" so I gave it a shot. It was just shy of a feature for three days in a row...

My point is, I understand that you want to try different things, and quite honestly, I respect you for that. I even added your story to one of my libraries once I finished reading it.

Keep it up man

8077883 Well, I'm glad that you enjoyed it, even if it made you nauseous And I do hope you'll enjoy the rest of my stories, should you ever decide to check them out

While I generally don't know what makes people even consider necrophilia, but you did an excellent job at portraying love in its twisted way. This was beautifully written, and an interesting read. Have a like!

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Thank you so much, I'm glad you enjoyed it