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This chapter is definitely deep.
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Puns aside, well written.
2082041 It's not that deep, is it?
Just trying to establish what's so special about the Stalkers 
2368735 So don't read it. This might not be in the spirit of the show, but it shows the spirit of humanity. Pointless destruction brought about by simplest of human emotions. It shows an alternate path, rather than the HiE fics with the happy ending. This story is just what happens afterwards.
2368934 Couldn't have said it better myself. I was going to answer to this, but decided not to; I'm not going to try and defend my work simply because it's the kind of style I work with and someone doesn't like it, and perhaps start an argument in the process. Everyone is entitled to their opinion, no matter what it is.
2368735 If you don't like a dark story, Then don't read it
Do you even read the tags? It says dark at the top. This is someone putting out their deepest emotions. It takes a lot to do that. This is fanfiction, Not the show.
2368934 Exactly
2369748 If I may just jump in here real quick.. The reason I haven't gotten to any flashbacks or similar stuff yet is because this story will be long. The longest I've ever written, divided into two seperate stories. And of course, the things you bring up, such as the war, the sister's deaths etc will all be explained to the readers once the real main character comes into play. Some characters from previous situations may return, as well as others from the show I never had in Dust to dust.
Again, I am not looking for an argument here, you bring up som valid points and I do understand what you mean. Just stick around for the coming chapters and hopefully you'll be satisfied. Or you could just hate them, lol. Either way, I won't hold your opinion against you.
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Alright, I'll give you the benefit of the doubt. After all, I'm not opposed to the "Lot" or "Don Bluth" school of writing, also known as the "I will put my characters through hell so they really do appreciate what lies at the end of their journey" style.
I am back... cool chap by the way
can't wait to read more
2755889 Glad you liked it
and here I am after a hard day of work... interesting chap... I was thinking that I was leading somewhere but I am still hanging, like the style of writing and all but this chap is a little too inconclusive in comparison with most other that I have reed from you so I am moving on to next chap... see where this leads to ^^
Can't help but feel sorry for Lilly, nothing more annoying and disturbing than "noisy" neighbors.
Short... but wow... I wander how good it would be to describe an ongoing battle... made my day 20% nice at least
On the subject of her neighbors...
hehehee
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How remarkably dishonest you are. I've gotten negative feedback on my stories. But I never DELETED them unless they were full of swears, were just spam like "Make 500 an hour doing this" or personal attacks calling me a f-ggot or something. Congrats...you went the CHATVOYANCE route.
This shows intellectual dishonesty that you can't handle legitimate criticism of your work.
4108898 Have you already forgotten everything I told you in those messages we sent back and forth? Yes, I don't take criticism well, I told you that, and apologized several times over for deleting what you said. I honestly wish I'd left the comments, but I was a fucking idiot, I admit that.
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Don't you have an option to undelete them? I've seen other authors-never mind.
4108976 As far as I know, there's no option like that, no. But believe me, if there was a way to get them back, I'd do it. It was a dick move from my part, and again, I'm sorry.
4108976 No. Comments, once deleted, cannot be restored.
How about we all agree to just move on and forget about all this?
4115509 I just want to be able to write my story in peace without his condescending and insulting comments. Just because he doesn't like some of the things that happens in here it doesn't give him the right to attack me. I kept my mouth shut because I didn't want to cause any more arguments, but I guess I only made things worse.
You hear that, ngrey? You may dislike the fact that the story isn't like the show, or the violence, or the fact that ponies eat meat in a world where fruit no longer grows or whatever; it does not justify hurtful behavior.
Do you think it's fun for me as a writer, to break my back in writing this, only to have you instantly bash on every new chapter I put up? It's hurtful and really takes away the fun in writing.
So please; either be more civil with your comments and actually think about what you're saying before posting, or I will delete them. Simple as that. There's a big difference between constructive criticism and just being a dick.
Right, I've spoken my mind, I am done. My last word, I will have no more part in this.
This chapter was more than cool, it was bleeding awesome!


Yes, another greatly written chapter! Anton reaction to coming into another world was perfect. :) It's cool that he doesn't speak a lot of English, very new and quite unique from what I have read. I can't wait to see the next chapter! :D
4506746 In most HiE stories, the character is either American or British, sometimes Russian or European, but those are more rare than the prior. So instead of just writing another American, I made the brothers Swedish, just like myself, in order to not only make them more original, but also easier for me to work with. After all, I don't know much about other countries cultures and ways, but I do know my own. That way I understand my own characters better, and it gives me a better foundation to build them on.
His brother rarely spoke anything else than English(Except in Moonshimmer Island), so I'm trying to make Anton a lot more different from him.
4507386 Awesome, keeping to what you are more familiar with :D I seriously got to get to reading those other stories some time, but I like where it's going with Anton hence the reason for me anxiously waiting for the next chapter.
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Now, we wait.
...
Any minute now... lol
4507425 When there's a new chapter, you'll be the first to know
... It's staring into my soul. And beyond.
Huh, never saw a Swedish people in equistria.
Now that I think of it....
...What are you doing?
Searching for fics that have swedish people in it.
On a porn site?
...shut up
holy shit....okay, red, rainbow mane, the fact that he answered "yup"....this guy the child of RD and BigMac? Also I find his color scheme sorta....sorta clashed. Kinda don't go well together, but I feel like that fits the character, as if he doesn't belong. I like that honestly.
And nice choice of music. Personally my favorite songs from metro is the opening theme
ending theme (good ending)
and the market/ranger theme
4630057 And you're the first person to say it
But yeah, everything about him is off and odd on purpose, even his cutie mark and the fact that he can play a fucking guitar. With hooves 
And you're the first person to say anything about the music
I think my favourite is this;
It may be from Last Light, but still
4630442 I like the ambiance from the wind and background
< that was the closest emote that looked like a face making an "ooooooh" noise
4660319 And now I have the image of Derpy hanging on to Artiom's back in my head, blowing wind into his ear to create creepy ambiance
Wow, I have quite the bit of chapters to read. It was really nice knowing a bit more about Anton in this chapter, but I really thought he was going to lose his life when Crescent saw him. All I thought at that point was, "Well Anton, it was really nice knowing ya. To bad the author couldn't save you beyond this chapter, lol."
But it was again a greatly written chapter, five more chapters to go.
5060857 I wouldn't kill off one of the main characters after just a couple of chapters
Misanthropic much?!
5213417 Misanthropy? Why?
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"We're all devils inside"? Really? REALLY. Is there anything MLP here at all? The characters from the show are gone, the powers within the show are somehow gone, the core tenets and ideals of the show now gone. This is an MLP in name only tale. Nothing about this setup fits the universe.
Crescent shoulda really checked if he was awake before he spoke. Kiddin', I guess I'll just have to read on ahead. Glad that Sawblade is back though. Great chapter, I love it. :)
I really like how you wrote this chapter. In fact, I love it. I hurts that I can't say why to spoil for future readers. *sniff*
5213810 Dude, the least you could have done was read through the story. There's no Misanthropy. Really, not cool. If you take time to read it, you would find how much of an awesome story this is.
5213458 This chapter was greatly written. One question I would like to ask is that is this all happening in her mind? I ask because in the chapter I last read about her, she was with Anton in the forest, no? O.o