The fair denizens of Ponyville go about their daily lives, oblivious to the fact that an undead creature has been animated and is headed toward town. Various ponies receive face time with this mindless beast, but with most being unaware of what evil lurks inside of it, they all have some very different reactions! At the same time, a mass of clouds originating from the Everfree Forest threatens to swallow the land in darkness.
This story takes place between Keep Calm and Flutter On and Magical Mystery Cure.
Mediocre artwork courtesy of me!
Chapters (3)
Interesting
Well, this looks promising. And you manage the characters well. I particularly like your Discord, you manage to show that he is still somewhat callous even after reforming. Good job.
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Thank you very much! That means a lot to me.
Yeah, I see Discord as playfully devious at the core of his personality, but never truly evil, and unable to be reformed to the point where he can entirely let go of his roots.
That was hilarious. It's brilliant that the Cutie Mark Crusaders manage to unwittingly scare of the zombie with their antics, that's just like them. And Discord continues being laughingly random. Well done.
He, this was fun, though your ending could use some more of an "ending feel". Not that it shouldn't be open, but I only realized it was an ending when you said so in the authors notes and that shouldn't be necessary. So something to make it clearer that the story is over would be good, though I don't have any suggestion on how to do that.
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Thanks. I know exactly what you mean by that, I was juggling thoughts on how to end it myself. I ended up deciding to make it fairly abrupt like that because throughout the writing I felt I was giving the story a slightly unconventional feel and wanted to try out an ending that fit along those lines.
I know I could have done better even with that line of thought specifically, but I couldn't quite think up the right way to go about things.
Thanks for reading! Glad it could entertain
Zecora’s responsible … but isn’t a practitioner of Voodoo? Colour me surprised; it just seems like the sort of campy thing to end a farce starring a zombie.
Not bad. Technically proficient and amusing, though the ending falls flat because of the whole “meant to convey two meanings” schtick; this story really would have worked better without it or, failing that, if the monotony of Applejack’s life had been more blatant.