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PunIntended Consequences


Where there is perfection, there is nowhere to go but down. So aim not for the mountain's pinnacle, but simply for its next handhold.

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Ever since she received her cutie mark, Sand Scout has only wanted to be recognized as the competent treasure hunter she is. There's only one problem: she hasn't actually done any real treasure-hunting. But she knows she would be brilliant if somepony would just give her a chance, and she's getting fed up with ponies laughing her out of their offices.

Broke, homeless, and too inexperienced to land a job, Sand Scout decides that the only way forward is the "road less traveled". Her friends and fellow team members, Kiwi, Nifty, and Jinx, aren't so convinced, but without anything to their names and no better suggestions, they don't have much of a choice in the matter.

The best they can do now is try to ignore the voices screaming at them to turn back, that what they're doing is illegal, and that if they just try harder they can find a good job...

Perhaps they should have listened.

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Story idea(s) conceived before Equestria Girls and season 4, so any incongruities you find are to be ignored. Please and thank you.

Removed 'sad' tag and replaced with new-and-improved 'adventure' model! Also, completely rewrote the description to be less... well, s(buy some apples)t.

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 14 )

Interesting thus far.

Personally, i think you drages this out way more then necessery. Nothing of fram intrest has happened and my interest and curiosity has not been stirred by any omnius event, spooky legend or even something that goes bump in the dark. I see promises of a good story so I will fave this.

I am telling you this, not to be mean but to help you. If you want it that is. You can just say fuck off if you want to.

2499408

Thanks! I wouldn't consider this the 'interesting' bit though, so I guess it can only get better from here!

2499972

Nothing too exciting has happened yet because that chapter is only the prologue. I'm mainly establishing my characters and the initiating factors right now. In order for this story to work, the characters have to be united in a certain spot under a common goal, and while I could simply say 'stuff happened and now shit's getting serious', that's not what this story is about.

Also, this isn't an adventure story, so if you're waiting for action or fighting, there won't be any for a while. (Edit: Actually, I finally decided in a direction for this story and it really is an Adventure... oops, silly past me!)

Thank you for the feedback, though!

2502393 i know and i am a patient man so i shall wait. a general tip though, this isn't really fit to be a prologue. the prologue is to give the readers a sneak peak on what might be coming while the next 3-4 chapters are filled with character introductions, character development and early plot points

Glad to see this updated.

2575368

I may be slower than a snail, but at least I'm moving! :derpytongue2:

2575377 I'm not very fast in my updates either, so I can sympathize.

Just discovered this, and am already betting Kiwi is a flightless Pegasus.

2575513

What makes you say that? I never even said he was a pegasus. What if he's a unicorn? I'm not saying he is, but I'm very curious about the reasoning behind your prediction. :pinkiehappy:

2576634 Kiwi's are a flightless bird, only seems comical to make a pony named Kiwi a flightless pegasus.

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