Hi, name's SabreXio. If you read any of my stories, I would really appreciate a rating and/or comment as they really give me purpose to write. Thanks
I'm Captain Clayton Cormorant of the Starship Requiem. Follow me and my best friend Twilight "Sparks" Sparkle as we explore the galaxy, make friends and enemies and generally get into trouble.
MLP/FTL Crossover with references to other stuff
First crossover ever. positive comments and suggestions welcomed.
I'll add character tags as they are added in the story.
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Really, not much to say about this fic. I have to say I'm genuinely curious about the further course of it, even if it's just because there's not much going on yet. I just have the following points:
1. Commas if you're going into a "- said" tag or something like it after dialogue, periods if else.
2. Group everything together as tightly as possible, so long as the paragraphs don't get too long. (That long one at the start is a good example for too long.) Only separate when needed or when changing the speaking character, and double space at all times.
3. Commata. Seriously. Many sentences would benefit from them
That is all. Overall, it shows that you're new, which means that a lot of things will come out with practice.
How did you get a copy of my FTL rules?
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I guess great minds think alike.
Found story. Like story, Please write more story!
Good chapter! Looking forward to more!
Good chapter! I am really starting to enjoy this story and look forward to more adventures in your MLPFTL universe!
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I'm glad you're enjoying the story as much as I enjoy writing it.
Do you have any suggestion who I should add next? I'm at a loss and can't decide.
3841218 Well, I don't know about any plans you may have, but seeing some Rebels would be cool!
My only other thought at the moment is to sometime in the future meet Rarity the Crystal, just because you seem to be on a trend of creating all of the characters based on their alien counterparts. Just a thought!
Well done! Twi's "magic" cracks me up.
Keyboard cat. Snicker*
seems interesting
Pinkie's here too, HA! Also, dose abilities man.
THIS IS GREAT! Epicness!