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Luna's Mistake

Young princesses have to make mistakes to learn from them, this is exactly what Luna did before the sisters took the throne of Equestria and harnessed the Elements of Harmony. But was this mistake a glimpse of the future for Luna?

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ShagDragon

ShagDragon #1 · Apr 15th, 2013 · · · The Meeting ·

Saw title and hoped for pregnancy. I was disappointed.

ShagDragon

ShagDragon #2 · Apr 15th, 2013 · 1 · · Prologue ·

Author's Note:
This is my first My Little Pony story so please be kind to me .

Never do this. If anything, you want people to be tougher on you, so you can get better.

Kage no Brony

Kage no Brony #3 · Apr 16th, 2013 · · · The Meeting ·

2432115

honestly, I have no problem with that. After all, you can be tough AND kind. Point out mistakes, but do it gently, without calling him/her an idiot or something like that. That way he/she learns without being demoralized and losing the desire to write. Kindness, after all, is one of the cornerstones of our community.

I'm actually adding this to my "read later" list, because I'm not exactly in the mood for a sad/dark fic right now, but I'll edit this later with my thoughts on the premise and inform you if I notice any grammatical/spelling errors.

mlp_ThunderC

mlp_ThunderC #4 · May 9th, 2013 · · · The Meeting ·

2434271 thanks very much :) I have written fabric before but its Sherlock stuff so My Little Pony writing is very new to me. I welcome constructive criticism as you're right, it helps me get better at writing :) thanks again and i hope to update this as soon as my Uni work has finished for the year

GameBrony3844

GameBrony3844 #5 · May 10th, 2013 · · · Prologue ·

I love how the story is starting out. :)

GameBrony3844

GameBrony3844 #6 · May 10th, 2013 · · · The Meeting ·

The fact that my OC, Silver Bullet is in this as a child makes me think; There has been more generations of Silver Bullet throughout history. Much like Link and Solid Snake. :D