Red awoke in the bed, and stood up. Checking the stats of his Pokémon, he was satisfied to see they were fully healed. Walking down the steps, he left his simply furnished room and entered the main part of his house. His mother stood at the table, she turned to face him, giving him a sweet smile.
“Good morning, did you sleep well?” Red said nothing in reply, and his mother continued speaking after a pause.
“Oh that reminds me, Professor Oak wanted to see you, I expect you want to go see him right away. But don’t go on another adventure without at least calling me okay dear? I like to know where you are.” After she smiled, she turned and went back to staring at the table. Red turned and gently strolled toward the door. She had stared at that table for over two years. Gently opening the door, he took a moment to let his eyes adjust and gaze around the area, making note of the quaint and little town of Pallet as people trudged around in boredom.
“…” Turning, Red walked down the dirt path toward the laboratory, ignoring the grass out of the town and the water. The scenery never changed, he never changed. Walking into the lab, he paused. As he gazed to the many machines cropped around the room, he noticed two assistants that always seemed to be doing nothing.
“Ah, there you are Red; you've come right on time.” Red walked up to the middle of the room, and met with Professor Oak. He was a tall person, with gray hair and a white lab coat and a pleasant smile always on his face.
“Now I need your help to test this latest Pokémon storage system I’ve been working on. We've been testing it with freshly caught Pokémon, and we would like to test it further with something other than Rattata.” Red didn’t answer, gazing to the device on the table and the pc in the corner with the device for receiving Pokémon beside it. It had probably been taken out so they could see the results immediately.
“So Red, will you agree to test this new device?” Red turned back toward the professor, and gave a single nod. Oak smiled, walking over to the table and motioning to the device.
“Ok well put on this watch, we’re calling it the Pc Automatic Storage System. Or ‘Pass’ for short.” Red walked over to the table and gazed down at the watch on the table. It had a small screen on it with the menu’s that were on the larger pc screens, one such currently in the other corner of the room. There were a few buttons to move around the menu’s, and had a red wristband to hold the device to the holders arm. Red picked up the device, and put it on his arm.
“Excellent, ok now press the down and up arrow buttons to navigate the menu. Red is cancel, blue is enter, and to access your current party is yellow. You also have the left and right arrows for moving around the boxes.” Red quickly familiarised himself with navigating around the menu’s, gazing at his Pokémon boxes with all his Pokémon inside.
“Ok, now if you go to the deposit menu a small compartment should open-like that!” Red had moved his hand away from his body as a small round cup appeared from one side of the Pass. He could easily see it was Pokéball sized. A menu had popped open saying ‘press ok to continue.’
“Now put a Pokéball in there, and click the 'enter' button.” Red glanced to his Pokémon, and decided on grabbing the one that contained his Ponyta. Putting it into the slot, it fitted snugly, he pressed the ok button and saw a light envelop the ball and it teleported to the machine on the other side of the room.
“Excellent, let me go and get the assistants.” Oak walked past Red and out of sight behind some machines, Red returned to gazing at the device. Picking up the Pokéball that contained the mother of the Ponyta, a beautiful Rapidash, he slotted it into the compartment after clicking on the ‘move’ option. Dragging his Rapidash icon over the Ponta icon, he expected the Pokéballs to switch and he would receive his Ponyta and the Rapidash would be stored.
“No we haven’t tested the moving function yet!” Oak’s voice sounded far away as a crackling sounded around him. Suddenly his machine beeped, and he glanced down at the screen. The 'enter' button had gotten stuck, and the two pony Pokémon were transferring between the cup on his hand, and the machine near the pc at light speed.
“Red, get rid of the machine!” Red watched as the screen beeped again, and suddenly something began to shape in the space in front of him. At first it was like a slow motion of the two Pokéballs running between the two spots, but in the space of the arc they made, downward toward the machine and upward toward his Pass, and slowly something began to form in the space between. Red tried to remove the device; however it was latched clean to his arm.
“Oh no, it’s bonded to his skin…” Red turned away from the rapidly growing oval to gaze toward Professor Oak, who was holding onto the computers as a wind began to pick up and drag papers into the slowly growing void. Their eyes met; and Oak gave Red the sorriest gaze he could muster with papers flying in front of his vision. Red turned to look at the portal, noticing how it began to draw the watch away from the edge and toward the centre, the machine on the other side was included. Red had enough time for one more reaction before he was swallowed into the portal.
“…” was all Red said, before vanishing into the darkness. The portal closed after him, it’s medium to his world gone.
Red awoke to a bright sunlight, and sat up and rubbed his forehead, feeling a headache and a small bump. Blinking his eyes a few times, he gazed around his current landscape.
“…”Red was surrounded by bright cottage houses, a small garden to his left with a fountain in the middle, and an ever growing crowd of Ponytas. Red noticed all the different colours of Ponyta and different shapes, different body parts even, and knew something was different. There were these flying Ponyta, some normal Ponyta, and some Ponyta that looked more like Rapidash then Ponyta, except for the size. Red decided he needed a name for these new Pokémon, and quickly decided some on the spot. There was the normal Ponyta, the Flyingta, and the Rapida
“Let me through, Lyra don’t you dare get any closer!” A purple Rapida with wings exited the crowd, pulling a mint green Rapida back with purple magic, Psychic was most likely. The purple one gently approached him, measuring his threat level. Red gazed closer to his feet, and saw all the papers from his world and the machine lying around him. He glanced to the Pass, and saw it was functioning normally, however he couldn’t use the move button anymore, it seeming to have vanished off the interface.
“Hello?” Red turned his gaze on the purple Rapida, who had stopped a decent distance away. Red sighed, and stood up, brushing himself off. His eyes rose as they all gasped at him, not realising how tall he was. The Mint green Rapida was staring goggle eyed at him.
“Excuse me, can you understand me?” Red turned his gaze to the purple Rapida, and gave a single nod. The Rapida frowned, her head tilting. Red could see this Pokémon was intelligent, and considered capturing it. It was friendly enough; surely it would be a good addition to the team after he levelled it up a bit?
“Uh, what’s what ball thing?” The Rapida gazed at him suspiciously as he took out a blank Pokéball and prepared to toss it. The purple had only a single moment to dodge the flying projectile, and as it hit her in the head it bounced off and a red light enveloped the Rapida. Red watched as the ball rocked once, twice, thrice, and split open in a burst of purple magic. The Rapida was now angry at him.
“…”Red was suddenly bound in the purple Psychic from earlier, and could no longer move. The Rapida glared at him, her hair in a mess after the brief stint in the Pokéball. Red had learned his lesson; he would need to weaken her next time.
“I’m Twilight Sparkle, now who and what the hell are you?”
Why not Ash?
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Ash can talk. Red can't. This is made pretty clear by the games. After all, have you ever seen him have dialogue? Anyways, I'm assuming the author chose Red because that allows for more comedic potential.
Because he's badass.
Red:.....
See? Badass.
2301829 I would guess because if it was Ash as the main character, then there wouldn't nearly be as many shenanigans as there would be with the stoic, mute character that is Red.
Shit, Red you done fucked up
Hahahaha, Twilight... almost had em, lol!
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Because Ash is annoying, and pretty stupid.
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That too.
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That too XD
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That too :P
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Well what did you expect? In a world where everything is either A: Human or B: Pokemon what was he going to think they were?
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Yep, damn!
2303587 true, but I meant going to Equestria, granted he didn't know it was gonna happen. Still, valid point you have there, Madonna
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I thought about what Red would do first for some time. This is based off game Red, not comic Red. :\ I think Comic red talks so yeah.
2304348 oh, well shit me then I haven't played Red in years, I think I lost it back in 08. Hmm, *opens drawers* found Yellow
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I actually never played red, however I've recently been playing firered, and all the main characters are much the same. Silent so that people can immerse better as said chartacter.
Except red's the only one that sits atop a mountain looking awesome.
I did read up a bit to make sure I had my facts right.
2304423 play the Johto games, he is hard to beat unless you are a higher level than him, and I mean WAY higher leveled. Personally, I didn't like the Kanto remakes, but they were fun. Loved Emerald though
Boop.
I wonder if Celestia is the Champion of this region?
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I grew up on Ruby and sapphire so :\ The quality shock kinda doesn't help if you know what I mean. I might go and play it so I know my character better, but I kinda know Red already, I mean everyone of the characters you play as is a little bit of Red.
The problem is, making him still the silent protagonist, but trying to keep my emotions out of it. Red is everyone, and no one. I have to try and make him like a layer for-
GAAH
I'm trying to make THE Red from the games, the silent guy who can be surrounded by a world made for little girls and still act as he does, a silent but strong character that doesn't give in even when the rockets have taken over or done this or that thing.
I've got this character that is really hard to describe and capture, and then I have to put him into words.
Honestly, it's a challenge that is probably going to test me with each and every sentence, but it will make me a better writer in the end cause of it. How do you describe the Red you play as during the game? He's silent, he does what he is asked without thought, he saves the world as if it was the obvious thing to do.
I have to make THE Red, and that is the greatest challenge I am going to face in this Fanfic. Not the story, not making Twilight and that act like normal, but keeping true to Red.
I have to make a 2nd person character in a 3rd person world, without giving him any emotions he would not have. Hopefully I don't let people down, and he remains Red. We shall see.
2304522 well then I have one thing, er two things to say: 1. think of him as one of the guard ponies, stoic and cold, and 2. Buona fortuna, Madonna. Buona fortuna
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Thanks, I might just need it
2304561 anytime, also, how old are you if you grew up with Ruby/Sapphire?! The way you been writing in ANY of your stories makes you seem to be my age, nineteen. Granted women are better writers in my personal opinion
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I'm 19, but I didn't get into games until late in my childhood, and I didn't have much money.
2304660 understandable, let me guess, born in mid '93? Well I'm sorry to cut this conversation short, but I have early shift tomorrow, gotta be up a 4 in the morning. Nice talking to ya again, Madonna. Good night
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He Does Not Need Any Words To Be A Badass.......
BAD ASS
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oh dear jesus christ it red...
I lost it at Rapida.
I CHOOSE YOU, PINK RAPIDA!
Bad grammar is bad.
"His mother stood at the table, she turned to face him and give him a sweet smile."
or even "She turned to face him; giving him a sweet smile."
How old are you? I'm serious, I really want to know.
At that point, I knew you were doing this directly from the game.
I normally stay away from crossover fics, but when I read in the feature box that it was Red and he was mute? I had to give it a read.
While I must agree with his logic, you used a wrong word. I think you meant 'addition' instead of 'edition'.
Also, Twilight cursing at the end threw me for a loop.
this is great! i grew up on red version and pokemon is (in MY opinion) the greats games ever can't wait to read more =D... by the way red really isn't really a mute. He just never talk to people
Usually, I would give up on a story like this. It has a few run-on sentences and some less than stellar grammar, but I'll keep reading. I suggest you get an editor before you continue, though. I can suggest some people who would be happy to edit, if you want.
2303587 Ash wasn't annoying in Hoenn or Sinnoh, and in Sinnoh he wasn't even stupid.
Unova, though...
Why did Twi curse and how does she know about hel
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He's always had a lot of naivete, but he's matured a lot, and I don't think that Unova's too bad with the chap.
Seemed fine until I realized this fic has Twicorn I mean, it's not a COMPLETE game changer, just makes things a bit less enjoyable...well, for me, at least
as it would say in HGSS:
Aww,it appered to be caught!
WOW...
I mean... just WOW.
The SHEER UNMITIGATED GALL that Red has here.
Seriously, I've never really gotten as much of a slavery vibe from Pokemon as most people, because in the games at least there isn't all that much to suggest that Pokemon are sapient. And this is obviously working off of the games, given how the character is Red and he doesn't speak. The only Pokemon that give off any sort of unsavory vibe are the ones that have Pokedex entries that state they are in some way sapient.
Still, this scenario is actually kinda twisted. A creature comes up to him, speaks to him in english, and displays genuine concern as to the state of his health and welfare, and the only thing he can think is "She'd make a good addition to my team?"
(Btw, you said edition instead of addition. That's the wrong word)
Seriously! What an asshole! His first thought isn't "Holy shit! Talking Pokemon!" or "Goodness me, what an intelligent creature!" or "what happened, where the hell am I, and how do I get back?" or "Perhaps these aren't Pokemon since Pokemon of like species all tend to look the same and these creatures all look different." He doesn't stop to consider the fact that it might be morally objectionable to capture a sapient creature to put her into what are essentially dogfights. He doesn't even feel like he owes her any courtesy or respect for showing concern for a complete stranger... an alien one at that. He doesn't even stop to consider that it MIGHT be a bad idea to try and capture a seemingly psychic, sapient creature IN FRONT OF ITS ENTIRE APPARENT HERD WITHOUT WEAKENING IT AT ALL.
Seriously. Dude has some major balls! Not much in the way of brains or moral direction, but he's got some hefty balls, I can give him that.
I've read stories that had the ponies caught like Pokemon before. Look up the story "Master" sometime. But at least those stories saw fit to put a language gap between the Ponies and the Humans. At least then it made SENSE that the humans might assume the ponies were Pokemon. This just paints Red as a sadistic moron.
(Also... Ponyta, Flyingta, and Rapida? Really? He couldn't think of anything else. Man's just that uncreative? Even though none of them, not even the earth ponies, look a thing like Ponytas? Wow. Red really is that stupid, isn't he?)
I'm really not trying to rail against your writing or anything. On the contrary, it's not all that poorly written (though there are a number of spelling and grammar errors and it could stand to slow down the pacing a little bit). But this character... Man! He's the most ballsy idiot I think I've ever seen! I actually kinda want to keep going just to see how many things he'll screw up in Equestria before he gets a clue. Guy obviously is too stupid to eat.
Any body else read the last line in Bart Simpsons voice?
I really don't like it when a great idea is written by a bad writer, and people give thumbs for the idea only. It has to be READABLE. This, to me, isn't. I'm not trying to knock the author on this; I can see the effort and practice makes perfect. Keep writing, dude, you could be a lot better soon with practice. I am really irritated by the people who give this so many thumbs that it - IN TERMS OF WRITING - simply doesn't deserve. I feel that there's way too much of this going on; if the writing isn't good, that should warrant constructive criticism, not blind aimless praise and arguments about Pokemon.
HOLY POTATO GODDESS.
Yeah, this is interesting, for sure!
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I would love to call you out on your ideas on decent writing.
I'd also like you to give me a critical analysis on this story, referencing creative writing theory.
Interesting.... Shall read on! *You have just earned a ShionLike*
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oh give him a break will ya? in fact i dont only like the idea! i like the entire story!!
it may be true that i'm easily impressed but this is the only story i have enjoyed reading on this website
but you told him what you thought and it is ok just look at what OTHERS think ok
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Because this
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2314395 my story got grammar that can give heart attack to english teachers yet it has 43 likes and 10 dislikes :/
Throw a pokeball at her wwhhyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy not.
Pallet town.... is even weirder than Red, it seems. It certainly explains a lot about the mute.
Ah red, how we love thy
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I really don't see what you see wrong with this story. The writing is perfectly fine to me. I think maybe the thoughts are choppy and simple, but I think that was a choice. Simple thoughts for a simple Pokemon Trainer.
4654505 Thee.
... wo. Twilight just swore. Now I'm MORE interested.
5629603 pissed off Twilight's very scary
If a magikarp' splash attack does no damage, then every single Pokemon move is the equivalent to a bullet or better than one. Ash has survived many Pokemon attacks therefore, ash is a superhuman that cannot be killed by bullets, knives or bombs (in some cases) therefore, do not get in a fight with ash because he will reck you