What?! Jesus Loyal, if you keep making these cliff hangers I'm going to die. Good cha- No it don't even borderline on "good"... it's Supercalifragilisticexpialidocious.
I gotta admit that I don't really see the point in lying about the cousin thing, either way she's still related. I guess it implies that Vinyl is magically talented too?
Words cannot describe how much I loved and hated this chapter. It was as amazing as everything else you've written, but we keep getting these huge cliffhangers >.< TOO MANY CLIFFHANGERS
2466786 I'm pretty open to contact, really... I'm not some snoody stuck-up author who's too holier-than-thou to reply to readers. Particularly those with good questions.
Ask any of my fans, I've given my e-mail address, skype name, LoL summoner name and whatnot out, like, frequently XD I love talking with fans of my stories.
Gahhhhhh, it pains me so to see my two favorite pon...err.... humans I suppose as the main antagonists. I'd always pictured Vinyl as almost a chilled out version of Pinkie. Life of the party, fun to be around, speaks her mind and really doesn't care who hears it, etc. This is really an interesting change from what I'm used to. Also- to those who don't understand why the whole 'sister, not cousin' thing is important, ludicrously strong magic obviously runs in the family, with both Twi and Shining as two of the most powerful unicorns....magi...bah, whatever, alive. The closer your bloodline, theoretically, the stronger your innate magical abilities. At least that's how it works in my head. ... I just can't shake the feeling that Vinyl just magicked up a bass cannon lazor
guess Rarity is now in for a beating ... and have to be rescued from twilight (again?) ... and i thought love triangels were fun haha , rectangles are even more! dunno how Octavia plays in the whole thing with Twilight and Vinyl
2470560 So it seems the portal to your brain is functional.... Oh, I LOVE what you've done with your mind by the way. The drapes are quite a nice touch.
2475303 I rather enjoy the eviscerated corpses and various bodily fluids splayed about the floor, as well. Oh, and the constant flow of insanity through the western wing is intriguing to witness. Let alone be a part of.
Because it's real. Hauntingly real. Everything is smooth and plausible going in from start to now. All characters are spot-on. The only things that lets me know that it's AU is that it's Canterlot, Ponyville, and that the characters are human with their pony personalities--otherwise I'm reliving what has happened to other friends or family in real life. Rarity is superb, Vinyl is brash, Octavia is dignified, and Twilight is...Twilight .Interesting tidbit that all of the main characters are bisexual, if not completely lesbian (definitely seeing Vinyl as butch like). And that's not a problem at all. Figured that starting this, it was going that way, but I'm not here to judge about someone's sexuality. (and for the record, I still wonder at times.)
Also the erotic scenes. Very believeable. It is definitely not just a standard giri-likes-girl, girl-scissors-girl type of work. This is beautiful, emotionally-filled romance. You can see the feelings, the understandings, the resentment, the hesitation, the experimentation, the love, the sorrow, regret---the entire spectrum of feels here. Another thing I'm enjoying this is that the scenes aren't there for the intimacy, but as just a part of a larger story. Not "porn with plot/drama", but actual erotic drama.
Also, BTW, Rarity's got to be the one on the recieving end in their next session. A lady is suppose to be able to recieve as well as give.
EDIT: There's gonna be a unwanted teleportation occuring for poor Rarity, I can see that from the cliffhanger. I hope this doesn't turn too drastic like Vinyl threatening Rarity with her life while having Rarity dangling from the edge from Octavia's high rise begging for Vinyl to see reason. And then all of a sudden, here's Twilight teleporting to the roof w/Octavia in tow and with some effort, drag Vinyl away from the edge and save Rarity from certain death of falling at least 24 stories......
F*ck! I hate finding new stories, reading them through only to get hooked and then find that the last chapter ends on a cliffhanger... I'm too invested in this! I gots to know!
EDIT: This needs more views... It's an amazingly well written and exciting fic. It deserves more appreciation. SHOW SOME LOVE PEOPLE!
I'm a bit surprised that nobody else has brought this up (though given the other major revelations in this chapter I'm not *too* surprised)... After that flashback I'm as upset with Dash as I am with Twilight. I mean yeah, I loves me some Twidash, but seriously, Dash? The element of loyalty, helping your friend cheat on your other friend? For shame. If I were Rares I wouldn't want to be near them either.
Wow. Just. Wow. You mean to tell me, that Rainbow buckin' Dash, Element of friggin' Loyalty, went behind Rarity's back, and fucked one of her best friend's 5-years-long girlfriend? What the fuck, Loyal? What the actual Flying Feathered Fuck?! Still an awesome story though. I love every minute of it.
“We went over a forty-foot cliff. When I woke up, I was in the hospital. I broke four ribs, my femur, my wrist, and suffered a severe concussion. I was cut up pretty badly, too… Twilight managed to protect us from the worst of it, though… She broke two ribs and suffered some internal bleeding.” Rarity had cried through almost the whole story, telling Octavia about how things had ended between her and Twilight. “I couldn’t stay in Ponyville after that. I tried, sure… But every time I looked at either of them, I just shut down. Sometimes I’d black out, other times I’d just burst into tears… Five years together, and I… I just wasn’t enough for her.”
Okay Twilight why and more importantly Dash why, I can't believe them you did a better bloody job of destroying your friendship than Discord, also what is going on with Celestia I'm pretty sure she would have a more than few choice words for Twilight.
What?! Jesus Loyal, if you keep making these cliff hangers I'm going to die. Good cha- No it don't even borderline on "good"... it's Supercalifragilisticexpialidocious.
Yeah...that.
Damn cliffhangers. I demand MOAR
Commence read.
Teleport....? No idea...but can't be good.
As a staunch Rarilight shipper, this is painful to me. But such a good story...
I'll be following it.
I gotta admit that I don't really see the point in lying about the cousin thing, either way she's still related. I guess it implies that Vinyl is magically talented too?
2443474 Wow whenever I get a reply from a writer its like getting a reply from an Author that you like. It always feels special.
Words cannot describe how much I loved and hated this chapter. It was as amazing as everything else you've written, but we keep getting these huge cliffhangers >.< TOO MANY CLIFFHANGERS
God...
Damn...
CliffhangaaaaaaaaaaaaaaAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAARS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
One Word: Moar.
2466786
I'm pretty open to contact, really... I'm not some snoody stuck-up author who's too holier-than-thou to reply to readers. Particularly those with good questions.
Ask any of my fans, I've given my e-mail address, skype name, LoL summoner name and whatnot out, like, frequently XD I love talking with fans of my stories.
Gahhhhhh, it pains me so to see my two favorite pon...err.... humans I suppose as the main antagonists. I'd always pictured Vinyl as almost a chilled out version of Pinkie. Life of the party, fun to be around, speaks her mind and really doesn't care who hears it, etc. This is really an interesting change from what I'm used to.
Also- to those who don't understand why the whole 'sister, not cousin' thing is important, ludicrously strong magic obviously runs in the family, with both Twi and Shining as two of the most powerful unicorns....magi...bah, whatever, alive. The closer your bloodline, theoretically, the stronger your innate magical abilities. At least that's how it works in my head.
... I just can't shake the feeling that Vinyl just magicked up a bass cannon lazor
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This is startlingly accurate.
O SHI-
SPOILERZ
2470393 Im glad to see people like you are making these awesome books.
guess Rarity is now in for a beating ... and have to be rescued from twilight (again?) ...
and i thought love triangels were fun haha , rectangles are even more! dunno how Octavia plays in the whole thing with Twilight and Vinyl
Pissing off an emotionally unstable almost-god-tier strength Magi can only end one way.
Also, that wasn't much of a talk. It was more like...
"You stay away from her."
"No, You stay away! I'm leaving!"
"Nope." *BAM*
-Fin-
2470560
So it seems the portal to your brain is functional....
Oh, I LOVE what you've done with your mind by the way. The drapes are quite a nice touch.
2475303
I rather enjoy the eviscerated corpses and various bodily fluids splayed about the floor, as well. Oh, and the constant flow of insanity through the western wing is intriguing to witness. Let alone be a part of.
I am going to fave this story.
Why?
Because it's real. Hauntingly real. Everything is smooth and plausible going in from start to now. All characters are spot-on. The only things that lets me know that it's AU is that it's Canterlot, Ponyville, and that the characters are human with their pony personalities--otherwise I'm reliving what has happened to other friends or family in real life. Rarity is superb, Vinyl is brash, Octavia is dignified, and Twilight is...Twilight .Interesting tidbit that all of the main characters are bisexual, if not completely lesbian (definitely seeing Vinyl as butch like). And that's not a problem at all. Figured that starting this, it was going that way, but I'm not here to judge about someone's sexuality. (and for the record, I still wonder at times.)
Also the erotic scenes. Very believeable. It is definitely not just a standard giri-likes-girl, girl-scissors-girl type of work. This is beautiful, emotionally-filled romance. You can see the feelings, the understandings, the resentment, the hesitation, the experimentation, the love, the sorrow, regret---the entire spectrum of feels here. Another thing I'm enjoying this is that the scenes aren't there for the intimacy, but as just a part of a larger story. Not "porn with plot/drama", but actual erotic drama.
All in all, excellent work. I'm waiting for more.
Also, BTW, Rarity's got to be the one on the recieving end in their next session. A lady is suppose to be able to recieve as well as give.
EDIT: There's gonna be a unwanted teleportation occuring for poor Rarity, I can see that from the cliffhanger. I hope this doesn't turn too drastic like Vinyl threatening Rarity with her life while having Rarity dangling from the edge from Octavia's high rise begging for Vinyl to see reason. And then all of a sudden, here's Twilight teleporting to the roof w/Octavia in tow and with some effort, drag Vinyl away from the edge and save Rarity from certain death of falling at least 24 stories......
..........man, that went dark kinda quick
F*ck! I hate finding new stories, reading them through only to get hooked and then find that the last chapter ends on a cliffhanger... I'm too invested in this! I gots to know!
EDIT: This needs more views... It's an amazingly well written and exciting fic. It deserves more appreciation. SHOW SOME LOVE PEOPLE!
*ponders quiety as he stalks this story* 2 weeks , no update :( I hope loyal is ok.
Mane Medic
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Have been focusing on Archmage the past few weeks. I might update soon, if I can't write Archmage again tonight.
Um...I...what?
WHAT
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I'm a bit surprised that nobody else has brought this up (though given the other major revelations in this chapter I'm not *too* surprised)... After that flashback I'm as upset with Dash as I am with Twilight. I mean yeah, I loves me some Twidash, but seriously, Dash? The element of loyalty, helping your friend cheat on your other friend? For shame. If I were Rares I wouldn't want to be near them either.
Wow. Just. Wow. You mean to tell me, that Rainbow buckin' Dash, Element of friggin' Loyalty, went behind Rarity's back, and fucked one of her best friend's 5-years-long girlfriend? What the fuck, Loyal? What the actual Flying Feathered Fuck?!
Still an awesome story though. I love every minute of it.
I didn't expect that to be the reason. A bit OOC for Dash, but I can let it slide.
Okay Twilight why and more importantly Dash why, I can't believe them you did a better bloody job of destroying your friendship than Discord, also what is going on with Celestia I'm pretty sure she would have a more than few choice words for Twilight.