oh boy here comes the fun..I am still curious over where Twilight stands in this. She seems to care for Rarity a lot still and even tho she was sorta sided with vinyl during the aftermath i would think she could at least hear out Rarity when the time comes. Im still curious what it was that broke those two up since we found what was the Octavia/Vinyl break point. Keep up the good work Loyal!!
You know what Loyal I think you've done something in this chapter that I thought was impossible: give me a reason to dislike Vinyl. Honest to god I didn't think it could be done. Bravo sir, can't wait to see how the diner meeting goes. Iv'e got to agree with Angel's comment as well, still insanely curious about what happened with Twilight. Ah well that's for another day. Keep up the good work!
This is the best porn I have ever read. Normally I'm not one for clop fics (yes I know the characters are human but I still think of them as ponies) but this is really good. Also what is it with lesbians and fanfic writers?
Ooooohhhhhhhh, I cannot wait for that little verbal showdown (hopefully full-on magic duel). Vinyl, bless her wubbing heart and cool demeanor in the show, is such a bitch in this fic, I want her to really... think... about what she's done to Octavia. And when I say think, I mean over a nice little bowl of pureed gelatin and water in a hospital bed while being fed through a tube. Legs and arms broken, so she'll think twice about hitting anyone ever again, and her jaw shattered so she won't talk shit about anyone ever again. I would say I hope Rarity beats her within a quarter of an inch of her life, but it's still a toss-up at this point.
Again, don't get me wrong, I love Vinyl, but I just absolutely despise her in this fic. In a good way, of course. I think it's important to have a character that you can just hate so fully. It's hard to get a character like that without he or she being just annoying. Nice work with that, as well as the rest of the fic.
why the "What are we? We can't continue until I know" Responsible Rarity and then morning comes and it's like "oooh god i'd really like if our lips could make some magic" It's-Okay-To-Be-Hot-For-Octy Rarity?
Withholding it in the first place was actually pretty powerful, considering just how much you've built up their chemistry. It served to accentuate the tension in the plot really nicely. For me, at least, the morning shower scene sort of undermined that foundation...
Sorry for the torrent of comments. If I could remember all my tribulations and such through to the end, I would, and would give you a single dose of them.
oh boy here comes the fun..I am still curious over where Twilight stands in this. She seems to care for Rarity a lot still and even tho she was sorta sided with vinyl during the aftermath i would think she could at least hear out Rarity when the time comes. Im still curious what it was that broke those two up since we found what was the Octavia/Vinyl break point. Keep up the good work Loyal!!
I am genuinely looking fowards to more of this fic
thumbs up/fav coming your way
You know what Loyal I think you've done something in this chapter that I thought was impossible: give me a reason to dislike Vinyl. Honest to god I didn't think it could be done. Bravo sir, can't wait to see how the diner meeting goes. Iv'e got to agree with Angel's comment as well, still insanely curious about what happened with Twilight. Ah well that's for another day. Keep up the good work!
Just one thing-
Rarity slipped back into the car, but her smile wilted when she saw Rarity’s expression.
I assume an 'Octavia' was supposed to be in there somewhere?
Other than that, fantastic as always. Dis gon b gud.
I've been looking forward to these chapters more than Archmage, which is really saying something. Looking forward to so much more
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Quote the whole thing next time, and don't scare me like that >.>
This is the best porn I have ever read. Normally I'm not one for clop fics (yes I know the characters are human but I still think of them as ponies) but this is really good. Also what is it with lesbians and fanfic writers?
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It's just simpler to write. Holds my interest much more. That's my personal opinion.
Commence read.
Well...now to see how they interact...
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Sowwy; that's what happens when you read things at 4AM >_>
that's going to end in a desaster ...
let me guess twilight have to rescue rarity
Ooooohhhhhhhh, I cannot wait for that little verbal showdown (hopefully full-on magic duel). Vinyl, bless her wubbing heart and cool demeanor in the show, is such a bitch in this fic, I want her to really... think... about what she's done to Octavia. And when I say think, I mean over a nice little bowl of pureed gelatin and water in a hospital bed while being fed through a tube. Legs and arms broken, so she'll think twice about hitting anyone ever again, and her jaw shattered so she won't talk shit about anyone ever again. I would say I hope Rarity beats her within a quarter of an inch of her life, but it's still a toss-up at this point.
Again, don't get me wrong, I love Vinyl, but I just absolutely despise her in this fic. In a good way, of course. I think it's important to have a character that you can just hate so fully. It's hard to get a character like that without he or she being just annoying. Nice work with that, as well as the rest of the fic.
Wait, a date? So Rarity will be cheating on the person that she cheated with?
This will end in one of two ways; in a hospital room or a child's splash pool filled with chocolate pudding...and Jello shots.
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why the "What are we? We can't continue until I know" Responsible Rarity and then morning comes and it's like "oooh god i'd really like if our lips could make some magic" It's-Okay-To-Be-Hot-For-Octy Rarity?
Withholding it in the first place was actually pretty powerful, considering just how much you've built up their chemistry. It served to accentuate the tension in the plot really nicely. For me, at least, the morning shower scene sort of undermined that foundation...
Sorry for the torrent of comments. If I could remember all my tribulations and such through to the end, I would, and would give you a single dose of them.
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Unfortunately, I have to agree.