On a side note, I thought it was off that Sweetie Belle signed the note as 'Belle'. Isn't that their last name? That would be like a letter ending in '... Your faithful student, Sparkle.' Minor gripe, but it just doesn't sit right with me.
2264438 My headcanon is as such: Their names (Both parts) are not really their first and last names, but their whole first name. Almost like a hyphen. "Belle" would just be a sort of petname. Something affectionate and short. Kind of like someone named "Billie-Jean" just "Billie" or "Jean"
It was shortly after seven, and Rarity had to begin preparations. The performance was that evening, and she would need all morning to prepare. Rather than fuss with it later, Rarity dressed herself for the symphony that evening, settling on a black dress that covered her from neck to ankle.
Rather than fuss with it later, Rarity dressed herself for the symphony that morning, I believe.
Also, there's an instance of the word "hangar" being used instead of "hanger."
Rather than fuss with it later, Rarity dressed herself for the symphony that morning, I believe.
Actually, no, "that evening" is correct. The grammar 'the X that Y' (X = symphony, Y = evening) usually has Y referring to when X happens - and the symphony is in the evening.
Oh, the suspense
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Dat suspense... DAT CLIFFHANGER
I'm really loving this story though :D So much more detail and depth and fine details than in Rhythm and Tempo, and I love it
The suspense! It kills!
Seriously though great update, I'm on the edge of my seat waiting for the unveiling.
Commence read.
She will be B-e-a-utiful.
I was honestly tempted to punch my computer screen at that cliffhanger.
very nice i am really getting into this story, this feels very similar to a diferent kind of love/ lilyverse
The next chapter.
I want.
On a side note, I thought it was off that Sweetie Belle signed the note as 'Belle'. Isn't that their last name? That would be like a letter ending in '... Your faithful student, Sparkle.' Minor gripe, but it just doesn't sit right with me.
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My headcanon is as such: Their names (Both parts) are not really their first and last names, but their whole first name. Almost like a hyphen. "Belle" would just be a sort of petname. Something affectionate and short. Kind of like someone named "Billie-Jean" just "Billie" or "Jean"
OH YOU ! ... that was mean !!
if i was rich... i would punch my computer screen every time i hit a cliffhanger... unless the rest of the story was already up, which it is
ey bby
I like the story so far!!!!!!!
your dialogue tags (at least in the first chapter or two) were capitalized when they shouldn't have been but nothing else has stuck out significantly.
One other thing:
It was shortly after seven, and Rarity had to begin preparations. The performance was that evening, and she would need all morning to prepare. Rather than fuss with it later, Rarity dressed herself for the symphony that evening, settling on a black dress that covered her from neck to ankle.
Rather than fuss with it later, Rarity dressed herself for the symphony that morning, I believe.
Also, there's an instance of the word "hangar" being used instead of "hanger."
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Actually, no, "that evening" is correct. The grammar 'the X that Y' (X = symphony, Y = evening) usually has Y referring to when X happens - and the symphony is in the evening.