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Sunshine's travels

Sunshine's dream is to travel around Equestria but she is not allowed to leave the Crystal empire. Soon other ponies make fun of her because she does not have her cutie mark so she runs away to follow her dream and hopes to get her cutie mark on the way.

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Candle_Jack

Candle_Jack #1 · Feb 10th, 2013 · · · chapter 1 ·

Nice start to the story, but you could be more descriptive. What did the falls look like? What does Victoria look like, she sounds like an important character, but we don't know who she is beyond what we can infer, and that she's young. Also, the Crystal empire is quite far away from Equestria, but she arrived at Neighagra falls pretty quickly, did she take the train? Maybe have her explore the landscape and check out some of the wildlife. I'll Fav to see where this goes, good luck.